ISSUE73 想象力与知识 最后一周求指教 by pluka

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TOPIC: ISSUE73 - "In most professions and academic fields, imagination is more important than knowledge."
WORDS: 548          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2010-2-25 21:19:33
限倒是限成了，但是B4没写完= =语言和拼法也很纠结。
Proposed by Einstain(Einstein是E不是A！) and admired by the mass, the statement above stresses the importance of imagination over that of knowledge. True, sometimes imagination overshawed（overshadowed拼写！） the knowledge. However, situation varies in different dormains（domains无R！） and stages of the study and it is the balance between imagination and knowledge that promotes the flourish of those areas.

In the realm of science, knowledge, which constructs the foundation for any progress, overweighs（切记是outweigh表超过，overweigh表超载） the imagination especially at the begining（beginning双写N！） stage of the subject; nevertheless, imagination plays a indispensable part in the pursuit of higher and subtler destination. Undeniable is the importance of basic learning for any students or scholars in scientific areas. Exhibiting itself as extremely ordered and diciplined（disciplined无E有SC！） subject that obeys tightly nature's rules and laws, science necessitates abosulute understanding and obedience for the basic knowledge. It is unthinkable that a physics student can gain any progress without the learning of classic theories. Nor can any scholar achieve accomplishments without the in-depth study assisted by the concrete understanding for the subject. 

When moving out of the incipient stage of study and heading towards the higher destination, however, imagination works its magic in fueling scientists with inspirations and unfailling（unfailing没有双写！） creativity, with which profound breakthoughs can be attained. Einstain, who adored the imagination, established his theory of relativity largely out of the innovative mind spured（spurred双写R！） by imagination. In researching the speed of light, he carried out the famous mind-based experiment: to observe and think on the image created within his brain. Imagination opens new doors and lends scientists endless possible paths in the pursuit of truth. 

As for artists, while imagination, with which they are free from the constrain of the mundane, dominates their creations all along, the significance of knowledge remains conspicuous. Behind the seemingly unfettered exploitation and exploration of the inner feeling, artists, in most cases, regulate themselves with strict laws and rules. To create the striking beauty or the appealing melody, they should be equipped with a vast amount of knowledge on various aspects, such as colors, perspectives, lights and themes. A man who learns drawing, for example, is required to master the perspective and geometric desciplines（disciplines） in order to capture the trait of his objectives accurately. Armed with horned skills, artists start to unchain their imaginations, which, ultimately, bestow artworks with the life and lasting value. Hardly anyone will be attracted by a painting with mere lines or images that obeys the most strict perspective law yet appears dry and lifeless. The miraculous power of art lies in its freedom--the spirit elicited by imagination--to render the world in an unprecedented and unparalleled way. The knowledge secures（换词，enables） artists to voice their hearts, yet it is imagination, that fills their hearts with art. 

In the domain of economy, the relationship between imagination and knowledge appears to be more tricky and complicated. Being aware of the market rules and theories, cooperations may succefully survive the fierce competition. With the audacity spured by imagination, more significant achievement can be won. 

The natures of various fields differ, so too are their emphases on imagination and knowledge. There are, however, rules that shared by the majority: while knowledge provide people and subjects with foundations, imagination serves as the wellspring where the unfailing inspirations come from. Combine the two properly, and one attains the true progress and accomplishment.

唔，因为快考了却还有大把东西没准备，所以考前恐怕不能回拍。但保证考后（3月3日）立刻回! 嗯那时候回拍的好处就是俺会拍得更仔细~可以留链指定拍哪篇，或到时我找一篇回拍。谢谢捧场~

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http://www.helium.com/knowledge/54564-imagination-vs-knowledge
可以参考下这个链接；
case by case 不错，不过要是能讨论下imagination and knowledge的关系是不是更好？
个人见解，现在发现写AW要很多背景知识才行。

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1# pluka

题目观点Proposed by Einstain(Einstein是E不是A！) and admired by the mass, the statement above stresses the importance of imagination over that of knowledge. 让步观点True, sometimes imagination overshawed（overshadowed拼写！） the knowledge. 转折观点However, situation varies in different dormains（domains无R！） and stages of the study and it is the balance between imagination and knowledge that promotes the flourish of those areas.

观点1支持knowledge
In the realm of science, knowledge, which constructs the foundation for any progress, overweighs（切记是outweigh表超过，overweigh表超载） the imagination especially at the begining（beginning双写N！） stage of the subject; nevertheless, imagination plays a(an) indispensable part in the pursuit of higher and subtler destination. （前面这句的让步关系好像有点问题，本段的观点是支持knowledge的重要，而让步的重点在后面，以为是支持imagination）Undeniable is the importance of basic learning for any students or scholars in scientific areas. Exhibiting itself as extremely ordered and diciplined（disciplined无E有SC！） subject that obeys tightly nature's rules and laws, science necessitates abosulute(拼写错误) understanding and obedience for the basic knowledge. It is unthinkable（undoubted比较好吧） that a physics student can gain any progress without the learning of classic theories.(这句不对吧) Nor can any scholar achieve accomplishments without the in-depth study assisted by the concrete understanding for the subject.

