2.9-2.12 ；2.18-2.24作文互改作业 继续求拍--奇流沙

ivybettyUID: 2328308

When one was young, his/her parents helped to make decisions. Once the person becomes an adult, he/she has to make the decision by his/her willing. Sometimes, they let others make decisions for them; sometimes they make decisions by themselves. In my view, it all depends. . a0 C8 A( K& A$ C' l( h. @

In some causal situations, people may let others make decisions. Such decisions do not have serious impacts on their interests, or on the other saying, their future. For instance, I used to going out with my friends casually. And we can not just idle around on the street and have to decide where to go. We come out with couples of choices, and then go to the place which is mostly voted. In this situation, we have to satisfy most people’s request. As a result, we just need to express our own desire instead of making decisions.很现实的例子.

In more serious situations, we have to make decisions by ourselves. Like applying for the university, choosing our career, deciding an investment or something else, we have to make decisions by ourselves. First of all, these decisions involve one’s own interest and future, most people will not let others to decide his/her career in the future. Secondly, if we let others make decisions for us, they might not be able to assume the liability. What if such decisions get confirmed to be awful someday in the future? What if we begin to regret after the decisions have been made? We may be not so rational to blame it to the one who made the decision for us, though it was us who let others made decisions. Take myself as an example; I am very regretful that my dad made me choose chemistry as my major. At that time, I wanted to enroll in the Institute of Commerce. In addition, most people will only let others give advices when they need to make decisions. My uncle is playing the stock market. He listened to others’ experiences and advices. But he never let others to decide which piece of stock he should invest. He just follows his own feeling. Since such decisions concern one’s own profits, most people will not let others make decisions.逻辑清晰，表述明确。

With the reasons I mentioned above, I can say that whether most people make decisions by themselves or others all depends on the different situations. In the casual situation, both are possible. But when it comes to the more serious situation, people can only get the satisfying results with their own decisions.
很好的一篇文章,气势磅礴!架构清晰.
有点疑惑就是:situation & decision是不是要用复数形式?

奇流沙UID: 2698749

花了一个小时，唉，是废话最多的一次~麻烦修改~
2.23 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because people are too busy doing many different things, they can do few things well.
Since the society is developing day by day, our life has become more and more complicated. We have to deal with a lot of thing in the daily life. But can we just blame our low efficient to the large amount of different things we encountered in our daily life? Or on the other saying, is it the reason why people can only do few things well that they are too busy doing many different things? I do not think so.

In the higher positions, some people have the responsibility to do a lot of things. Like the business leaders, they have to deal with countless reports, endless meetings and a lot of different people; or the doctors, they have to be cautious for every patients even they are to be exhausted. But the real world has never offered them chances to explain why they did not do well. The business leaders are propelled to coax with any situations in the fierce commercial campaign. The doctors have the holy obligation to cure any patients with no spare effort. Though they are so busy with these things, they never shift the blame that they did not do well to the large amount of things. Take my mother as an example, she is an accountant. Also, she has to shift her role from a busy accountant to a shrewd housekeeper after she gets home. She has to assume the accounting of two different companies. I can imagine how busy she is when she is working. Not to mention the endless housework. But as I see it, my mum plays well in both roles. She never complains about her burden. Instead, she arranges her schedule compactly to get everything done well.

Admittedly,  people will not do things well when there are a lot thing to be processed. But I will never agree that the amount of things can be the excuse. Though different thing smay distract a person’s energy, if the person made a complete and reasonable arrangement, I believe everything would be solved well. Some people can just do few things well. But in my opinion, when they are to deal with not that many things, they can still do just few things well. Take two of my friends as comparison. They are both applying for the graduate school and working as a lab assistant of professors. One applied for about 20 schools and kept going to the laboratory to do experiments. The other one left the laboratory for the reason that she is applying for future education. But, in fact, she just applied for 4 schools. What she has done is wasting time on unimportant things. As a result, the one who applied for 20schools has received lots of offers, and the other one has not got anything. I think if she has better arranged her time, the result would be better.

