ISSUE43(领导人高效和道德，球拍）

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To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.

观点：成为一个effective的领导，必须有一定的ethical and moral standards，但是不是highest

提纲：1 承认highest的重要性， low even no 不可能effective
        2 effective 不一定非得highest
        3 即使有highest 也不一定推出成为effective leader

                                                                                       有拍必回，谢谢大家~

Admittedly, there is no denying that the precondition of being a effective leader is of high ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, it’s high likely to bring about damages and harms to both the country and the public. That`s not to mean, however, an effective leader must be the model the ethical and moral standards, which is unreasonable and also impossible considering the reality. Moreover, there are many successful and famous leaders have been recognized as effective models although they themselves have little problem about ethical and moral standards. Accordingly, I agree with the statement insofar as high ethical and moral standards are the essential characters for the purpose of being an effective leader, while I can hardly share with the idea of highest ethical and moral standards. (入题有点慢，这些都是在说我下文的展开思路，貌似也不能少，请大家给意见)

To begin with, we should acknowledge the significant and indispensible role of ethical and moral standards play in directing our behaviors, especially for our leaders. A leader with high ethical and moral standards can not only avoid corruption and abusing power to the greatest extent, but also earn remarkable support and respect from the public, which will surly help the leaders to be more effective. Consider Zhou Enlai, former Premier of China, has been one of the most effective Premiers in Chinese history mainly because of his considerably high ethical and moral standards. By contrast, there is no more dangerous thing than electing a leader without ethical and moral standards, which most likely brings catastrophes to both the nations and the people. Accordingly, people will definitely never consider them as effective leaders. Take two examples to substantiate my viewpoint. Fist, Hideki Tojo convicted as a Class A war criminal once served as a senior colonel in Japanese forces. Second, Mussolini, Italian Fascist dictator and Premier, brought Italy into World War II. These tragedies took place mainly derived from the electing leaders with low, even no ethical and moral standards. They are doomed to be notorious forever and no one will consider them to be effective.

Notwithstanding, from my viewpoint, it would be unreasonable and even impossible for leaders to attain highest ethical and moral standards considering the reality. Besides, leaders can also promise to be effective even there is little problem with ethical and moral standards. For examples, William Jefferson Clinton, the 42nd President of US and the New Noble prize winner in humanity contribution in 2009, once got involved in the sexual scandal; Ron Moo-hyun, South Korea’s former President and the New Noble peace prize winner in 2009, had been charged of his relatives’ accepting bribes in his life; F.D Roosevelt, famous President of US, were connected with extramarital affair. Albeit those inappropriate behaviors, they are still recognized as great and effective leaders in the world.

Additionally, we have got to realize that one cannot promise to be an effective leader only depending on highest ethical and moral standards. Since the equally significant characters of being an effective leader, in my opinion, are horizon, courage, and endeavor. Consider Confucius, the greatest thinkers in Chinese history, had never been invited by any emperor to assist governing the country because his kindhearted couldn`t help achieve victory in battles. Thus, those emperors would prefer to have conversations with Confucius rather than appointing a post to him, let alone to be an effective leader.

To sum up, it would be unreasonable and impractical for us to expect our leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, and as I have discussed above, a little problem in ethical and moral standards actually do not prevent those great leaders from being effective.

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Admittedly, there is no denying that the precondition of being a effective leader is of high ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, it’s high likely to bring about damages and harms to both the country and the public. That`s not to mean, however, an effective leader must be the model the ethical and moral standards, which is unreasonable and also impossible considering the reality.Moreover, there are many successful and famous leaders have been recognized as effective models although they themselves have little problem about ethical and moral standards. Accordingly, I agree with the statement insofar as high ethical and moral standards are the essential characters for the purpose of being an effective leader, while I can hardly share with the idea of highest ethical and moral standards. (入题有点慢，
这些都是在说我下文的展开思路，貌似也不能少，请大家给意见)(感觉开头没有讲明确，看得晕晕乎乎的。这几句的意思是不是说具备高道德标准是成为有效领导的前提条件，但是又没有必要成为具备最高道德标准的模范。敢问具备高道德标准难道不能成为模范，一定要最高标准么？这个也未免太狭隘了吧)


