Issue13 倒计时18天，求拍，必回 by ieyangj08

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ISSUE13  Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.



It is a trend that hundreds of lesser-known languages are dying every year. Shall the governments of those countries do something to change this trend as the author declares? My answer is absolutely yes, for losing a language means losing lots of essential things to our human beings, such as a civilization and a thinking mode. Thus, discussing practical measures governments can take on this problem are necessary and meaningful.

If a language is lost, we shall lose many valuable treasures and those must include a related civilization, because language is the carrier of civilization, the essence of our ancestors’ heritage. Starting from the primitive society, people use language to record their experience against the natural, the main events, and the knowledge accumulated in the labor, all of which composed our civilization and are valuable wealth for us. Unfortunately, with the loss of the language, this civilization would disappear totally. Not only our numerous precious poetry, novels, and proverbs will be lost forever, but also the infinite wisdom of the language speaker’s ancestors will die.

What’s more serious is loss of a civilization will threat the global cultural diversity that is essential for our mankind's development. History of human progress is also a history of mutual learning among civilizations. Glancing at our history book, we will easily find ample examples: Greece learned from Egypt, Rome studied Greece, the Arab referred to the Roman Empire, medieval Europe imitated the Arab, Renaissance Europe followed the Byzantine Empire, and so forth. It is this diversity of civilizations that brings comparison, learning, and progress for countries and induces inspiration and creativity of people which finally lead to great innovations. However, this cultural diversity shall be greatly weakened, with the loss of a lesser-known language.

With the loss of a language, we shall lose a mode of thinking too. Scientists have given enough evidences to prove that a language represents a mode of thinking. When people using a language to speak or write, they need to compose words in one way. Actually, this way of composing words is a kind of thinking mode. Gradually a thinking mode is formed, when the language speakers using the language long times. Every time when doing the riddles, we might have a strong feeling that it is how useful to use another thinking way. Yes, a new kind of thinking pattern is fundamental for us, especially when we meeting some real difficulties.  Whereas, the death of a language shall also brings a special thinking mode into its tomb.

Since a language means so much to our human, it is needful to discuss the possible methods that governments of the relevant countries can take to protect those lesser-known languages. In my eyes, to begin with governments would protect the scanty speakers and relevant records of the disappearing languages. We know that extinction of a language often be companied by enormously reduce of its speakers and related records. Some endangered small languages even only are known by the older grandfathers and grandmothers, and their correlative records, such as books, tapes, videos, have been very rare. So the governments are to invest more money on these two aspects. Additionally, governments shall help build more Medias in those endangered languages for their speakers, such as websites, publishing houses, television stations, and radio stations. Because media language is a main threat to the lesser-known languages, if these languages will become the media language for their speakers, their life would be extended for period of time.

In conclusion, since languages are so important for us mankind, government of countries in which those disappearing languages are spoken shall do something to protect them and prevent them from extinction. Both Protecting their speakers and relevant records and building Medias in those languages are probably effective ways.

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It is a trend that hundreds of lesser-known languages are dying every year. Shall the governments of those countries do something to change this trend as the author declares? My answer is absolutely yes, for losing a language means losing lots of essential things to our human beings, such as a civilization and a thinking mode. Thus, discussing(这里用discussing是否合适？) practical measures governments can take on this problem are necessary and meaningful.

If a language is lost, we shall（情态动词shall主语是第一人称有“表示说话者的意图、允许、警告、命令、决心等”，可以换成其他） lose many valuable treasures and those must include a related civilization, because language is the carrier of civilization, the essence of our ancestors’ heritage. Starting from the primitive society, people use language to record their experience against（against是介词，如果要想表达对抗自然的经验要换成动词的分词形式）
the natural, the main events, and the knowledge accumulated in the labor, all of which composed our civilization and are valuable wealth for us. Unfortunately, with the loss of the language, this civilization would disappear totally. Not only our numerous precious poetry, novels, and proverbs will be lost forever, but also the infinite wisdom of the language speaker’s ancestors will die. （not only置于句首需要倒装）

What’s（不要用简写） more serious is loss of a civilization will threat the global cultural diversity that is essential for our mankind's development. History of human progress is also a history of mutual learning among civilizations. Glancing at our history book, we will easily find ample examples: Greece learned from Egypt, Rome studied Greece, the Arab referred to the Roman Empire, medieval Europe imitated the Arab, Renaissance Europe followed the Byzantine Empire, and so forth. It is this diversity of civilizations that brings comparison, learning, and progress for countries and induces inspiration and creativity of people which finally lead to great innovations. However, this cultural diversity shall be greatly weakened, with the loss of a lesser-known language.

With the loss of a language, we shall lose a mode of thinking too. Scientists have given enough evidences to prove that a language represents a mode of thinking. When people using a language to speak or write, they need to compose words in one way. Actually, this way of composing words is a kind of thinking mode. Gradually a thinking mode is formed, when the language speakers using the language long times. Every time when doing the riddles, we might have a strong feeling that it is how useful to use another thinking way. Yes, a new kind of thinking pattern is fundamental for us, especially when we meeting some real difficulties.  Whereas, the death of a language shall also brings a special thinking mode into its tomb.

Since a language means so much to our human, it is needful to discuss the possible methods that governments of the relevant countries can take to protect those lesser-known languages.（这里的逻辑我觉得是不是有些跳跃，因为语言的多样性对人类如此重要，因此政府应该保护。这是否政府的主要职能之一？） In my eyes, to begin with governments would protect the scanty speakers and relevant records of the disappearing languages. We know that extinction of a language often be companied by enormously reduce of its speakers and related records. Some endangered small languages even only are known by the older grandfathers and grandmothers, and their correlative records, such as books, tapes, videos, have been very rare. So the governments are to invest more money on these two aspects. Additionally, governments shall help build more Medias in those endangered languages for their speakers, such as websites, publishing houses, television stations, and radio stations. Because media language is a main threat to the lesser-known languages, if these languages will become the media language for their speakers, their life would be extended for period of time.

In conclusion, since languages are so important for us mankind, government of countries in which those disappearing languages are spoken shall do something to protect them and prevent them from extinction. Both Protecting their speakers（保护speaker这个有点太宽泛了，容易引起歧义） and relevant records and building Medias in those languages are probably effective ways.

总结：结构比较清楚。除了第二段和第三段的内容有些类似，再调整一下。其他语言后面几段比较流畅了。

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严重感谢楼上同学的建议，指出了很多错误，太宝贵了。
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