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19# dphenixy
Recently a social survey showed that the majority of people prefer having others make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves. I believe that this survey just revealed an unfamiliar? (What are you trying to express by 'unfamiliar'?) truth, with awareness of the following facts? (This kind of opening doesn't really answer the question. It doesn't add any meaningful weight to the discussion either. Your reader will not know anything more about the issue you're to discuss than what the question already gives.).
First of all, following others’ decisions is a habit developed and built since we were young children. For example, in primary or high schools, children are obliged to study some compulsory subjects, even if we (Who are 'we'? I thought you were talking about 'children'.) had no interest in them. At home, they are always requested to listen to their parents or other senior family members, otherwise punishments would fall on them. Under such circumstance, most of those children will be used to living under others’ guilds? (Do you mean 'guidance'?) or orders rather than living in terms of their own preferences. My experience in childhood is a good case in point. One day, I bought some cartoon posters on my way back from school, and posted them on the wall of my bedroom. Nevertheless, my mother tore down them and told me never to post such ugly stuff. From then on, I dare not do such things without permission ('Permit' is a physical certificate of permission.). No doubt, as I grew up, I formed a habit of having others make decisions for my own affairs because of my shortage in making decisions by myself. (This example is not strong enough because I don't see where the 'decision' making is. Guidance and orders are not decisions in themselves, but what people do to enforce decisions. The process of decision making is a slightly different matter from giving orders. In your descriptions, both you and your mother appear pretty impulsive, which is not exactly what one'd expect when talking about decision making. Your idea is good, but you probably need to re-package the example to emphasize the decision making factor.)
In addition, to diminish (I think a better word for 'responsibilities' would be 'minimize'.) or evade responsibilities is another important factor for people to get others to make decisions for them. As we know, in the adult world, making decisions often means taking responsibilities. Therefore, the majority of people tend to share the risks with others who make decisions for them. For example, when confronting some troubles or in a dilemma at work, most employees prefer to ask their colleagues or bosses for making the decision rather than to deal with it by their own means. The reason is obvious that if those people made a wrong decision by themselves, they may be fired, while if they (Now these 'they's are getting confusing.) just followed an improper decision from others, their responsibilities will be much lighter.
Admittedly, there are also some preeminent people who like to grasp the destiny in their own hands. However, their greatness are just highlighted by their scarcity among people. (I don't really get what this paragraph is doing here. It doesn't seem to be discussion any valid point.)
In consequence, I maintain that most people prefer having others make decisions for them rather than making decisions by themselves due to their restricted childhoods or fear to of the responsibilities involved in decision making.
总结:
这篇能感觉得到明显开头结尾没有什么可说的,而且也有一些表意比较糊涂的言语。论点是否消极并不是考官关心的,答案没有对错,能论述得圆满就可以。在这一点来说的话,你的第二个论点比较好,因为和decision-making有直接关系,但是第一个论点就看不出和decision有什么关系,所以清晰的程度要注意一下。 |
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