issue7 求拍了

charlesAFAUID: 2750393

I7
"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."



According to the author, video camera can provide an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life, therefore, the author drawn the conclusion that video camera is better than written record in the aspect of recording. From my perspective, I fundamentally agree that the video camera can give an accurate and convincing record of modern life to a large extend. However, under certain conditions, video camera cannot provide an accurate and convincing record at all. Further more, one cannot simply decide that video camera or written records which one is more important.

In the first place, I will stand by the speaker’s statement insofar as video camera can make a accurate and convincing picture to some degree. There is no denying that video camera is designed to help remembering the real fact. And the high technology makes the video camera no lies. Examples are not very far to look for, if one want to review the O’Sullivian’s famous table tennis, a video match is the best choice. Viewers care more about every stroke details which the empire of table tennis made. Thus, the camera provides an accurate rematch. Another example is about laws. The video in public always be provided as evidence when crime occurs nearby. Such evidences are more cogent and convincing in the court. That is why camera can provide an convincing and accurate record.

While it is important to note the necessity of the convincing and accurate about video camera, it is also important or not more important to heed that video camera is not always that accurate and convincing. What camera cannot provide for accurate records is about feelings and ideas. As is known to all, the camera cannot think or analysis and it can only record the phenomena. However, ideas and feelings need describe and camera has no such ability. Also, with the developing of technology, more and more computer high hand can change the information the video want to express. The similar scenes are almost every where in movies such as prison break or 24 hours. Judging from these aspects, videos are not reliable. In short, the author’s issue about an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life needs reconsideration.

Further more, even if the function of video camera is irreplaceable, that doesn’t mean it is more important than written records. Track back to the history, people are more likely to record things by using the formation of written on account of the papers’ feature of cheap, easily preserved and convenient. Such formation of records in history has been becoming the regulation. Even now when related to laws, the code will be regulated in papers, but not videos. It goes without saying that importance of written records is never diminished. On the other hand, written records can make what videos cannot. It can describe things! It supplies the videos’ shortages and solves the problem of expressing ideas and feelings.

Consequently, due to the analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may be safely to arrive at the conclusion that the key to discuss the issue is based on how to understand the reliability about video camera and make clear about functions of written records in the life of contemporary. Finally, compared with both roles they have played, we need call for a balance on the basis of people’s demands between video and written records.


因果+对比
原题的思路：A的作用->A比B好
A=camera
B=written records
提纲：
A的作用确实不错 provide convincing and accurate
论证过程
1看过去比赛
2作为证据
A在某些情况下，不能发挥其作用 convincing and accurate is open to question
论证过程：
1收到限制，思想和感受不能被记录，准确性受质疑
2科技发展，容易被修改，可信性受质疑
B的作用也是不可替代，因此不能说A比B好。
论证过程：
1records 是传统，沿用至今，约定俗成。
2弥补video不足。

irvine666UID: 2575525

1# charlesAFA

I7
"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

According to the author, video camera can provide an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life, therefore, the author drawn the conclusion that video camera is better than written record in the aspect of recording. From my perspective, I fundamentally agree that the video camera can give an accurate and convincing record of modern life to a large extend（用代词替换）. However, under certain conditions, video camera cannot provide an accurate and convincing record（三句话里面出现3次，没有别的办法了么？） at all. Further more,（So） one cannot simply decide that video camera or written records which one is more important.（语法错误）

In the first place, I will stand by the speaker’s statement insofar as video camera can make a accurate and convincing picture to some degree（红色的词意思重复，另外你真的只能描述accurate and convincing么？）. There is no denying that video camera is designed to help remembering the real fact. And the high technology makes the video camera no lies（你语法真需要大补了..）. Examples are not very far to look for, if one want to review the O’Sullivian’s famous table tennis, a video match is the best choice（why? where is detailed explanation? such as conveying the feeling, visual shock, precise description, and every tiny action of players）. Viewers(the most important things are not based on what viewers want to get, but what videos can give to viewers.) care more about every stroke details which the empire of table tennis made. Thus, the camera provides an accurate(precise, detailed, exact...) rematch. Another example is about laws. The video in public always be provided（why? U should interpret it clearly in relation to ur description such as "accurate"） as evidence when crime occurs nearby. Such evidences are more cogent and convincing in the court. That is why camera can provide an convincing and accurate record.(...)

