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rachelwang712UID: 2757860

Issue2:
Competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.

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The theory of Adam Smith has prevailed for a long period time. So is his acclaimed competition. It has been advocated that competition does more good than harm to the society. As far as I am concerned, however, the idea is true in some aspects of society but in others, it can be misleading.

Competition values personal efforts, encouraging people to try their utmost. A better result, if everyone is making as more contribution as they can, can be expected. What's more, in the competition, winners always command more outstanding abilities or richer resources to accomplish the mission. They, undoubtedly, will perform and finish the job better than losers in the competition. In other words, competition eliminates those less abled and let those qualified do the work. A perfect example here is market economy. In most of the cases, with free competition, companies have to polish their products almost on a daily basis in order not to be defeated. Who benefits most? Consumers. As long as the competition is free and transparent, consumers will be provided with goods upgrading constantly. Consequently, quite a few social improvements attribute themselves to the competition, competition for moderner technology, competition for better medicine, etc. Competition is regarded as the bliss for the society.

Yet, competition often generates isolation or even contradiction. People treat each other as rivals. Endless stories tell how students suffer loneliness when they are forced or willing to compete with each other in all parts of their school life. Jealousy for better looking, more remarkable academic achievements or even better-off family backgrounds lead to break-up and quarrel in friends. But the path to success calls for cooperation as well. A famous Addidas ad showcases a slogan as follows: it takes five. It takes five basketball players to play and win. NBA champion team consists usually not by the top 5 players of the league but by those between whom chemistry works best. Cooperation rather than competition plays the critical role in success for a team, and regarding the society, for any fields that require teamwork.

In conclusion, competition, the double-edge sword, affects the society as a whole. But be it beneficial or not to society, it shall never outweigh cooperation.

topranUID: 2310216

good job~~
but for me I am not quite convinced by the following points
1, in the second part of your article , you use the example of basketball team (teamwork), it seems that you want to find an evidence to show the weakness of competation , but I don’t think that more competation means less teamwork , it's just my personal opinion , this eample seems risky.
2, the beginning of this article is beautiful , but the ending is quite oppsite which I think the judge will be a little disappointment when he or she reach this far, I definitely believe that you can give us more powerful conclusion due to the main body of article.
3,it seems that still some grammar mistakes , like in first paragraph I think “efforts”can change into “effort”

It’s my pleasure to read your work , I am just a jonior gter anyway ,so do take my advise too serious , best wishes and good luck~~~