To begin with, we should acknowledge the significant and indispensible role of ethical and moral standards play in directing our behaviors, especially for our leaders. A leader with high ethical and moral standards can not only avoid corruption and abusing power to the greatest extent, but also earn remarkable support and respect from the public, which will surly help the leaders to be more effective. Consider （considering）Zhou Enlai, former Premier of China, has been one of the most effective Premiers in Chinese history mainly because of his considerably high ethical and moral standards. By contrast, there is no more dangerous thing than electing a leader without ethical and moral standards, which most likely brings catastrophes to both the nations and the people. Accordingly, people will definitely never consider them as effective leaders. Take two examples to substantiate my viewpoint. Fist（Frist）, Hideki Tojo convicted as a Class A war criminal
once served as a senior colonel in Japanese forces. Second, Mussolini, Italian Fascist dictator and Premier, brought Italy into World War II. These tragedies took place mainly derived from the electing leaders with low, even no ethical and moral standards. They are doomed to be notorious forever and no one will consider them to be effective.
（这一段论证领导效率和道德的关系，举了几个例子，感觉都太浅了，比如周恩来的例子，直接就说他是有效的领导，是不是可以提下道德对他执政效率的影响，比如群众对他的支持使他的工作能够很好的执行。）

Notwithstanding, from my viewpoint, it would be unreasonable and even impossible for leaders to attain highest ethical and moral standards considering the reality. Besides, leaders can also promise to be effective even there is little problem with ethical and moral standards. For examples, William Jefferson Clinton, the 42nd President of US and the New Noble prize winner in humanity contribution in 2009, once got involved in the sexual scandal; Ron Moo-hyun, South Korea’s former President and the New Noble peace prize winner in 2009, had been charged of his relatives’ accepting bribes in his life; F.D Roosevelt, famous President of US, were connected with extramarital affair. Albeit those inappropriate behaviors, they are still recognized as great and effective leaders in the world.（这一段例子举得很好啊，不过好像和TS扣得不是很紧，你这里是要论证具备最高标准是不合实际的，而例子里面都是道德丑闻，这些和最高道德标准相差很远啊。）

Additionally, we have got to realize that one cannot promise to be an effective leader only depending on highest ethical and moral standards. Since the equally significant characters of being an effective leader, in my opinion, are horizon, courage, and endeavor. Consider Confucius, the greatest thinkers in Chinese history, had never been invited by any emperor to assist governing the country because his kindhearted couldn`t help achieve victory in battles. Thus, those emperors would prefer to have conversations with Confucius rather than appointing a post to him, let alone to be an effective leader.
（这一个反面论证很巧妙，举孔夫子的例子说明具备高道德标准反而会阻碍成为领导人。）

To sum up, it would be unreasonable and impractical for us to expect our leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, and as I have discussed above, a little problem in ethical and moral standards actually do not prevent those great leaders from being effective.
总得来说，lz的语言很好啊，基本没语法错误，很流利。例子也很丰富，值得学习，就是论据和论点结合要再好点就更好了，另外论点最好一开始比较明确让别人看出来，毕竟自己懂但是别人很难看出来也不好啊。
我的习作 https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1063741&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D101 帮忙看看啊，谢谢了！