As the reasons I mentioned above, I firmly disagree with such statements. The large amount of things can not be the reasons or excuse why we have not done things well. We should look for the reason from ourselves.

slimhUID: 2438517

2.22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves. When one was young, his/her parents helped to make decisions. Once the person becomes an adult, he/she has to make the decision by his/her willing. Sometimes, they let others make decisions for them; sometimes they make decisions by themselves. In my view, it all depends. （个人意见哈，整个手段耳朵童鞋用了单数形式，我个人读的时候his/her这个东西实在是不好看啊。。只是我个人意见，因为我喜欢用复数） In some causal situation(situations), people may let others make decisions(建议后面加for them，因为是第一句嘛，强调一下会更明确一点) . Such decisions do not have serious impact on their interests, or on the other saying, their future. For instance, I used to going(go) out with my friends casually. And we can not just idle around on the street and have to decide where to go. We come out with couples of (a couple of是我常用的，couples of 前面加many couples of也见过，就是couples of的没见过，欢迎讨论）choices, and then go to the place which is mostly voted. In this situation, we have to satisfy most people’s request. As a result, we just need to express our own desire instead of making decisions. N' P  X& R4 ` In more serious situations, we have to make decisions by ourselves. Like applying for the university, choosing our career, deciding an investment or something else, we have to make decisions by ourselves. First of all, these decisions involve one’s own interest and future, most people will not let others to decide his/her career in the future. Secondly, if we let others make decisions for us, they might not be able to assume the liability. What if such decisions get confirmed to be awful someday in the future? What if we begin to regret after the decisions have been made? We may be not so rational to blame it to the one who made the decision for us, though it was us who let others made decisions. Take myself as an example;（介个标点是前后不一致的时候用的吧？） I am very regretful that my dad made me choose chemistry as my major. At that time, I wanted to enroll in the Institute of Commerce. In addition, most people will only let others give advices（advice) when they need to make decisions. My uncle is playing the stock market(玩股票。。楼主直译的么？貌似不地道呀。。take stocks in**company买**公司的股票，这样的句型使有的的) . He listened to others’ experiences and advices. But he never let others to decide which piece of stock he should invest. He just follows his own feeling. Since such decision concern one’s own profits, most people will not let others make decisions. 1 _2 T# O2 S; H' b0 { With the reasons I mentioned above, I can say that whether most people make decision by themselves or others all depends on the different situation. In the casual situation, both are possible. But when it comes to the more serious situation, people can only get the satisfying results with their own decisions. 总结：整个文章很流畅，词汇语法都没有问题。 观点吧，第3段很强大，所以比起来第2段有气无力地感觉。建议，第2段可以强调挑地方的时候，因为不涉及到大家的利益等因素，所以这种情况下接受别人的选择观点，个人认为这样子可以形成平衡感。。 整体还是很不错的！ 加油！

slimhUID: 2438517

when all these ideas concluded in one way--这个是我情急之下直译过来的，想表达的意思就是“当这些方法被聚在一起的时候”会产生比较强大的效果。。

anyway，我也觉得这句很chinglish，有没有好的句子可以表现出来他的意思呢？望高人指点。。

as known to all，这个以前上新东方的时候那个写作老师推荐的，或者说什么it is known to all，这样子的句型。。我还真不知道这个有歧义呢。。谢谢指点。。

奇流沙UID: 2698749

2.24 Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.
As the world is developing at such a rapid pace, we are always curious about what is happening outside our city or country. Knowledge from the television and Internet can no more satisfy our curiosity. Someone choose to move to another place to witness the development or because of some other reasons. But should people keep moving all the time? Or should they just live in the city or country all life? I definitely agree with the latter choice.
                                               
Moving to some places with which one is not familiar may bring the sense of fresh. When people move to the new place, they have chances to get to know the culture and the custom. But if they do not stay in the place for a long time, what they get to know may be superficial. The deeper culture can not be dug out with the short visit. The most fundamental things are hidden behind the surface of the city or the country. The knowledge of a city or a country is like the wine, it get better when it grows old. On the other hand, people can choose to travel to the place where they want to visit, which will give them the sense of fresh, too.