观点2 支持imagination
When moving out of the incipient stage of study and heading towards the higher destination, however, imagination works its magic in fueling scientists with inspirations and unfailling（unfailing没有双写！） creativity, with which profound breakthoughs（少了r）
can be attained. Einstain, who adored the imagination, established his theory of relativity largely out of the innovative mind spured（spurred双写R！） by imagination. In researching the speed of light, he carried out the famous mind-based experiment: to observe and think on the image created within his brain. Imagination opens new doors and lends scientists endless possible paths in the pursuit of truth.

支持knowledge
As for artists, while imagination, with which they are free from the constrain of the mundane, dominates their creations all along, the significance of knowledge remains conspicuous. Behind the seemingly unfettered exploitation and exploration of the inner feeling, artists, in most cases, regulate themselves with strict laws and rules. To create the striking beauty or the appealing melody, they should be equipped with a vast amount of knowledge on various aspects, such as colors, perspectives, lights and themes. A man who learns drawing, for example, is required to master the perspective and geometric desciplines（disciplines） in order to capture the trait of his objectives accurately. Armed with horned skills, artists start to unchain their imaginations, which, ultimately, bestow artworks with the life and lasting value. Hardly anyone will be attracted by a painting with mere lines or images that obeys the most strict perspective law yet appears dry and lifeless. 这里开始是支持imagination
The miraculous power of art lies in its freedom--the spirit elicited by imagination--to render the world in an unprecedented and unparalleled way. The knowledge secures（换词，enables） artists to voice their hearts, yet it is imagination, that fills their hearts with art.
这一段的是否考虑把前面支持knowledge的部分删去一些，因为你的观点1是支持knowledge，观点2是支持imagination，第三段是为了说明不同balance between knowledge和imagination的重要性，不然第三段看起来好像是支持knowledge，觉得与你的main thesis相斥了。
In the domain of economy, the relationship between imagination and knowledge appears to be more tricky and complicated. Being aware of the market rules and theories, cooperations may succefully survive the fierce competition. With the audacity spured by imagination, more significant achievement can be won. （这段有点多余的感觉，而且也没看明白要表达的观点是什么）
The natures of various fields differ, so too（too可以删去吧） are（so前后的句子中动词应该是同一类吧） their emphases on imagination and knowledge. There are, however, rules that shared by the majority: while knowledge provide（加s） people and subjects with（删掉） foundations, imagination serves as the wellspring where the unfailing inspirations come from. Combine the two properly, and one can eventually attain(加入can eventually，语气上觉得顺一点) the true progress and accomplishment.

祝楼主成功哦~~~我也写类似的一篇了，考完了记得给我回拍哦~

Issue 73 18:59~19:45
"Sometimes imagination is a more valuable asset than experience. People who lack experience are free to imagine what is possible and thus can approach a task without constraints of established habits and attitudes."

1.main point: +,however,not +
2.+high tech,find ways to ease life: working online(e-commerce,postoffice)
3.+art: paintings, Da Vinci
4.-some kind of routine work, research, need experience
5.conclusion

When comparing the significance of imagination and experience, the speaker states "sometimes" imagination overweighs experience since it imagination can help achieve a goal free from established habits and attitudes. I fundamentally agree with the speaker that under certain circumstances, the role of imagination dominants the other. Nonetheless, the importance of experience, or so called established habits and attitudes, can not be simply ignored.

Perhaps the most compelling illustration to understand the significance of imagination is the industry of high tech. Consider how e-commerce, which means doing business online, comes into being. People in the past time do business in a way that purchasing goods from one place and then selling them to another place where the price is higher. The problem is how to find the upper-stream seller and lower-stream buyer. Merchants finish this work by collecting information from his family, friends, and co-operators. Of course, young merchants can not gain the information easily. And, this pattern of trade lowers the efficiency and increases the risk of transactions undoubtedly. In order to deal with these weaknesses, some young merchants gave up the old pattern of trade and imagined to use internet to find sellers and buyers.
Of course, they made it. What facilitates our commercial life is the imagination of someone works without limitation from established habits.

Imagination's power also outstands in the fields of arts. Take the development of painting for instance. In the time of Da Vinci, the mainstream art style is portraying life as realistic as possible. We can imagine if Da Vinci sticks to that old style, he might easily mess up in the sea of art. However, he dared not having no experience in realistic style but rather endeavored to use his imagination to open up a new art style. And we all know he did it successfully. This kind of examples can be found in the field of sports. Many athletes get gold medals when they first enter international championships. Although they lack the experience of how to entertain judges and audience, they still performed greatly by virtue of their own styles and beauty. Shawn, who is the world champion of women's gymnastics in 2008 Olympic Games, loved by everyone in her first show in Beijing in spite of her inexperience. It is easy to see that people who lack experience can also approach difficult task for they are free to imagine without being trapped in old customs.

