issue 50

nieyongUID: 2742661

TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
WORDS: 574+47
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/3/9 20:05:19
请指教啊~~！！


Education is really a hot issue people are frequently talking about. Is it appropriate for all faculty to spend time working in professions outside the academic world which are relevant to the courses they teach, as the speaker asserts? In my opinion, it is true that what the author has advocated is, to some extent, beneficial to the quality of education. However, it is hard to strike a balance between the courses they teach and the jobs outside.


To begin with, we cannot emphasize the importance of the quality in education too much. As education is what most people need to have insightful view of the world they live in. Just as one old saying goes:"it is never too old to learn", in certain aspects, receiving education is a lifetime thing to enjoy. Also "education is the number one industry of the world", said by a contemporary philosopher, has edified us to better improve the quality of education so as to develop the world.


However, the rapid development of the world around us makes knowledge renew much more frequently. The knowledge within the classes is no longer fit in with the huge changes that happen every day. What we learn on the book in the classroom may be even contrary to one result of a research newly published out. Unfortunately, teachers without the experience of working outside are unable to keep up with the rapid development, and all their have the capability to teach is merely the knowledge on the book, thus impeding the improvement of the quality in education.


On one hand, especially in the realm of engineering courses, the experiences and skills learnt from working outside makes it possible that teachers are able to have a relatively thorough study of the courses they teacher. For example, teachers in the realm of electrical engineering always give students the impression that resistant in the circuits can be ignored as they usually make little difference. Actually, when applying to the large circuits across the nation, resistant is rather huge and needs complex calculation which cannot be diminished. Without the knowledge learnt outside the course, practical issues cannot be solved and teachers are unable to teach students to have a thorough consideration of all the factors that could influence the result of the academic world.


On the other hand, The experience of working outside in the positions relevant to his specialty, whether successful or frustrating, can give the faculty as well as the students some warnings of errors made in practical conditions and advice on what the students should do when coming across difficulties. Moreover, according to the experience of working in real conditions, they can provide students with more detailed and accurate suggestion on the plan of their future careers.


Admittedly, working in the professions relevant to the courses they teach outside can give faculty and students such benefits. How to strike a proper balance between the courses and the outside jobs still remains a problem. As in some more theoretical field, such as math, physics, teachers needs more time on the study of pure theory. Another apt illustration involves the geologist, whose working places are always in the wild where rare people exist. If they all go out to work, who take the position to teach courses to the students? Therefore, a proper balance of the time consumed is really crucial.


In conclusion, working in the profession relevant to their teaching courses is, to some extent, appropriate. However, striking a proper balance between the time consumed inside and outside is more important. Anyway, I suppose Internet, which has spread to every corner of the world, is a more useful and convenient tool to get access to the practical knowledge when needed.

plukaUID: 2721764

1、B1部分谈教育的重要性，观点OK，但总觉得论证部分不强。虽然名人名言法是从小国内作文强调的论证方法之一，可是这个真的那么有说服力吗？私以为不如分析说理。而且国外好像不那么看重名言。
2、B2最好来个例子。论述得太笼统了。
3、B3的例子感觉有些奇怪。虽然是联系到题目了，但不够compelling。老师给学生那样的印象是为啥？因为这些老师没有工作经验？（是因为计算方便利于理论教学吧= =）如果有了工作经验会怎样？学生因此能够学到什么？（另，看了B3B4，意识到B2是个过渡段。。）
4、B4的观点与B3是否会有交叉的地方？此外论证显得单薄了些，可否更具体或者举例。（不过感觉一举例，就会很像B3的内容了）
5、admittedly段尚可。不过既然观点是要论证外出工作的缺陷，请在让步句后面加转折符号。另外，对照全文主旨句(However, it is hard to strike a balance between the courses they teach and the jobs outside.)可以看到，这个主旨句给人的感觉是作者会重点讨论这个平衡如何难以达成。但是作者在后文讨论的大半是外出工作的好处，平衡难达成仅仅在末尾占了一点点篇幅，似不妥。注意一般而言转折词后面的内容会被视为重点，所以如果不想主要讨论平衡难以达成，那么就不要用转折，用让步。

sd4886656UID: 2499446

巧了啊 我也刚写了篇50
Why his face again? I always feel confused when this old man come to my TV screen. A professor? A TV-star ? It seems that everyone has such experience when turn your TV to a program about economy or law.
I concede that spend time working outside academic world surely contribute to improving the expertise of a professor or a faculty member .The experience brought from the other fields are useful in today’s combined technological world. Though most of them don’t have such a lucky chance to be guest of certain TV program, it is also a indisputable fact that in most circumstances not only the faculty member himself but also the college and university where he works could greatly benefit from his extra achieve. Especially for the ones who has certain ability ,the consequence is undoubtedly two-to-win.
Aside from the experience and academic achieve brought from other fields, reputation and popularity could also be gained. Assume that a professor was invited to give more speeches in front of overall audience , more and more people adore him, then  somebody he is. And it follows that the university or college behind him seems to be more authoritative and its reputation increases as well as more students like being a member of this university.
But, consider the ones who are still struggling with their academic papers and who have little spare time or the ones-even the tasks from university or college has made him crazy. Should those ones also step into this kind of action? Certainly not. Assuming a professor always dreams of gaining  popularity and reputation and puts his academic work and research aside. What a serious problem .Moreover, though the example above is too exaggerated, whereas there also exist other impacts about this .As different people has diverse interest, we could hardly guarantee all faculty members could focus on the work relevant to their own field ,since it is entirely possible that what kind of field to pursue always are  related to these so-called elites’ special interests. All of that result in the consequence that the promotion of their university or college, if any, was not balance. Or perhaps most of their achievement has nothing to do with their original works. In a word, the recommendation or claim cited in the statement has ignore the feasibility and necessity ,which might lead to a total confusion instead of any benefits.
In my observation, such problem might be solved under a detailed regulation with which we could gain both benefits inside and outside academic work. To ensure a professor could achieve this goal , university could evaluate the his capability to determine how much time he could afford. When the faculty member were found to create less benefits, university must limit his activity outside his work to ensure the regular work. Only with the compatibility of two kind of work ,we could therefore enhance the level of our university and college .