In addition, the more friends and relatives people will get as they live in one place longer. Friends and relatives become the essential elements of the huge relationship net in which the one becomes the center. When one is sad, these people will give comfort; when one is happy, he/she always can get someone to share. Once one move to another place, he has to spend time to set up such a relationship net, no matter how sociable he/she is. What’s more, if people do not communicate with each other frequently, the relationship will go up as the time goes by.

Thirdly, moving to one place to another may have significant impact on the children’s education and may hurt their feelings. For example, my grandfather was a colonel. My mother and her brothers had to change the schools frequently as my grand father has had to execute his task in different places. As a result, my mother and uncles can not settle down to make friends and enjoy the school time since they had to move again and again.

Last but not the least, when the elder’s health is taken into consideration, moving seems to be not considerate. It’s our duty to take care of the old people. Though the transportation becomes more convenient, the old people may still not be tolerant to the tiredness during the moving.

To sum up, we can fulfill our curiosity by travelling to one place to another instead of moving again and again. It is definitely better for me to live in one place all my life.

lixinjiayouUID: 2754331

Since the society is developing day by day, our life has become more and more complicated. We have to deal with a lot of thing in the daily life. But can we just blame（搭配应当是blame sth on吧？或者把这里的blame改成owe，与后面的to搭配^_^） our low efficient to the large amount of different things we encountered in our daily life? Or on the other saying, is it the reason why people can only do few things well that they are too busy doing many different things? I do not think so. （读起来的话，前面有两个反问句，而这边用个I do not think so感觉单薄了点）

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In the higher positions, some people have the responsibility to do a lot of things. Like the business leaders, they have to deal with countless reports, endless meetings and a lot of different people; or the doctors, they have to be cautious for every patients even they are to be exhausted. But the real world has never offered them chances to explain why they did not do well（这句话意思怪怪的……but the real world has never offered any evidence that they can do few things well）. The business leaders are propelled to coax with（赞~\(≧▽≦)/~） any situations in the fierce commercial campaign. The doctors have the holy obligation（赞~\(≧▽≦)/~） to cure any patients with no spare effort. Though they are so busy with these things, they never shift the blame that they did not do well to the large amount of things. （你这段话的意思是“面对很多事情，他们确实可能做不好，但是原因不是因为事情太多？”我还以为你想表达“虽然他们面对很多事情，但是他们都可以很好的处理，做的很好”呢，我觉得我的意思可能会更切合题目一点，拙见拙见O(∩_∩)O哈哈~）Take my mother as an example, she is an accountant. Also, she has to shift her role from a busy accountant to a shrewd housekeeper after she gets home. She has to assume the accounting of two different companies. I can imagine how busy she is when she is working. Not to mention the endless housework.（这两句话连在一起，用逗号比较好^_^） But as I see it, my mum plays well in both roles. She never complains about her burden. Instead, she arranges her schedule compactly to get everything done well.

Admittedly,  people will not do things well when there are a lot（改成too much的话强调效果会更好点^_^） thing to be processed. But I will never agree that the amount of things can be the excuse. Though different thing smay distract a person’s energy, if the person made a complete and reasonable arrangement, I believe everything would be solved well. Some people can just do few things well. But in my opinion, when they are to deal with not that many things, they can still do just few things well. Take two of my friends as comparison. They are both applying for the graduate school and working as a lab assistant of professors. One applied for about 20 schools and kept going to the laboratory to do experiments. The other one left the laboratory for the reason that she is applying for future education. But, in fact, she just applied for 4 schools. What she has done is wasting time on unimportant things. （感觉这个例子不错^_^）As a result, the one who applied for 20schools has received lots of offers, and the other one has not got anything. （或许再加上一句“and she also lost the precious experience as a lab assistant ”）I think if she has better arranged her time, the result would be better.(这句话呢，应该用一个标准的虚拟语气，“if she had better arranged her time, the result would have turn out to be better.” )" R! y* W! y6 v3 c

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As the reasons I mentioned above, I firmly disagree with such statements（我觉得还是不要用such这种指代，这是一篇独立的文章，感觉最好不要指代到题目中的内容）. The large amount of things can not be the reasons or excuse why we have not done things well. We should look for the reason from ourselves.

