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北大和清华共同出版了一本 英语高级写作，建议看看。

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For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities? （修改后）

There are a substantial number of people think that university is a camp which is full of professional talents. And it is also an important institute to send excellent people assisting a country's development, improving the advancement of a country. However, for my part, preliminary education would exert more important role than advanced education in modern world, so that government should put elementary education at a primary position in development of a society.

In the first place, it is undeniable that elementary education plays an extremely role in today’s society. Elementary education is just like an infrastructure in forming a moral society. And it is also a perfect embody that whether a country values education or not. In China, for instance, is operating the system of 9 years compulsory education. Government should invest a considerable amount of funds in education area in order to make every child in China could make every child in China have a favorable situation to receive education. This measure greatly reduces the number of illiteracies in China, which is one of the most important factors to drag the speed of development of a country.

In the second place, governments should make their efforts to improve/upgrade/boost/raise compulsory education. Thus may bring about more advantages for majority of people. For example, if a teenager finished his elementary education, he may not worry about how he can fend for himself even if his family can not afford him to receive further education. Because he can utilize what he learned to study a practical skill easier, then become a blue collar or grey collar. Therefore, he can not only make a living by himself, but also improve his needy family situation.

What is more, government invest much funds in young children could reduce the criminal rate in society as well. After all, one's childhood and adolescence play important role in his whole life. Government should invest more money in raising elementary education which comprises providing basic facilities and hiring more excellent instructors. Meanwhile, elementary school authorities should lay more emphasis on cultivating student's positive outlook on life and value, encouraging them to try their best to become an outstanding person. One can make contribution to construction of a country.

From what have been discussed above, we  may safely draw the conclusion that government should focus its budget more on children and teenagers which is beneficial to the whole society even all over the world. Moreover, what advantages it brings would far outweigh disadvantages.

stefanie299UID: 2667762

Some people think one's working is important than being with one's family

Nowadays, there is an increasing number of married person, especially for married women, are hesitate in a paradoxical situation. That is which aspect should they lay more emphasis on work area or family? How could they measure advantages and disadvantages in both sides? As far as i am concern, one's family is more important than one's working for following reasons.

First of all, one's family could prompt he/her reach success efficiently. For one's family play a fundamental role in one's whole life. For married person, if they have an integrated family, they must shoulder more responsible for their family members. My father, for instance, when he was a bachelor, he always less aggressive, and satisfied in situation that he can fend for himself with lower salary. However, after he married, he becomes more ambitious, as he said, he has more responsible for his wife and his children, earning more money make his children have more chances to learn many artistic classes, to send them to a advanced school which comprises advanced teaching facilities and excellent instructors. At present, my father has become a successful person, and i receive further education as well.

In addition to, one's family could sooth his stress and pressure from work as well.
No matter one how overwhelmed by his work, he would turn to delightful as long as he come back home, close with his children and his life. My father insists that although the burden in his shoulder is heavy, the burden is happiness and warmth. Every time when he come back from overburden job, his pressure and stress would disappear, he always lie down sofa accompanying sounding melody from piano i playing.

In conclusion, one's family is haven for his/her life. If we don't take into account our family, who can share our success from working? Where could we can go and have a break if we were overwhelmed by working? So we can not emphasize the importance of merits a family brings too much.

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Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country

There are many paths bring us to know well about a foreign country, no matter what its traditional culture or customs. In other words, conventional mass media and modern mass media are the main ways we utilize. And a considerable number of people insist that the traditional media such as newspapers and magazines is the best way of understanding a foreign country. However, i disagree with such a statement for following reasons.

To begin with, modern mass media seems to take over traditional media gradually for its outstanding qualities. The internet has become main method we gain knowledge and message from. First, if we want to comprehend a foreign country, we may listen to the news broadcasts such as VOA or BBC from internet, and we may also download mp3 and fresh foreign films easily. Second, we can login an ID from twitter. We can communicate with our foreign friends without any obstacle as long as we good at foreign language. Moreover, knowing information about a foreign country from internet is the most directly way for us, since we can see any up-date news in various foreign websites.

What is more, although a few benefits owned by traditional media such as newspapers and magazines, its own drawbacks still exist as well. If we merely rely on tradition media to obtain everything about foreign countries, the outcome brings to us would be out of over our optimism anticipation. In the first place, the information we learned from traditional media is always out of date and can not renew as soon as possible. For example, there is still a large number of words which has been deprived in English-speaking country, but it still comprises in our vocabulary book, thus may mislead and decrease student's efficient in studying. In addition, newspapers and magazines are indirectly ways for us to obtain knowledge. It can not express the real viewpoint of foreign media accurately and directly. Sometimes the information what we gained is usually via interpreting by inland media.