However, the importance of imagination can not be overestimated, since some other work still needs experience badly. A researcher of biology must be experienced in how to use microscope; a bank clerk must be experienced in counting money; a photographer must be experienced in selecting suitable equipments; and a lecturer must be experienced in attracting audience's attention. We common people also should have sufficient experience in our own work to maintain our life going well.

In sum, people who lack of experience can use their free imagination to achieve goals in certain field. While other routine work, which most common people are currently devoting to, needs experience to keep a normal operation rather than imagination. When evaluating the comparative significance of the two, we have to analyze concrete circumstances.

plukaUID: 2721764

When comparing the significance of imagination and experience, the speaker states "sometimes" imagination overweighs experience since it（删） imagination can help achieve a goal free from established habits and attitudes. I fundamentally agree with the speaker that under certain circumstances, the role of imagination dominants the other. Nonetheless, the importance of experience, or so called established habits and attitudes, can not be simply ignored.（一般而言，若出现转折，则作者的重点应该在转折词后面的内容，比如按这个主题句分析，就会以为作者要重点讲经验不可忽视。但事实上后文重心（至少从篇幅来看）是落在想象力的重要性。这就与T有些微的不符。可以考虑用让步代替转折。）

Perhaps the most compelling illustration to understand the significance of imagination is the industry of high tech（正式文体一般不要简写或缩写). Consider how e-commerce, which means doing business online, comes into being（已经出现了，过去时）. People in the past time do business in a way that purchasing goods from one place and then selling them to another place where the price is higher. The problem is how to find the upper-stream seller and lower-stream buyer. Merchants finish this work by collecting information from his family, friends, and co-operators. Of course, young merchants can not gain the information easily. And, this pattern of trade lowers the efficiency and increases the risk of transactions undoubtedly.（既然一直谈论的是past time，过去时） In order to deal with these weaknesses, some young merchants gave up the old pattern of trade and imagined to use internet to find sellers and buyers. Of course, they made it. What facilitates our commercial life is the imagination of someone works without limitation from established habits.（例子涉及到想象力了，但是仅仅是涉及而已，达不到compelling的程度。今昔对比做的不错，但是没有觉得重点落在了想象力上。觉得最后一句有些勉强。without limitation from the established habits也觉得不是很顺。）（另，ISSUE写了不少之后，就慢慢觉得光是举例子是很不够的。分析和说理有些时候更重要。此段完全靠例子撑起来，鲜少说理和分析。是否可以在此方面加强。比如可以再一开始谈一下商业领域想象的重要性，灵活啦创新啦适应环境啦之类，而后再举例，会显得更有根据。）

Imagination's power also outstands in the fields of arts. Take the development of painting for instance. In the time of Da Vinci, the mainstream art style is portraying life as realistic as possible. We can imagine if Da Vinci sticks to that old style, he might easily mess up in the sea of art. However, he dared not having no experience in realistic style（不顺，表达显得有些chiniglish。此外，双重否定--除非能表达得很清晰--尽量不要用以免冗赘与模糊。） but rather endeavored to use his imagination to open up a new art style. And we all know he did it successfully. This kind of examples can be found in the field of sports（+as well）. Many athletes get gold medals when they first enter international championships. Although they lack the experience of how to entertain judges and audience, they still performed greatly by virtue of their own styles and beauty. Shawn, who is the world champion of women's gymnastics in 2008 Olympic Games, loved by everyone in her first show in Beijing in spite of her inexperience. （先不论例子中就没有论述过想象力给运动员带来的影响，主要的问题是：这个例子切题吗？运动员夺冠是因为想象力吗？常识告诉我这过分夸大了想象力的作用，而忽略了刻苦的训练啦冲劲啦观众的新鲜感啦之类的因素）It is easy to see that people who lack experience can also approach difficult task for they are free to imagine without being trapped in old customs.（文中红字部分应当改成过去式或者虚拟语气）

However, the importance of imagination can not be overestimated, since some other work still needs experience badly. A researcher of biology must be experienced in how to use microscope; a bank clerk must be experienced in counting money; a photographer must be experienced in selecting suitable equipments; and a lecturer must be experienced in attracting audience's attention. We common people also should have sufficient experience in our own work to maintain our life going well.

In sum, people who lack of experience can use their free imagination to achieve goals in certain field. While other routine work, which most common people are currently devoting to, needs experience to keep a normal operation rather than imagination（顺序问题：把rather than部分掉到experience后面用逗号分隔，否则可能会与operation的地位放在一起，搞混）. When evaluating the comparative significance of the two, we have to analyze concrete circumstances.
整体看，主要是例子的选择和论述需要加强。另可以考虑增加说理和分析，而非一味堆砌例子。如何说理可以参考北美范文。另，要注意语法时态问题。

以上~