我感觉文章的例子很充实，详细，选取的也很好^_^这是非常好的，因为巧妇难为无米之炊嘛，我写作文碰到的最大的问题就是没有素材，没有想法O(∩_∩)O哈哈~

然后我相信你只需要在句式、语言表达上下点功夫，将众多并列的简单陈述句稍微糅合精炼下，会是非常好的，加油噢

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because people are too busy doing many different things, they can do few things well.
Since the society is developing day by day, our life has become more and more complicated. We have to deal with a lot of thing in the daily life. But can we just blame our low efficient to the large amount of different things we encountered in our daily life? Or on the other saying, is it the reason why people can only do few things well that they are too busy doing many different things?(看了半天才明白，放在开头是不是有点不明了呢？但是其实也很矛盾，因为写作中用一些复杂的句子也会比较好。) I do not think so.

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In the higher positions(5555,sorry,我没怎么见过这个啊), some people have the responsibility to do a lot of things. Like the business leaders, they have to deal with countless reports, endless meetings and a lot of different people; or the doctors, they have to be cautious for every patients even they are to be exhausted.(句子有点问题吧，they have to be cautious for every patients even they are to be exhausted这句没有连词吧,还有like...,....这句也有问题) But(but不是个连词么，连接两个分句) the real world has never offered them chances to explain why they did not do well.这句有点不明了 The business leaders are propelled to coax with any situations(coax sth或者coax sb into sth好像只有这两种用法，而且我也有点没明白啥意思) in the fierce commercial campaign. The doctors have the holy obligation to cure any patients with no spare effort. Though they are so busy with these things, they never shift the blame that they did(怎么过去时了) not do well to the large amount of things. Take my mother as(for还是as啊？我也晕了) an example, she is an accountant. Also, she has to shift her role from a busy accountant to a shrewd housekeeper after she gets home. She has to assume(只见过assume the responsibility，不过也不确定) the accounting of two different companies. I can imagine how busy she is when she is working. Not to mention the endless housework. But as I see it(这么说没问题哈,也可以as far as i am concerned), my mum plays well in both roles. She never complains about her burden. Instead, she arranges her schedule compactly to get everything done well. & r; p% }5 B3 ]
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Admittedly,  people will not do things well when there are a lot thing to be processed. But I will never agree that the amount of things can be the excuse. Though different thing smay distract a person’s energy(distract sb or sb's attention好像只有这么两种用法), if the person made a complete and reasonable arrangement, I believe everything would be solved well. Some people can just do few things well. But in my opinion, when they are to deal with not that many things, they can still do just few things well.(哦，明白你的意思了,要么改成这样even though they deal with fewer things, they can still do part of these things well不过也没准没有你说的清楚) Take two of my friends as(for) comparison. They are both applying for the graduate school and working as a lab assistant of professors. One applied for about 20 schools and kept going to the laboratory to do experiments. The other one left the laboratory for the reason that she is applying for future education. But, in fact, she just applied for 4 schools. What she has done is wasting time on unimportant(trivial如何) things. As a result, the one who applied for 20schools has received lots of offers, and the other one has not got anything. I think if she has(had如果你想用虚拟语气的话) better arranged her time, the result would be better. 4 d& I' {( F- W

As(due to) the reasons I mentioned above, I firmly disagree with such statements. (句号换成——如何)The large amount of things can not be the reasons or excuse why we have not done things well. We should look for the reason from ourselves.(我怎么觉得更顺的形式应该是we should find out the causes in ourselves)
语法方面：sorry啊,55555,我今天好像特晕，给你改的可能也乱七八糟，好多可能都是我个人偏好。
还有就是主题方面，我们真要好好讨论一下啊。
你看啊，主题是：因为现在大家好忙，所以大家做的事很少是好的。
然后我们都觉得不同意。
然后你的立意是，不是因为大家好忙，所以才做不好事。
而我的立意是，虽然大家忙，但是大家还是做地好事，然后原因1，2，3。
不知道你有没有明白我的意思。所以其实问题就归结到了这里，对于这种论题中带有因为所以的情况。
当我们反驳的话，是应该怎么反驳。
1.从关系上反驳，也是就是不是这个因导致这个果
2.直接反对结果
哦，ft,说道这里，我好像也明白了。
我觉得还是你的思路比较对，应该从这两个方面说：
首先大家还是做的好事的
其次就算有人没做好事，也不是因为他们忙。
原来如此，我觉得你的整体思路是清晰的，段落里面要是还能更清晰些就好了。

