Issue147 传统和现代的碰撞

Jamin_CheungUID: 2752925

ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."

Nowadays, with the explosion of science and techonology, more and more focus are attracted on the issue whether tradition and modernization are mutually exclusive. I concede that in some conditions, tradition seems to be challenged by modernization, but I hold that they are not absolutely incompatible in such fields as arts, science.

There is no denying that some conflicts lie in our society between tradition and modernization. We can find modernization is threathening traditions. In the past decade, more and more unmechanized workshops have to go bankrupt due to the emergence of modern group companies, which own much more market shares with the competition of cheaper mass productions. As a result, individual innovations are flooded by the fast and constant duplication of models in the assembly lines, one main characteristics of mordernization. It also happens in our daily life. Keyboard is gradually replacing pen with widely spread of computers. Skyscraps stand where there used to be traditional houses such as courtyards in Beijing owing to the urbanization. Letters are fading out being substituted by emails and instant messaging as we enter the information age. Obviously, we have been giving up much tradition when keeping in step with rapidly changing modern life.

Yet, some tradition are still preserved in the process of modernization. To some extent, it is modernization that does a favor to the conservation of tradition. To bolster my viewpoint, we can go to a museum. When we appreciate beautiful and mysterious antiques behind windows, we have to thank modern science and techonology for their help to explore and re-appear these precious treasures in history, which represent a piece of wonderful culture. Without advanced probes, it might have continued to be buried in the dark Beyond doubts, it's the modernization that provides us the opportunities to read real history. Another example is the preservation of old buildings. Modern crafts are applied into strenthening old buildings by techonologists to enable the buildings to experience more history. Therefore, modernization is not always the enemy to tradition but even becomes a friend.

Actually, modernization originates from tradition. In other words, if we are able to look further , it is only because we stand on the shoulder of the ancestors. Despite various forms of arts, artists try to express the same feeling with the original, say the persuing love, beauty and truth in masterpieces. The innovations come from the same nature of human beings like what was embodied in cave pictures, literatures written in ancient words and so on. Let's come back to the instance about unmechanized workplace referred to above. In fact, not all fatories were pulled down. Some survived, such as Merk Medicine Cooperation. Facing modernization, the owners of some old-brand business changed their old patterns of medicine production and management. Scientific control of craft process, temperature and evironment during the production and administration learned from modern advancement contributes to develop a more efficient international company. From these, we find modernization inherites treasures from tradition and improve it in return.

To sum up, never can we judge tradition or modernization isolately.
It's unfair for us to choose one from them since they are not incompatible but linked internally. Modernization is merely the result of growth of tradition. They are mutually promotive to each other.

zhyghostUID: 2509165

看了这么多，总算看到一篇好的~~如果是按时间写完而且没看资料的话，得好好地赞一下~~不过，第四段后半段有些混乱，像是在凑字数，而且和第三段观点有些重复，虽然在内容上不同~~我想你第四段应该是想主要说文化传承，是过去对现在的影响，而不是现在反作用于过去，所以把四段后半段搁在第三段会好一些~~当然这些都是我的拙见，非官方说法。~~已经非常好了，4~5分之间吧，至少。~~

quechuangyiUID: 2761926

Nowadays, with the explosion of science and techonology, more and more focus are

attracted on the issue whether tradition and modernization are mutually exclusive. I

concede that in some conditions, tradition seems to be challenged by modernization, but I

hold that they are not absolutely incompatible in such fields as arts, science.

There is no denying that some conflicts lie in our society between tradition and

modernization. （这句话有两层含义，包括传统制约modernization，和modernization威胁传

统，而下文只写了其中一点，因此这句是否需要，可以再考虑一下）We can find

modernization is threathening traditions. In the past decade, more and more

unmechanized workshops have to go bankrupt due to the emergence of modern group

companies, which own much more market shares with the competition of cheaper mass

productions. As a result, individual innovations are flooded by the fast and constant

duplication of models in the assembly lines, one main characteristics of mordernization. （

此处想举出另外一个证明现代化在威胁传统的例子，但略显跳跃。可以用上适当的连接词，或

者稍微展开说明一下”It also happens in our daily life.“的it具体指什么。）It also happens in

our daily life. Keyboard is gradually replacing pen with （the）widely spread of computers.

Skyscraps stand where there used to be traditional houses such as courtyards in Beijing

owing to the urbanization.（北京还有总有未被skyscraper占据的地方。。） Letters are

fading out being substituted by emails and instant messaging as we enter the information

age. Obviously, we have been giving up much tradition when keeping in step with rapidly

changing modern life.
例子举得简练而充分。

Yet, some tradition are still preserved in the process of modernization. To some extent, it

is modernization that does a favor to the conservation of tradition. To bolster my

viewpoint, we can go to a museum. When we appreciate beautiful and mysterious

antiques behind windows, we have to thank modern science and techonology for their

help to explore and re-appear these precious treasures in history, which represent a piece

of wonderful culture. Without advanced probes, it might have continued to be buried in

the dark Beyond doubts, it's the modernization that provides us the opportunities to read

real history. Another example is the preservation of old buildings. Modern crafts are applied

into strenthening old buildings by techonologists to enable the buildings to experience

more history（使建筑物更经久不衰，似乎有更好的说法，experience more history有点怪）.

Therefore, modernization is not always the enemy to tradition but even becomes a friend.

Actually, modernization originates from tradition. In other words, if we are able to look

further , it is only because we stand on the shoulder of the ancestors（既然有能力说到这

句话，为什么不换成从名人嘴里说出，岂不是更好？）. Despite various forms of arts, artists

try to express the same feeling with the original, say the persuing love, beauty and truth

in （their）masterpieces. The innovations come from the same nature of human beings

like what was embodied in cave pictures, literatures written in ancient words and so on.

Let's come back to the instance about unmechanized workplace referred to above. In

fact, not all fatories were pulled down. Some survived, such as Merk Medicine

Cooperation. Facing modernization, the owners of some old-brand business changed their

old patterns of medicine production and management. Scientific control of craft process,

temperature and evironment during the production and administration learned from

modern advancement contributes to develop a more efficient international company. From

these, we find modernization inherites treasures from tradition and improve it in return.（

此段论述相比前两段，比较混乱，而且默克的例子，可能你本人也觉得应该放在前一段比较好

吧？像举艺术流派的例子，其实可以考虑一下古典主义的，或者正如你文中所说艺术家倾向表

达那些永恒主题，但你欠缺把这一点完美的表述出来。）

To sum up, never can we judge tradition or modernization isolately.
It's unfair for us to choose one from them since they are not incompatible but linked

internally. Modernization is merely the result of growth of tradition. They are mutually

promotive to each other.
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manfred_huiUID: 2689901

1# Jamin_Cheung

真得写得不错啊，学习了。
记得上周也改过LZ的一篇，看来是越写越好了