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本帖最后由 LaoZZZZZ 于 2010-2-26 14:18 编辑

Humanity has made little real progress over the past century or so.Technological innovations have taken place,but the overall condition of humanity is no better.War,violence,and poverty are still with us.Technology cannot change the condition of humanity.

When it comes to the issue of the relationship between human condition and technological innovations,It is understandable that some people could not agreee more with the assertion above that technology can not change the condition of humanity,since technological innovations are ineffective on preventing war,violence and poverty.However,technological innovations indeed significantly improve the quality of life for humaniy.To this extent,the assertion may be improper even could not make sense.

Undeniably,last century witnessed unprecedented war and violence.Driven by the vice human nature,such as aggresion and avarice,almost every advance countries have devote myriad scientists and money to technological engineerings,especially those fields which are closely relevant with massive destructive weapons.Hence,nuclear weapons and biochemical weapons came out and threat the safe of the whole humanity.To this sense,a great deal of techniques are borned from the need of war,and indeed contributed net losses of humanity.Hence I basicaly approve this argument insofar as there is no technological solution to the longstanding problems of war,violence and poverty.

Notwithstanding technology's powlessness in limiting war,violence and poverty,20th century technological innovations clearly improve the economic standard of living and comfort level and enable people to be so powful and dispensable ever. computer serves as a paradiamatic example.the advent of compter has emancipate people from boring repetitive tasks,and enable workers to focus their attention on those meaningful work,such as achitecture,designing vehicles and bridge.More recently,the assembly-line manufacturing created untold jobs,and greatly stimulated the growth of economy,and offer sufficent materials and convenience for human at least in developed nations.Further more,in the era of running out of traditional sources, the nuclear weapon could serve as invaluable sources for human being.Another is the cloning technique as the significant breakthrough of biochemistry could massively improve the agricultral industry,hence,could be used to alleviate the famine happening in the third wolrd.

However,it is unfortune but true that no progess will come without cost.As the byproduct of industrial progress,environmental polution has become the most serious and untractable problem so far,which won't be completely solved at the absence of  participation of any country  all over the world. Another is the undesirable outcome of assembly-line manufacturing,which is the increasing alination between workers and work.More recently,the overload useless information flood the Internet are stealing our time and distract our attention from family,cares even reality.

To conclusion,given that techonological innovation can not do anything for preventing war,violenc and poverty,the assertion that technology cannot change the condition of humanity is understandable and correct in this respect.Nevertheless,if we narrowly focus "progress" on the term of economic standard,less people will doubt that technological innovation indeed brought out a conspicuous improvment to the quality of life.
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本帖最后由 NEU公孙轩辕 于 2010-2-28 16:04 编辑

Humanity has made little real progress over the past century or so.Technological innovations have taken place,but the overall condition of humanity is no better.War,violence,and poverty are still with us.Technology cannot change the condition of humanity.(不是在说科技改变不了人类的生活!)

When it comes to the issue of the relationship between human condition and technological innovations,It is understandable that some people could not agreee more with the assertion above that technology can not change the condition of humanity,since technological innovations are ineffective on preventing war,violence and poverty.(逻辑漏洞:科技进步真的不可以对作者所说的这些问题有帮助?)However,technological innovations indeed significantly improve the quality of life for humaniy.(这里作者把humanity理解为了人类,和题目意思不一样:人性或者人道主义.这里作者显然不是再说科技改变不了人们的生活质量,这个命题也不成立)To this extent,the assertion may be improper even could not make sense.(humanity理解失误,导致结论也失效)

Undeniably,last century witnessed unprecedented war and violence.Driven by the vice human nature,such as aggresion and avarice,almost every advanced countries have devote myriad scientists and money to technological engineerings,especially those fields which are closely relevant with massive destructive weapons.(这个就没有根据,发展大规模杀伤性武器可是被明令禁止的,作者怎么就知道几乎所有国家都在搞?)Hence,nuclear weapons and biochemical weapons came out and threat the safe of the whole humanity.(现在哪个国家有生化武器?.......)To this sense,a great deal of techniques are borned from the need of war,and indeed contributed net losses of humanity.Hence I basicaly approve this argument insofar as there is no technological solution to the longstanding problems of war,violence and poverty.(漏洞:和第一段里的一样)

Notwithstanding technology's powlessness in limiting war,violence and poverty,20th century technological innovations clearly improve the economic standard of living and comfort level and enable people to be so powful and dispensable (人类可有可无?....) ever. computer serves as a paradiamatic example.the advent of compter has emancipate people from boring repetitive tasks,and enable workers to focus their attention on those meaningful work,such as achitecture,designing vehicles and bridge.More recently,the assembly-line manufacturing created untold jobs,and greatly stimulated the growth of economy,and offer sufficent materials and convenience for human at least in developed nations.Further more,in the era of running out of traditional sources, the nuclear weapon could serve as invaluable sources for human being.Another is the cloning technique as the significant breakthrough of biochemistry could massively improve the agricultral industry,hence,could be used to alleviate the famine happening in the third wolrd.(其实饥饿和poverty是紧密相联的,当然人道主义不仅仅只包括题目所罗列的那三个,hunger也算一个. 如果作者赞同我的观点的话,那么这里其实已经讲到了科技进步对解决这些问题的帮助。这和开头作者的观点:科技不可能改变humanity是相矛盾的)

However,it is unfortune/unfortunate but true that no progess will come without cost.As the byproduct of industrial progress,environmental polution has become the most serious and untractable problem so far,which won't be completely solved at the absence of  participation of any country  all over the world. Another is the undesirable outcome of assembly-line manufacturing,which is the increasing alination between workers and work.More recently,the overload useless information flood the Internet are stealing our time and distract our attention from family,cares even reality.(作者在这里谈科技带来的负面影响,这和题目要求的科技对人性没有改变 有什么联系么?个人意见:偏题)

To conclusion,given that techonological innovation can not do anything for preventing war,violenc and poverty,the assertion that technology cannot change the condition of humanity is understandable and correct in this respect.Nevertheless,if we narrowly focus "progress" on the term of economic standard,less people will doubt that technological innovation indeed brought out a conspicuous improvment to the quality of life.(结论作者赞成论者的观点:科技对人道主义的发展没有任何促进作用;还谈到科技的却给人们生活带来了提高。 首先第一点可以被ARG,请作者仔细思考;其次第二点和本题完全没关系)

只说问题:请作者仔细理解题目意思。 建议重写

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