奇流沙UID: 2698749

2.25 Businessmen are only motivated by desire of money, agree or disagree？
A lot of people may complain discontentedly that businessmen are now only motivated by desire of money. Actually, such saying is true for some merchants. But I believe that not all businessmen are just motivated by money. Here I give my argument as following.

Undeniably, a successful businessman has the ability to own large amount of money. Some people begin to do business for this very purpose. They are trying hard to accumulate their own fortune and fulfill their personal pursue. Few of them even crime for money. But they can never be the main stream of merchants since these behaviors are neither moral nor legal.

Lots of businessmen are motivated by their own interest. When starting their business, they may even be not sure whether such business will bring them fortune. Take Bill Gates for instance. I believe that he did not anticipate that he would become one of the richest persons in the world when he left Harvard. Though at that time, his friends and relatives may regard it as ridiculous; he kept his own pursue and devoted to the development of software with tow of his friends.

Lastly, most people want to make more money to make life better, certainly include the businessmen. But some merchants do not only concern about money. After they accumulated the large amount of fortune from the society, they give part of it back to the society through the form of charities and foundations. What they have done actually helps reduce the gap between the rich and the poor. To take the idea further, they help balance the social fortune. Go on with the example mentioned above, Bill Gates keeps donating his wealth to kinds of foundations. He not only makes his own life more comfortable, but also helps vulnerable groups.

To sum up, though the money can not be excluded from the motivations of businessmen, it is not the only purpose of most merchants. They are also motivated by their own interest and social common good. At least, the successful businessmen do not only care about money.

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

2.24 Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. As the world is developing at such a rapid pace, we are always curious about what is happening outside our city or country. Knowledge from the television and Internet can no more satisfy our curiosity. Someone choose to move to another place to witness the development or because of some other reasons. But should people keep moving all the time? Or should they just live in the city or country all life? I definitely agree with the latter choice. Moving to some places with which one is not familiar may bring (少个宾语吧)the sense of fresh. When people move to the new place, they have chances to get to know the culture and the custom. But if they do not stay in the place for a long time, what they get to know may be superficial. The deeper culture can not be dug out with the short visit. The most fundamental things are hidden behind the surface of the city or the country. The knowledge of a city or a country is like the wine,(句号)it get better when it grows old(可以这么形象地说么,it spend a long time to ferment). On the other hand, people can choose to travel to the place where they want to visit, which will give them the sense of fresh, too. f/ m  D- B7 j. B In addition, the more friends and relatives people will get as they live in one place longer. Friends and relatives become the essential elements of the huge relationship net in which the one becomes the center. When one is sad, these people will give comfort; when one is happy, he/she always can get someone to share(就直接share happiness with others). Once one move to another place, he has to spend time to set up such a relationship net, no matter how sociable he/she is. What’s more, if people do not communicate with each other frequently, the relationship will go up(我怎么觉得关系被破坏只能用break up) as the time goes by. Thirdly, moving to one place to another may have significant impact on the children’s education and may hurt their feelings. For example, my grandfather was a colonel. My mother and her brothers had to change the schools frequently as my grand father has had to execute his task in different places. As a result, my mother and uncles can not settle down to make friends and enjoy the school time since they had to move again and again. , D$ c( d+ I# {4 ` $ E* o! v1 H; g% M: x+ J' V* \* | Last but not the least, when the elder’s health is taken into consideration, moving seems to be not considerate. It’s our duty to take care of the old people. Though the transportation becomes more convenient, the old people may still not be tolerant to the tiredness during the moving. sum up, we can fulfill our curiosity by travelling to one place to another instead of moving again and again. It is definitely better for me to live in one place all my life.

