PHOENIX小组四号ISSUE69

86145787UID: 2672301

69. "Government should place few, if any（如果有的话）, restrictions on scientific research and development"

观点：反对作者的观点。

论证部分:

1，
工业革命以来，人类的生活发生了巨大的变化。电灯、电话、互联网、冰箱。每一次技术革命（工业革命）都是人类社会的一次巨大飞跃。然而，这也产生了许多负面影响。为了发电而破化环境、汽车尾气产生温室效应、互联网和电话疏远了邻里关系。（阐述科学技术的两面效果）

2，
因此，科学研究和发展不能毫无限制的前进。胚胎干细胞研究，先限制后解禁。基因炸弹、克隆人。如果不。。。则。。。因此必要的限制是必要的。但是，过多的限制也是不可取的。反而还有可能束缚科学前进。例如，中世纪时期，出于宗教的巨大压力，科学进步得十分缓慢。

3，
政府不仅应该适当限制科学的研究和发展，也应该为科学研究发展创造更好的条件。例如，胚胎干细胞研究。由于长期得不到美国政府的支持，使得美国干细胞研究已经落后于世界上其他许多国家。又例如，美国为何成为世界第一科技大国。

结论：政府应该在某些方面适当限制和引导科学研究和发展，但是，政府也应该为科学研究和发展创造更好的条件

Should government need to impose few restrictions, if any, on scientific research and development? The speaker claims so, but i prefer that government lay dawn appropriate limits on them for following reasons:

Since the Industrial Revolution, human society has been influenced and changed significantly and dramatically. Such as, electricity providing power and promotion for contemporary society, telephone making it available for us to connect others whenever and wherever we want, refrigerator diversifying our food lists and internet connecting people in every corner of world at once. Admittedly, every time technologies revolution taking place, the step of human society will be put forward significantly. What’s more, the Industrial Revolution have completely changed the way we think and the way we live. Such as, stupendous people have moved from countries to metros, and the appearing of Communism opposing Capitalism, since the Industrial Revolution. However, with the development of technologies, some bad outcomes were resulted in also. For instance, environments was ruined by establishing of power stations, to supporting enough eletricity for thousands of industries and families, greenhouse effect results of tremendous cars and factories and relationship of relatives and neighbors is alienated by internet and telephone.

Therefore, the approaching of scientific research and development should be limited in some extent. For example, the Embryonic Stem Cell Research, which was forbidden at first for its threats to ethics, was lift recently by new American president Barack Obama. Besides, the Human Cloning is ban by now for ethics problems too, because there will be numbers of baby died and disable in the procedure of its research. So some limits in scientific research and development is indispensable for those bad aspects induced by sciences. What’s more, too many restrictions, however, will limits and block the improvement and development of science in contrast. Consider, for example, the science under the government of religions in The Middle Age in Europe developed very slowly and achieved little achievements. For example, Copernicus was almost suffered death when he put his conclusion of profiles of Earth in public, for his theory having threated the government. Too much limits, therefor, become disaster to science.

Although proper restrictions on scientific research and development is integral，creating and offering much more and better environments for them is also very crucial. To take Embryonic Stem Cell research for example again, for the ban of this research in America, the level of American stem cell research has been exceeded by many countries. So we can easily know how important it is to gain the supports and funds from government. And the reason that why American can become the super advanced in every aspects, also can throw a light over the significance of government supporting. Because the government is the only one who can distribute the public resource what the scientists need most.

In sum, government should limit and restrict the scientific research and development in some extent. And at the same time, much more and better conditions, what is indispensable for scientific research and development, should be offered by government too.

ningbo1990UID: 2641538

69. "Government should place few, if any（如果有的话）, restrictions on scientific research and development"

观点：反对作者的观点。

论证部分:

1，
工业革命以来，人类的生活发生了巨大的变化。电灯、电话、互联网、冰箱。每一次技术革命（工业革命）都是人类社会的一次巨大飞跃。然而，这也产生了许多负面影响。为了发电而破化环境、汽车尾气产生温室效应、互联网和电话疏远了邻里关系。（阐述科学技术的两面效果）

2，
因此，科学研究和发展不能毫无限制的前进。胚胎干细胞研究，先限制后解禁。基因炸弹、克隆人。如果不。。。则。。。因此必要的限制是必要的。但是，过多的限制也是不可取的。反而还有可能束缚科学前进。例如，中世纪时期，出于宗教的巨大压力，科学进步得十分缓慢。(good example)