From what have been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that newspapers and magazines are not definitely the best way for us to learn a foreign country. There are many newly methods provide much useful and instant information for us.

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3.31作文

Advertisements make products seem better than they are

It is undeniable that advertisements play an indispensible role over this commercialization society. Advertisements can guide customers that how to choose a good. And when people try to comprehend a strange commodity, the most feasible way they take undoubtedly is advertisement. May be under such reasons or alike, advertisements always make products seem better than they are.

Fist of all, according to in order to stimulus customers choose their goal goods, advertisements usually exaggerates its functions. An advertisement of a toothpaste, in which enlarging toothpaste’s functions such as whitening one’s tooth, curing the customer's decayed tooth or healing one’s tooth disease as long as they use this product. However, the information i have collected over recently years shows that if we are subjected disease of decayed tooth, the only way we have to take is fall bake on dentists. and if one want to whitening his/her tooth he/she may rely on changing his/her daily life habits like reduce times of smoking and cleaning tooth as more as possible.

In addition, advertisements always mislead customers by beautifying its products. In the advertisement of cosmetics, there are fantastic friction, actors with appealing appearance and stature and vividly motion. Such a magical advertisement leads customers to believe that they could become one and they would have the same perfect skin like as actors in advertisement as long as they purchase and use products propagated in the advertisement. Moreover, in order to attract children's attention, the goods advocated in advertisement by some certain roles, such as hero or prince or princess in cartoon or caricature, that they would want to gain these products by demanding their parents.

In conclusion, from what have been mentioned above, and what we feel and see in our daily life, all of information we collect indicate that advertisements indeed make a illusion for us that the products propagated in its advertisements always better than they are.

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It is undeniable that advertisements play an indispensible role over this commercialization society. Advertisements can guide customers that how to choose a good. And when people try to comprehend a strange commodity, the most feasible way they take undoubtedly is advertisement. May be under such reasons or alike, advertisements always make products seem better than they are.
Fist of all, according to in order to stimulus(stimulate) customers choose their goal goods, advertisements usually exaggerates its(their) functions. An advertisement of a toothpaste, in which enlarging toothpaste’s functions such as whitening one’s tooth, curing the customer's decayed tooth or healing one’s tooth disease as long as they use this product. However, the information i have collected over recently years shows that if we are subjected (be subject to)disease of decayed tooth, the only way we have to take is fall bake on dentists(我不明白). and if one want to whitening his/her tooth he/she may rely on changing his/her daily life habits like reduce（reduces建议都用we） times of smoking and cleaning tooth as more as possible.& }' M6 m, Y7 K" w) W% o9 ^% D
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In addition, advertisements always mislead customers by beautifying its products. In the advertisement of cosmetics, there are fantastic friction(fiction), actors with appealing appearance and stature and vividly motion.(建议改成In the advertisements of cosmetics, actress utilize their appealing appearances, attractive statures and vividly motions to make fantastic fictions)   Such a magical advertisement leads customers to believe that they could become one(我没明白) and they would have the same perfect skin like as（去掉） actors in advertisement as long as(as…as太多了) they purchase and use products propagated in the advertisement.（这个句子太冗长 有些不通顺 建议改成短句 一句说不完可以写两句） Moreover, in order to attract children's attention, the goods advocated in advertisements （performed）by some certain roles, such as hero or prince or princess(hero prince and princess) in cartoon or caricature, that they would want to gain these products by demanding their parents.(Hence they would gain these products by demanding parents)

In conclusion, from what have been mentioned above, and(and or 不要连用)what we feel and see in our daily life, all of information we collect indicate that advertisements indeed make a illusion for us that the products propagated in its advertisements always better than they are.$ ^( j) v2 m9 `" a" F
你的第一个分论点是advertisements exaggerate products 所以建议你把例子改成 用牙膏以后不会很白 而不是不能变白 或者 你可以改成误导