我觉得写的挺好的啦，通顺了很多，而且很多写的也很漂亮。
但是如果非要挑出来毛病的话，我觉得你后面的三个论点写的都很明白，但是我觉得你第一个论点有点不清楚啊。我知道你是想说只有在一个地方住的久了才能了解这里文化的精髓。但是你又和新鲜感扯到一起了，完了你两个混在一起，我就晕了。不知道你写的时候想清楚了么。其他的我都觉得挺好的啊。

奇流沙UID: 2698749

2.26 Do you agree or disagree with the statement: Playing sports can teach us the important lesson of $ Z2 N) s, s5 x: Y8 c( llife.
Nowadays, national fitness program has been populated in China. The government has invested to construct a lot of outdoor gymnasium to help keep the people’s health. Therefore, I definitely agree with that playing sports can teach us the important lesson of life.

First of all, it teaches us teamwork. Since our country has processed the policy of birth control, the family style usually is one father, one mother, and one kid. The only kid is treated as the empire of the family. They do not know teamwork. Sports give these children or even adults very precious lessons of cooperating with others. Take Football for example, in such a big court, one person can not run around the whole court, instead, he/she just needs to keep an eye on the limited area. Everyone has different task in one football team. The team can never get success without teamwork. In general, people can learn how to coordinate with their team members from the football game.

In addition, playing sports can teach one how to keep healthy with no doubt. It is easy to understand because everyone has to admit that athlete is always more health than normal person. Those athletes have to take part in many different competitions. To get better results, they need to know when is the best time to do sports or have meals, and what should they care about when they are doing sport. For the professional athletes, their diets are even exactly scheduled.

Last but not the least, people can learn to deal with the emergency. Getting hurt is a normal thing for athletes. Take myself for example, I like playing basketball, and I have been accustomed to get hurt when playing basketball. Beating by someone else occasionally, colliding by the speeding basketball, or falling down and getting bruised are all normal emergency. I have to get the knowledge to deal with all these emergency. Though I did not learn that form the sports, it is the sports which makes me have these knowledge kept in mind.

To sum up, playing sports can teach one person the teamwork, the health keeping and the knowledge of dealing with emergency. These are all important lessons of life I can learn form sports.

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

2.25 Businessmen are only motivated by desire of money, agree or disagree？4 ~( _7 h) t7 t) `% H8 g
A lot of people may complain discontentedly that businessmen are now only motivated by desire of money. Actually, such saying is true for some merchants(我一直以为是mechanics,原来如此). But I believe that not all businessmen are just motivated by money. Here I give my argument as following. - y% ?6 Q, ]# K3 z' ~$ D& s8 [* E
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Undeniably, a successful businessman has the ability to own large amount of money. Some people begin to do business for this very purpose. They are trying hard to accumulate their own fortune and fulfill their personal pursue. Few of them even crime(commit crime) for money. But they can never be the main stream of merchants since these behaviors are neither moral nor legal.

Lots of businessmen are motivated by their own interest. When starting their business, they may even be not sure whether such business will bring them fortune. Take Bill Gates for instance. I believe that he did not anticipate that he would become one of the richest persons in the world when he left Harvard. Though at that time, his friends and relatives may regard it as ridiculous; he kept his own pursue and devoted to the development of software with tow of his friends. , ~! x; Q4 g6 k9 E
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Lastly, most people want to make more money to make life better, certainly include the businessmen. But some merchants do not only concern about money. After they accumulated the large amount of fortune from the society, they give part of it back to the society through the form of charities and foundations. What they have done actually helps reduce the gap between the rich and the poor. To take the idea further, they help balance the social fortune. Go on with the example mentioned above, Bill Gates keeps donating his wealth to kinds of foundations. He not only makes his own life more comfortable, but also helps vulnerable groups（牛犇了!).

To sum up, though the money can not be excluded from the motivations of businessmen, it is not the only purpose of most merchants. They are also motivated by their own interest and social common good. At least, the successful businessmen do not only care about money.
赞！感觉你的进步真的是飞速啊。很好啊，这篇文章，我忘记了是不是跟你说过，你的论点不是出在每段的第一句话那里，我其实不太清楚这样会不会给你的文章在最后打分的那里造成一定的影响。

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2.26 Do you agree or disagree with the statement: Playing sports can teach us the important lesson of life.