3，
政府不仅应该适当限制科学的研究和发展，也应该为科学研究发展创造更好的条件(seems do not express logically, you may say “some research should be restricted while some should not, or even encouraged by gov.)。例如，胚胎干细胞研究。由于长期得不到美国政府的支持，使得美国干细胞研究已经落后于世界上其他许多国家。又例如，美国为何成为世界第一科技大国。

结论：政府应该在某些方面适当限制和引导科学研究和发展，但是，政府也应该为科学研究和发展创造更好的条件

Should government need (here you use two modal verbal, the second one, “need” is not necessary) to impose few restrictions, if any, on scientific research and development? The speaker claims so (agree with this viewpoint), but i/ I prefer that government should lay dawn appropriate limits on them for following reasons: (because this paragraph is the first one in this issue, so you should not uses this “:”, even if you use colon, the following paragraphs` TS should express in this way: first, second, last. But I suggest you should to complete this sentence with generalizing each main ideas of following paragraphs.)

Since the Industrial Revolution began/conducted, human society has been influenced and changed significantly and dramatically. Such as,( delete this comma) electricity providing/ provides power and promotion for contemporary society, telephone making /makes it available for us to connect others whenever and wherever we want, refrigerator diversifying /diversifies our food lists, and internet connecting people in every corner of world at once. Admittedly,
when every time technologies revolution taking place, the step of human society will be put forward significantly. What’s more, (here seems do not exist supplement relationship, so “admittedly” and “what`s more” should be deleted here and change the latter one to “and”.) the Industrial Revolution have completely changed the way we think and the way we live. Such as, (the same error) stupendous people have moved from countries to metros, and the appearing of Communism opposing Capitalism (does communism and capitalism have relationship with industrial? If you want to tell examples about Industrial Revolution, this instance should not be placed here.),
(delete this comma) since the Industrial Revolution. However,( here however is not used correctly, because you do not assert a viewpoint that these examples you have listed are good outcomes. You can change it to “While these examples shows some positive effects after Industrial Revolution outburst, however, the Industrial Revolution also brings some negative outcomes.)
with the development of technologies, some bad outcomes were resulted in also. For instance, environments was ruined by establishing of power stations, to supporting enough electricity for thousands of industries ( maybe factories is appropriate here.) and families, greenhouse effect results of/ from tremendous cars and factories and(change it to “,”)
relationship of relatives and neighbors is alienated by internet and telephone
( you should use the same forms, internet and telephone alienates relationships of ……).
Therefore, the approaching of scientific research and development should be limited in some extent. (logicalless sentence, this is the TS of this paragraph, here you use “therefore” means you want to make a further discussion from last paragraph`s TS which is “Since the Industrial Revolution began/conducted, human society has been influenced and changed significantly and dramatically.” But here the you talk about “scientific research and development should be limited” may just the detail, bad effects spring from IR, so you need to change your express.) For example, the Embryonic Stem Cell Research, which was forbidden at first for its
may threats to ethics, was lift recently by new American president Barack Obama. (Does this sentence have relationship with limited? Contrary to this, it may express a way that technology should not be limited.)
Besides, the Human Cloning is ban by now for ethics problems too, because there will be numbers of baby died and disable in the procedure of its research.
(Ridiculous reason.
Why this research needs fresh baby body?) So some limits in scientific research and development is/ are indispensable for those bad aspects induced by sciences. What’s more, too many restrictions, however, will limits and block the improvement and development of science in contrast. Consider, for example, the science under the government of religions in The Middle Age/ Medieval in Europe developed very slowly and achieved little achievements. For example, Copernicus was almost suffered death when he put his conclusion of profiles of Earth in public, for his theory having threated by the government. ( this example do not explain thoroughly, you should give a further discuss.) Too much limits, therefore, become disaster to science.
Although proper restrictions on scientific research and development is/are integral, creating and offering much more and better environments for them is also very crucial. To take Embryonic Stem Cell research for example again/ here I still use ESC research as an example, for the ban of this research in America, the level of American stem cell research has been/
was exceeded by many countries. So we can easily know how important it is to gain the supports and funds from government. And the reason that why American can become the super advanced in every aspects, also can throw a light over the significance of government supporting. Because the government is the only one who can distribute the public resource what the scientists need most.( universities and ungovernmental organizations also can support scientific research and help them develop, so this sentence is inappropriate.)

In sum, government should limit and restrict the scientific research and development in some extent. And at the same time, much more and better conditions, what is indispensable for scientific research and development, should be offered by government too.

The outline is well-reasoned but the article seems not represented well, so many facets appeared in this issue makes it lack of logical, and some examples may not well explain your TS, so this article need reorganize more logically.