ISSUE221历史打破幻觉，留链回拍！想的比写的high= =唉

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ISSUE221: “The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history.”

中间断了，写的也很纠结，计时没意义了…… 539字。

It seems elusive to claim that people do not change, as the statement implies. They differ even according to geographical variance, let alone times. Nevertheless, when examining the innate characters of man, the humanity, I side with the author and hold the belief that history indeed benefits us in the revelation of inner similarity of man.

True, the world evolves and mutates through times. The change in lifestyle, for example, is among the most drastical: think about the dramatical development in transportation, communication, entertainment and housing habits, etc., and no one can deny the distinctions between times. Regime, as well, alters from the primitive tribe to feudal system, and all the way up to capitalism that dominates most of today’s countries. Even in ideology, the obsolete doctrine on caste system fades away, replacing by more enlightened and tolerant thoughts promoting the equity and justice. History tells all those.

Yet, granted the change in forms of living and society, we learn form history that humanity—the essence of man—remains largely unchanged. We learn, that the suffering of people living in the base of social pyrimid remains to be equally painful. We learn, that the hope for love spreads across the limit of time and tragedy of Romeo and Juliet might not to cease. We learn, that justice is not automatically granted and people’s pursuit for happiness never end. Those similarities elicit the innermost empathy when a person touches history and is touched by the perpetual humanity embraced within.

This comfort us much. The recognition and knowledge of similarities in humanity, acquired through the study of history, serves as tranquilizer of individuals, relieving the solitude and anxiety induced by the swift-altered society and creating a sense of belonging. Viewing humanity as a continuous and congruous tie, a person realizes that what he is experiencing has been experienced before and what he is dreaming for has been dreamt and pursued earlier. A deeply rooted empathy, a strong affection for man, emerges to alleviate the unrest of solitary human existence within the enormous universe.

In fact, most, if not all, aspects of human society have been constructed upon the history-taught knowlegde that human do not change much during times. The sphere of art, for example, spins around the timeless emotion of man. Without the recognition of such similarities, artists will find their works totally in vain: one that harbors no same feeling with them might not be able to perceive their meaning. Government that is searching for direction learns that totalitarian never wins and the universal appeal is rightness. For religion, its all magic authority depends upon the knowledge that man, whatever times and places, seeks for the same and can be comforted by the same. After two thousand years, Confucianism still exerts its influence and serves as spiritual end-result for modern people. Without perception for the similar humanity unveiled by history, the  development of society would be depressing staccato.

Leszek Kolakowski said, “We learn history not in order to know how to behave or how to succeed, but to know who we are.” By breaking down the illusion that people of different times pole apart, history presents people the perpetual humanity and, in so doing, constructs the foundation for human civilization.

破题high的时候浮想联翩，写出来却干涩又说教。泪目。求重手。有拍必回，请留链~！谢谢~！

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It seems elusive（exclusive：专断，elusive:难以捉摸） to claim that people do not change, as the statement implies.题目说的是significantly different与do not change有一定距离。They differ even according to geographical variance, let alone times. Nevertheless, when examining the innate characters of man, the humanity, I side with the author and hold the belief that history indeed benefits us in the revelation of inner similarity of man.
结尾加most要好些，毕竟题目说的是chief benefit。主题句挺好的，既把下面的思路引出来了，又点了题。
True, the world evolves and mutates through times. The change in lifestyle, for example, is among the most drastical（drastic）: think about the dramatical(dramatic) development in transportation, communication, entertainment and housing habits, etc., and no one can deny the distinctions between times. Regime, as well, alters from the primitive tribe to feudal system, and all the way up to capitalism that dominates most of today’s countries. Even in ideology, the obsolete doctrine on caste system fades away, replacing（ed） by more enlightened and tolerant thoughts promoting the equity and justice. History tells all those.
觉得这段写的挺好的
Yet, granted the change in forms of living and society, we learn form history that humanity—the essence of man—remains largely unchanged. We learn, that the suffering of people living in the base of social pyrimid remains to be equally painful. We learn, that the hope for love spreads across the limit of time and tragedy of Romeo and Juliet might not to cease. We learn, that justice is not automatically granted and people’s pursuit for happiness never end. Those similarities elicit the innermost empathy when a person touches history and is touched by the perpetual humanity embraced within.
这段写的太精彩了，人性这么抽象描绘竟这么生动！ AB AND BA这种修辞我喜欢。
This comfort us much. The recognition and knowledge of similarities in humanity, acquired through the study of history, serves as tranquilizer of individuals, relieving the solitude and anxiety induced by the swift-altered society and creating a sense of belonging. Viewing humanity as a continuous and congruous tie, a person realizes that what he is experiencing has been experienced before and what he is dreaming for has been dreamt and pursued earlier. A deeply rooted empathy, a strong affection for man, emerges to alleviate the unrest of solitary human existence within the enormous universe.
觉得这段再加上一个小例子就更好了，比如玛雅人和现代人同样执着于奥秘的宇宙，体现人类共同的探索精神。
In fact, most, if not all, aspects of human society have been constructed upon the history-taught knowlegde that human do not change much during times. (感觉定语有点生硬，既然已经升华到不变的是人性这个层次，没必要再绕回去了)The sphere of art, for example, spins around the timeless emotion of man. Without the recognition of such similarities, artists will find their works totally in vain: one that harbors no same feeling with them might not be able to perceive their meaning. Government that is searching for direction learns that totalitarian never wins and the universal appeal is rightness. For religion, its all magic authority depends upon the knowledge that man, whatever times and places, seeks for the same and can be comforted by the same. After two thousand years, Confucianism still exerts its influence and serves as spiritual end-result for modern people. 这个例子用在上一段要好些，与社会是建立在人类不变这个论点关系不那么直接Without perception for the similar humanity unveiled by history, the  development of society would be a (缺个冠词)depressing staccato. 这个推论有点直接，可能因为刚才那个例子的关系，所以觉得论据不充分