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Admittedly, there is no denying that the precondition of being a effective leader is of high ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, it’s high likely to bring about damages and harms to both the country and the public. That`s not to mean, however, an effective leader must be the model the ethical and moral standards(an effective leader should preserve the highest moral standards因为我觉得应该强调highest), which is unreasonable and also impossible considering the reality. Moreover, there are many successful and famous leaders have been recognized as effective models（可以直接说many leaders have been recognized as effective 不用强调famous、 successful） although they themselves have little problem(这个地方是想说有问题吧？some problems) about ethical and moral standards. Accordingly, I agree with the statement insofar as high ethical and moral standards are the essential characters for the purpose of being an effective leader, while I can hardly share with the idea of highest ethical and moral standards. 入题有点慢，这些都是在说我下文的展开思路，貌似也不能少，请大家给意见(我觉得这样很好啊，又不雷同，范文里还不是有开头很长还一堆事例的，这样似乎有助于阐明观点，你也可以把moerover那句删掉直接入题)

To begin with, we should acknowledge the significant and indispensible role of ethical and moral standards play in directing our behaviors, especially for our leaders. A leader with high ethical and moral standards can not only avoid(resist) corruption and abusing power to the greatest extent, but also earn remarkable support and respect from the public, which will surly help the leaders to be more effective. Consider Zhou Enlai, former Premier of China(first premier of the People’s Republic of China), has been one of the most effective Premiers in Chinese history mainly because of his considerably high ethical and moral standards. By contrast, there is no more dangerous thing than electing a leader without ethical and moral standards, which most likely brings catastrophes to both the nations and the people. Accordingly, people will definitely never consider them as effective leaders. Take two examples to substantiate my viewpoint. Fist, Hideki Tojo convicted as a Class A war criminal once served as a senior colonel in Japanese forces. Second, Mussolini, Italian Fascist dictator and Premier, brought Italy into World War II. These tragedies took place mainly derived from the electing leaders with low, even no ethical and moral standards. They are doomed to be notorious forever and no one will consider them to be effective.（我觉得事例应该展开不然没有说服力，不过想说清楚也不容易，周总理的例子比较常见应该换一个.另外我想要求领导人道德的目的可能不是effective而是处于舆论影响的考虑，Suppose the leader of a country fails to manage his prevate life well and behaves poorly in public, people will doubt his ability and effectiveness to make right decisions on public affairs.）
Notwithstanding, from my viewpoint, it would be unreasonable and even impossible for leaders to attain highest ethical and moral standards considering the reality.(最好换一种表述避免重复it is unnecessary to require leaders to attain …) Besides, leaders can also promise to be effective even there is [little problem with ethical and moral standards]（ethical or moral foibles）. For examples, William Jefferson Clinton, the 42nd President of US and the New Noble prize winner in humanity contribution in 2009, once got involved in the sexual scandal; Ron Moo-hyun, South Korea’s former President and the New Noble peace prize winner in 2009, had been charged of his relatives’ accepting bribes in his life; F.D Roosevelt, famous President of US, were connected with extramarital affair. Albeit those inappropriate behaviors, they are still recognized as great and effective leaders in the world.(最后应该总结一下：leader’s private life is separate from his work, we should believe that his minor flaws in moral would not affect his work)

Additionally, we have got to realize that one cannot promise to be an effective leader only depending on highest ethical and moral standards. Since the equally significant characters of being an effective leader, in my opinion, are horizon（the horizon of personal experience）, courage, and endeavor. Consider Confucius, the greatest thinkers in Chinese history, had never been invited by any emperor to assist governing the country because his kindhearted couldn`t help (these emperors) achieve victory in battles. Thus, those emperors(they) would prefer to have conversations with Confucius rather than appointing a post to him, let alone to be an effective leader.(看了楼上才知道这个例子的作用， 应该说明下嘛)
To sum up, （high moral standards undeniably exerts an important role in leaders’ management and effectiveness, nevertheless）it would be unreasonable and impractical for us to expect our leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, and as I have discussed above, a little problem in ethical and moral standards actually do not prevent those great leaders from being effective.
例子和论证应该都有，我觉得就是没什么可说的也要把它和主题扯到一起。还有周总理，丘吉尔，克林顿的例子在新东方的课上好像都听过
都是我的想法，欢迎讨论。版主加油~

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Admittedly, there is no denying that the precondition of being a effective leader is of high ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, it’s high likely to bring about damages and harms to both the country and the public. That`s not to mean, however, an effective leader should preserve the highest moral standards, which is unreasonable and also impossible considering the reality. Moreover, many leaders have been recognized as effective  although they themselves have some problems about ethical and moral standards. Accordingly, I agree with the statement insofar as high ethical and moral standards are the essential characters for the purpose of being an effective leader, while I can hardly share with the idea of highest ethical and moral standards.

