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CynthiaMomoLeeUID: 2587828

In this argument, the author recommends that the company should continue to pay the Delany Personnel Firm(D) to assist the laid-off employees to find jobs rather than focus on the Walsh Personnel Firm(W). In order to support the conclusion, the speaker claims that last year the people could find jobs more quickly with the help of D, and according to an experience in W, the number who got jobs was small and the D owns more staff and offices. However, the statement is based on the unsubstantiated assumption and reasons and should be rejected.

In the first place, the author fails to validate the real result of whether the D would be effective in seeking jobs. Last year might be the period that more and modern company came into the city while at the same time many employees desire to occupy work. Additionally, the sense of satisfaction from the ones who just are employed by the effort of the D cannot be known in the argument.

Secondly, the situation eight years ago is not presentative of the circumstance now. Maybe at that time, the family income had increased so that the members who were fired did not need to go to work outside and just depended on their spouse. Or perhaps more and more individuals were inclined to go on learning fresh knowledge, which was more meaningful and useful, from their perspective.

Finally, there is no cause-and-effect relationship between the lager and bigger number of staff and branch offices would be contributive to seeking more jobs. Other possible alternatives cannot be denied such as the trend of the local economical development or the requirement of the laid-off person.

To sum up, the author makes a unconvincing comparison between the W and D. What's more, the writer fails to consider the current trend to the surrounding and the attitude of the average person. Furthermore, the speaker should provide more information about the real and persuasive phenomenon from the W's function, and specific news from the D.

jjooyyUID: 2704028

In this argument, the author recommends that the company should continue to pay the Delany Personnel Firm(D) to assist the laid-off employees to find jobs rather than focusing on the Walsh Personnel Firm(W). In order to support the conclusion, the speaker claims that last year the people? could find jobs more quickly with the help of D, and according to an experience in W, the number who got jobs was small and the D owns more staff and offices. However, the statement is based on the unsubstantiated assumption and reasons and should be rejected.

In the first place, the author fails to validate the real result of whether the D would be effective in seeking jobs. Last year might be the period that more and modern company came into the city while at the same time many employees desire to occupy work. Additionally, the sense of satisfaction from the ones who just are employed by the effort of the D cannot be known in the argument.(表达不清楚)

Secondly, the situation eight years ago is not presentative of the circumstance now. Maybe at that time, the family income had increased so that the members who were fired did not need to go to work outside and just depended on their spouse.(这个理由是不是比较negtive?) Or perhaps more and more individuals were inclined to go on learning fresh knowledge, which was more meaningful and useful, from their perspective.

Finally, there is no cause-and-effect relationship between the lager and bigger number of staff and branch offices would be contributive to seeking more jobs.(between后面有and吧) Other possible alternatives cannot be denied such as the trend of the local economical development or the requirement of the laid-off person.

To sum up, the author makes an unconvincing comparison between the W and D. What's(正式英语，最好别用缩写) more, the writer fails to consider the current trend to the surroundings and the attitude of the average person. Furthermore, the speaker should provide more information about the real and persuasive phenomenonz(information) from the W's function, and specific news from the D.

中间论述几段，最后要再加一些结论扩展句
再多一些不是模板的东西更好～

by jjooyy