Leszek Kolakowski said, “We learn history not in order to know how to behave or how to succeed, but to know who we are.” By breaking down the illusion that people of different times pole apart, history presents people the perpetual humanity and, in so doing, constructs the foundation for human civilization.
开头---让步历史告诉我们世界在发展变化---但人类最珍贵重要的人性是不变的----这点作为心灵慰藉很重要---其实比想象的更重要，社会也是在此基础上构建的-----总结
因为一开始就站在人性这个很高的层次，所以在想写出递进之类体现逻辑的就很难了。觉得能把为什么理解运用人性一致性对人类的发展是最重要的说清楚就已经很难得了。只有倒数第二段不是很有力，其他的很好。我写的那几篇每次自己看都有的改，先不麻烦大家了。

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It seems elusive to claim that people do not change, as the statement implies. They differ even according to geographical variance, let alone times. Nevertheless, when examining the innate characters of man, the humanity, I side with the author and hold the belief that (前后的论述都很不错，然而此处的转折有些断裂感，加上they do not change and是否更合适)history indeed benefits us in the revelation of (revealing是否更简洁) inner similarity (similarities) of man.

True, the world evolves and mutates through times. The change in lifestyle, for example, is among the most drastical: think about the dramatical development in transportation, communication, entertainment and housing habits（？不理解，是否换个表达）, etc., and no one can deny the distinctions between times. Regime, as well, alters from the primitive tribe to feudal system, and all the way up to capitalism that dominates most of today’s countries. Even in ideology, the obsolete doctrine on caste system fades away, replacing by more enlightened and tolerant thoughts promoting the equity and justice. History tells all those. （根据首段，该段应该论述人随着历史是在变化的，例如人的一些外貌特征、基本习惯。然而主题句定位为“世界随着时间进展而变化”，是否有些不妥。段落的主题句和内容是否更应该向人方面靠拢，而非首句中的世界）

Yet, granted the change in forms of living and society,（还是同一个问题，后面说明人的本质不变，此处是否应该说人的一些表象特征没变？） we learn form history that humanity—the essence of man—remains largely unchanged. We learn, that the suffering of people living in the base of social pyrimid (pyramid) remains to be equally painful.(这点不能算人的本质吧) We learn, that the hope for love spreads across the limit of time and tragedy of Romeo and Juliet might not to cease. We learn, that justice is not automatically granted and people’s pursuit for happiness never end（前面的主语为单数，是否该用ends）. （这里的排比句很不错，赞个。但首段提到的人的本质几乎还没有看到，似乎一直在说社会和世界。）Those similarities elicit the innermost empathy when a person touches history and is touched by the perpetual humanity embraced within.

This comfort (comforts) us much. The recognition and knowledge of similarities in humanity, acquired through the study of history, serves as tranquilizer of individuals, relieving the solitude and anxiety induced by the swift-altered society and creating a sense of belonging. Viewing humanity as a continuous and congruous tie, a person realizes that what he is experiencing has been experienced before and what he is dreaming for has been dreamt and pursued earlier. A deeply rooted empathy, a strong affection for man, emerges to alleviate the unrest of solitary human existence within the enormous universe. （个人价值）

In fact, most, if not all, aspects of human society have been constructed upon the history-taught knowlegde (knowledge) that human do not change much during times. The sphere of art, for example, spins around the timeless emotion of man. Without the recognition of such similarities, artists will find their works totally in vain: one that harbors no same feeling with them might not be able to perceive their meaning. Government that is searching for direction learns that totalitarian never wins and the universal appeal is rightness. For religion, its all magic authority depends upon the knowledge that man, whatever times and places, seeks for the same and can be comforted by the same. After two thousand years, Confucianism still exerts its influence and serves as spiritual end-result for modern people. Without perception for the similar humanity unveiled by history, the  development of society would be depressing staccato. （社会价值）（个人很欣赏这种层面展开和升华，然而文章花一段让步，两段升华，是否有些喧宾夺主。此处值得商榷，这点我也一直在困惑中。但毕竟有效论证自己的观点是文章的首要任务。）

Leszek Kolakowski said, “We learn history not in order to know how to behave or how to succeed, but to know who we are.” By breaking down the illusion that people of different times pole apart, history presents people the perpetual humanity and, in so doing, constructs the foundation for human civilization.


作者语言不错。首段即将文章定位在“人性”高度，的确很引人入胜。然而“人性”类的文章一般也较难阐释，这或许可以解释一些文中论证的缺陷。个人意见未必都对，仅供参考：）