Nowadays, national fitness program has been populated in China. The government has invested to construct a lot of outdoor gymnasium to help keep the people’s health. Therefore, I definitely agree with that playing sports can teach us the important lesson of life. （全民运动的推广如何能够therefore到你同意playing sports can teach us the important lesson of life 这个论断，偶也之前经常用过这样的开头，可是后来有人给我指证到这样在逻辑上存在着flaw，个人觉得还是很有道理的，其实只要把therefore换个词，诸如in my opinion 或者as for me 呀等等就ok了，LZ你觉得呢？）

First of all, it teaches us teamwork. Since our country has processed the policy of birth control, the family style usually is one father, one mother, and one kid. The only kid is treated as the empire of the family. They do not know teamwork.（这个有点绝对了，可以换个most of them或者they hardly know）
Sports give these children or even adults very precious lessons of cooperating with others. Take Football for example, in such a big court, one person can not run around the whole court, instead, he/she just needs to keep an eye on the limited area. Everyone has different task in one football team. The team can never get success without teamwork. In general, people can learn how to coordinate with their team members from the football game. （段尾总结，赞！）


In addition, playing sports can teach one how to keep healthy with no doubt. It is easy to understand because everyone has to admit that athlete is always more health（healthy） than normal person. Those athletes have to take part in many different competitions. To get better results, they need to know when is the best time to do sports or have meals, and what should they care about when they are doing sport. For the professional athletes, their diets are even exactly scheduled.
Last but not the least, people can learn to deal with the emergency. Getting hurt is a normal thing for athletes. Take myself for example, I like playing basketball, and I have been accustomed to get hurt when playing basketball. Beating by someone else occasionally, colliding by the speeding basketball, or falling down and getting bruised are all normal emergency. I have to get the knowledge to deal with all these emergency（emergencies）. Though I did not learn that from the sports, it is the sports which makes（make） me have these knowledge kept in mind.

To sum up, playing sports can teach one person the teamwork, the health keeping and the knowledge of dealing with emergency. These are all important lessons of life I can learn form sports.
（感觉语言上文章上是没有多大问题；恩。。。有一点需要建议的就是，全文对life没有提到多少，换句话就是说缺少了对the teamwork, the health keeping and the knowledge of dealing with emergency是life中的important lessons的论述，其实也就是稍微说明下这些在我们life中是很重要的；要不感觉全文就都是在说playing sports的好处，和life没多大关系似的。只是个人建议啦~~~另外文章ms用了很多的the，其实可以不用的地方就不要加the了，简洁点。好了，继续加油啦！）

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2.27：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To be well-informed people should get information from many different sources.
It is information generation now. Since the rapid development of technology, the amount of information resources increases day by day. At present, the most popular resource is the Internet. But is it enough for us to just depend on the Internet? In my perspective, to be well-informed people definitely should get information form many different sources.

To start off, in the past, the source was humdrum. In the beginning of 1900s, People could only get informed by the broadcast and newspaper. After decades, more advanced technology—television was invented. People had to accept what they get form these resources. Information was hysteretic to a great degree. Take newspaper as an example. People can not get to know what is happening but what has happened. The information spread through newspaper usually was some days later after the events had happened. Even information may be hysteretic today. Take myself for example, I am used to check my email regularly everyday, even so, the context of the email can only be got when I open it up. In such situation, I can not deal with emergencies. It may be quicker that my colleagues or friends just tell me what happened or that someone is looking for me. In general, if people just rely on only one source, the information may be seriously hysteretic.

In addition, nowadays, more and more people just get news from the Internet without judging whether the information is true or not. Since Internet is available to everyone, part of information obtained form the Internet may be deceptive. Since the software is developing every other day, any information can be fabricated. Have you ever seen the British series Hustle? The hero of the TV show is very good at fabricate fake websites in order to confuse the target. We have use all these information sources to judge if the information we got is true.

To sum up, as any sources can provide us deceptive or hysteretic information, we have to use one to revise another in order to get the latest and precise information.