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

我3.30的作文不给我改啦？

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Advertisements make products seem better than they are \* R' N! x& T It is undeniable that advertisements play an indispensible role over this commercialization society. Advertisements can guide customers that how to choose a good（goods指的才是商品吧。）. And when people try to comprehend a strange commodity, the most feasible way they take undoubtedly is advertisement. May be under such reasons or alike, advertisements always make products seem better than they are
Fist of all, according to in order to stimulus customers choose their goal goods, advertisements usually exaggerates（according to in order to 这不行这样用吧。advertisements已经是复数了。） its functions. An advertisement of a toothpaste, in which enlarging toothpaste’s functions such as whitening one’s tooth, curing the customer's decayed tooth or healing one’s tooth disease as long as they use this product. （这句怎么没有主句了？）However, the information i（I） have collected over recently years （during these years会不会更好？）shows that if we are subjected disease of decayed tooth, the only way we have to take is fall bake on dentists.（fall bake on?） and if one want to whitening his/her tooth he/she may rely on changing his/her daily life habits like reduce times of smoking and cleaning tooth as more as possible. In addition, advertisements always mislead customers by beautifying its products. In the advertisement of cosmetics, there are fantastic friction(啥意思？), actors with appealing appearance and stature and vividly motion（vivid用adj.就行了吧？修饰的是名字，and可以减了一个。）. Such a magical advertisement leads customers to believe that they could become one （one 指代什么）and they would have the same perfect skin like as actors （like 和as 重复了）in advertisement as long as they purchase and use products propagated in the advertisement. Moreover, in order to attract children's attention, the goods advocated in advertisement by some certain roles, such as hero or prince or princess in cartoon or caricature,（or多了点） that they would want to gain these products by demanding their parents.
In conclusion, from what have been mentioned above, and what we feel and see in our daily life, all of information we collect indicate that advertisements indeed make an illusion for us that the products propagated in its advertisements always better than they are.m

stefanie299UID: 2667762

                                                             Playing sports teaches people lessons about life.（修改后）


An increasing number of people are beginning to realize the importance of playing sports over recent decades.
It is undoubtedly that playing sports play an indispensible role in our lives along with more and more people take into account in playing sports. As far as I am concerned, playing sports is not only beneficial to one's physic fitness but also teach us lessons about life.

First of all, we can learn the importance of cooperation spirit during playing sports. Especially for team sports, like basketball or football and so on in which we cooperate with our teammates to confront competitors. We have to know that how to win a game efficiently, how to make each of us bring into play completely. Therefore, we would come together, expressing and exchanging our own view about tactics and arranging team members as rationally as possible. Moreover, we can help some teammates whose capability is relative weaker than others advance/raise their confidence. So that enhancing the cohesion of our whole team as well.

In addition, playing sports can also educate us the meaning of life. We would learn more precious qualities during this process. As an old saying says that, exercising just as one's whole life, you will experience hard time, arduous time and achieve success at the end. Take playing yoga as an example, when I played yoga at the first time, I can not stretched a perfect portrait like my coach did, a passive mode always attacked my confidence, persuaded me to give up, but I still believed in myself can overcome this hard situation. Therefore I began to try my best to do exercise every time, and promised myself insisted on playing yoga everyday though that process was hard, at the end, I became a member in high level class from low level class in a short time. Meanwhile, the classmate in my low level class, some of them gave up taking classes, the others still wandered at that level.

In conclusion, I believe that playing sports bring about so many advantages for us to edify us the lessons of life. At the same time, we may also evolved valuable traits such as the sense of perseverance, struggle and striving from doing sports to solve the problem we confront at present or in the future.

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            Students at university or in college should choose the most difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades (marks) in them

There are an increasing number of debates surfing in educational area. That is whether students should learn the most difficult classes along with rapidly fierce competition in their academic life. Nevertheless, I am firmly convinced that such a statement is not a rational requirement for students for the following reasons.

In the first place, the interesting is the most excellent teacher for students compare to high-level subjects. Although some person hold such opinion that students would gain much knowledge from learning the most difficult classes, the serious outcome would be taken to students that if they were coerced to learn such difficult classes which they did not interested in, they would confront many serious problems during studying. At the same time, the subjects they learned are difficult and boring. Gradually they would become doubt about their own potential and capability. Moreover, the frustration from learning difficult classes attack their confidence and optimistic mood, therefore, they would turn to pessimism at everything they confront at present or in the future.

In the second place, the most difficult classes did not the one which is fittest for every student. The best choice for students is to choose classes which are useful in their mind if the class indeed is beneficial to students' work or further education. For instance, a student who is major in humanities, it is unnecessary for him to take calculus classes which is not only difficult to him but also did not work any necessary function in his future career, and the only thing enough for him is learned simple operation method. Meanwhile, he may utilize the time saved in difficult classes to learn more useful knowledge such as how to plan his career in an efficient way and how to improve his interpersonal skills.

In conclusion, I believe that it is not a feasible way to take the most difficult classes for students. Meanwhile, the student should be encouraged by school authorities and family to choose classes which are definitely they interested in and are good for developing their integrated skills.

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