To begin with, we should acknowledge the significant and indispensible role of ethical and moral standards play in directing our behaviors, especially for our leaders. A leader with high ethical and moral standards can not only resist corruption and abusing power to the greatest extent, but also earn remarkable support and respect from the public, which will surly help the leaders to be more effective. Consider Zhou Enlai, first premier of the People’s Republic of China, considerably high ethical and moral standars had won him great respect from the public, which in turn made his work go on effectively and smoothly.(说明道德对effective的作用） By contrast,  supposing the leader of a country fails to manage his ethical and moral standards, people will doubt his ability and effectiveness to make right decisions on public affairs.(先从浅层次说如果leader连自己的道德问题都解决不好，那么人民就会怀疑他们的能力）What's worse,（再进一步说明危害性） there is no more dangerous thing than electing a leader without ethical and moral standards, which most likely brings catastrophes to both the nations and the people. Accordingly, people will definitely never consider them as effective leaders. Take two examples to substantiate my viewpoint. Fist, Hideki Tojo convicted as a Class A war criminal once served as a senior colonel in Japanese forces. Second, Mussolini, Italian Fascist dictator and Premier, brought Italy into World War II. These tragedies took place mainly derived from the electing leaders with low, even no ethical and moral standards. They are doomed to be notorious forever and no one will consider them to be effective.

Notwithstanding, from my viewpoint, it is unnecessary to require leaders to attain highest ethical and moral standards considering the reality. Besides, leaders can also promise to be effective even there are ethical or moral foibles. For examples, William Jefferson Clinton, the 42nd President of US and the New Noble prize winner in humanity contribution in 2009, once got involved in the sexual scandal; Ron Moo-hyun, South Korea’s former President and the New Noble peace prize winner in 2009, had been charged of his relatives’ accepting bribes in his life; F.D Roosevelt, famous President of US, were connected with extramarital affair. Albeit those inappropriate behaviors, they are still recognized as great and effective leaders in the world. Hence, from the examples, we can clearly realize that leader’s  private life is usually separate from his work, we should believe that his minor flaws in moral would not affect his work.(总结出本段TS，即使有道德瑕疵也不妨碍成为effective leader)

Additionally, we have got to realize that one cannot promise to be an effective leader only depending on highest ethical and moral standards. Since the equally significant characters of being an effective leader, in my opinion, are personal horizons, courage, and endeavor. Consider Confucius, the greatest thinkers in Chinese history, had never been invited by any emperor to assist governing the country because his kindhearted couldn`t help these emperors achieve victory in battles. Thus, they would prefer to have conversations with Confucius rather than appointing a post to him, let alone to be an effective leader.

To sum up, high moral standards undeniably exerts an important role in leaders’ management and effectiveness；（注意标点） nevertheless，it would be unreasonable and impractical for us to expect our leader maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, and as I have discussed above,  ethical and moral foibles  actually do not prevent those great leaders from being effective.

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字典上是说however和nevertheless意思一样时前面加分号， 但没说nevertheless前面加分号呀?
是不是第一次出现的人名都是要写全的？ 还有是 Bill Clinton 吧？ 还有一个地方surely写成surly了

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6# yanamour
1 克林顿的名字有两个：William Jefferson Clinton(正式名)
                               Bill Clinton(常用名）
2 关系副词位于后面一个句子的前面，该关系副词前面或者是分号； 或者是句号. 不可能是逗号,

谢谢你的批改~~