argument2 【clover】第二次小组作业 by 桔子susan

桔子susanUID: 2754084

2.The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners
from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set
of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what
colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average
property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property
values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on
landscaping and housepainting."



In this argument, the author concludes that in order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting should be adopted, for in seven years, since nearby Brookville community adopted a similair set of resrictions, the average property values there have raised. However I find this argument contains several facets that are questionable.

First of all, no ample evidences show the adoption of the set of restrictions is the main reason, which cause the raise of property values in Brookville. The arguer fails to mention other possible factors result in the increase, especially in a considerable period of time. May it is a period of economic prosperity, people are more eager to invest on house property. May it is the comfortable
habitat there in Brookville that attracts the costomers. If the set of restrictions do not play an important role in the raise, the conclusion is obviously unwarranted.

Even the set of restrictions is accounted for the Brookville’s rising property, we still could not draw the conclusion that a similar set of restrictions could make contribution to the rise of propety in Deerhaven Acres. The arguer provides no information about the differences between the two communities. If the potential housebuyers in Deerhaven Acres prefer diverse exterior appearance rather than undiversified look, the adoption of these restrictions is bound not to bring raise to the property. Last but not least, even if Deerhaven’s housebuyers are attactived by these resstrictions, no evidence shows that the propety would raise. Propety values are influenced by the local economic environment, if the local economy is at a low point, the real estate can not cast off the influence of it. The committee can not ensure the assumpution is reliable.

In conclusion, this argument is not so convince as it stands. In order to make it more persuasive, the arguer should provide more information about the true factors that have contributed to the rising of property in the neighborhood community and Deerhaven’s housebuyers’ desire for buying a house.

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桔子susanUID: 2754084

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In this argument, the author concludes that in order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting should be adopted. For the reason that in seven years, since nearby Brookville community adopted a similair set of resrictions, the average property values there have raised. However I find this argument contains several facets that are questionable.

First of all, no ample evidences show the adoption of the set of restrictions is the main reason, which cause the raise of property values in Brookville. The arguer fails to mention other possible factors result in the increase. May it is the comfortable habitat there in Brookville that attracts the customers. In addtion, seven years has past, we get no information about the change in this considerable period of time. May it is a period of inflation, which is the main reason caused the increase of average property values in Brookville. If the set of restrictions do not play an important role in the raise, the conclusion is obviously unwarranted.

Even the set of restrictions is accounted for the Brookville’s tripled property, we still could not draw the conclusion that a similar set of restrictions could make contribution to the rise of propety in Deerhaven Acres. The arguer provides no information about the differences between the two communities. If the potential housebuyers in Deerhaven Acres prefer diverse exterior appearance rather than undiversified look, which may be the current characteristic of Deerhaven Acres'houses, the adoption of these restrictions may not help to bring raise to the property.


Last but not least, even if Deerhaven's housebuyers are attactived by these resstrictions, no evidence shows that the propety would raise. Propety values are influenced by the local economic environment, if the local economy is at a low point, the real estate can not cast off the influence of it. The committee can not ensure the assumpution is reliable.

In conclusion, this argument is not so convince as it stands. In order to make it more persuasive, the arguer should provide more information about the true factors that have contributed to the rising of property in the neighborhood community and Deerhaven’s housebuyers’ desire for buying a house.

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First of all, no ample evidences show the adoption of the set of restrictions is the main reason, which cause the raise of property values in Brookville. The arguer fails to mention other possible factors result in the increase. May it is the comfortable habitat there in Brookville that attracts the customers. In addtion, seven years has past, we get no information about the change in this considerable period of time. May it is a period of inflation, which is the main reason caused the increase of average property values in Brookville. If the set of restrictions do not play an important role in the raise, the conclusion is obviously unwarranted.

Even the set of restrictions is accounted for the Brookville’s tripled property, we still could not draw the conclusion that a similar set of restrictions could make contribution to the rise of propety in Deerhaven Acres. The arguer provides no information about the differences between the two communities. If the potential housebuyers in Deerhaven Acres prefer diverse exterior appearance rather than undiversified look, which may be the current characteristic of Deerhaven Acres'houses, the adoption of these restrictions may not help to bring raise to the property.


Last but not least, even if Deerhaven's housebuyers are attactived by these resstrictions, no evidence shows that the propety would raise. Propety values are influenced by the local economic environment, if the local economy is at a low point, the real estate can not cast off the influence of it. The committee can not ensure the assumpution is reliable.

In conclusion, this argument is not so convince as it stands. In order to make it more persuasive, the arguer should provide more information about the true factors that have contributed to the rising of property in the neighborhood community and Deerhaven’s housebuyers’ desire for buying a house.


文章比较规矩，语法也没什么错误，我就不做同义词替换了~~
问题：最后一段是不是也是他因论证呢？不如归到第一段，
        另外，第一段的7years 我习惯拆开再攻击一下，单独就是个问题~~