While it is important to note the necessity of the convincing and accurate about video camera,(while表伴随是必须同时发生...不能用一般现在时，可以改成although，though，或者albeit) it is also important or not more（no more） important to heed that video camera is not always that accurate and convincing（你这句话的意思：虽然承认V很精确，但是V不是一直精确。那么它到底是精确，还是不精确？）. What camera cannot provide for accurate records is about feelings and ideas（继续出语法问题）. As is known to all, the camera cannot think or analysis（囧，难道你认为文稿会？这里是你的表达没清楚。misleading） and it can only record the phenomena（用词错误）. However, ideas and feelings need describe（被动语态） and camera has no such ability. Also, with the developing of technology, more and more computer high hand can change(这些词都用的不准) the information the video want to express. The similar scenes are almost every where in movies such as prison break（大写） or 24 hours. Judging from these aspects, videos are not reliable（你前面有提到not reliable么？）. In short, the author’s issue about an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life needs reconsideration.

Further more, even if the function of video camera is irreplaceable, that（it） doesn’t mean it（video） is more important than written records. Track（Retrospect to，你的用词很烂，而且固定搭配也选错，看得出来积累少了） back to the history, people are more likely to record things by using the formation（form） of written on account of the papers’ feature of cheap, easily preserved and convenient（这里要用动名词表特征）. Such formation of records in history has been becoming（become不能用进行时表一直发生） the regulation. Even now when related to laws, the code will be regulated in papers, but not videos（你这个是为了证明easily preserved and convenient？显然不是）. It goes without saying that importance of written records is never diminished. On the other hand, written records can make what videos cannot. It can describe things!（It can impart opinions of writters会好的多...） It supplies the videos’ shortages and solves the problem of expressing ideas and feelings.

Consequently, due to the analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may be safely to arrive at the conclusion that the key to discuss the issue is based on how to understand the reliability about video camera and make clear about functions of written records in the life of contemporary. Finally, compared with both roles they have played, we need call for a balance on the basis of people’s demands between video and written records.

charlesAFAUID: 2750393

The video camera can provide an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life, therefore, the author drawn the conclusion that video camera is better than written record in the aspect of recording. From my perspective, I fundamentally agree that the author’s opinion to a large extend. However, under certain conditions, video camera cannot play the role as the author inferred on record at all. One step closer, one cannot simply decide that which one of the video camera and written records is more important.

In the first place, I will stand by the speaker’s statement insofar as video camera can make an exact and convincing picture. There is no denying that video camera is designed to help remembering the real fact. And the high technology makes the video camera have the ability to replay the event in the past precisely. For example, if one want to review the O’Sullivian’s famous table tennis, viewers will care more about every stroke details which the empire of table tennis made. Since the video camera record the match in every interesting moment with every specific movement, there is no doubt that a video match is the best choice. Another example is about laws. The video in public always be provided as evidence when crime occurs nearby. Such evidences are more cogent and convincing in the court. Based on two examples discussed above, I can explain that camera can provide a convincing and accurate record.

Albeit it is important to note the necessity of the convincing and accurate about video camera, it is also important or not more important to heed that video camera is not always that precise and persuasive under certain restrictions. In terms of things involved in feelings and ideas,
camera cannot provide for accurate records. Since the camera cannot record things related to think or analysis, it can only record the picture and sound. On the contrary, ideas and feelings can be described by written records. That is to say, the video camera has no ability to offer an accurate feelings and ideas. On the other hand, in this era of technology innovations, more and more computer users can modify the information the video want to express. The evidence which be hold by video may be tampered. The similar scenes are almost every where in movies such as Prison Break or 24 Hours. Judging from this aspect, videos are not convincing. Grounding on such examples which discussed as a whole, the author needs to reconsider the issue about an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life.

Further more, even if the function of video camera is irreplaceable, that doesn’t mean it is more important than written records. The position of written records can trace back to the history, people is more likely to record things by using the formation of written on account of the papers’ feature of cheap, easily preserving and convenience. Since these features are impressed in mind from ancient times, written recording became a kind of tradition and such formation of records in history became the regulation. Even now when related to laws, the code will be regulated in papers, but not videos. It goes without saying that importance of written records is never diminished. In addition, written records can make what videos cannot. It can describe things which need to be analyzed or reasoned! It supplies the videos’ shortages and solves the problem of expressing ideas and feelings.

Consequently, due to the analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may be safely to arrive at the conclusion that the key to discuss the issue is based on how to understand the reliability about video camera and make clear about functions of written records in the life of contemporary. Finally, compared with both roles they have played, we need call for a balance on the basis of people’s demands between video and written records.