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s499992008UID: 2688967

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country


There is an old saying that better education can lead to a prosperous and strong country.It is the experience of our forfathers,however,it is correct even in morden society.Education is dispensible in playing the role of developing a country,and reasons follow behind that many superior students graduating from school devote to prosper our country,and many shools invent a huge amount of inventions which have a big influence on agriculture every year.
Our country is now in a condition which our ecnomy is booming,and it just so happens that our country need more intellegint students.A majortiy of companies cannot employ the applicant who they trully need at job fair.Like last year,GuangZhou traped in a embraased situation of lacking 30 thousand of advanced technologe engineering,as well as construcion bank require nearly one thousand of professional manager.To get rid of this situation,our country should enhance strengh of improving school to cultive more students who can meet need of factories and companies.
More attention on impoving school can benefit to form nice and integritble conception.Citizens in the atmosphere of government emphasizing school development willing to let their school to attend college,encourage people around him/her to work hardly,especially have power to face crime.For instance,my friend,jack,lost his purse which have 2300 RMB and
a couple of bank card,nevertheless,the day after he lost his purse,a college student came to his home and gave his purse return with the help of policeman,and my friend insist on expressing grateful to the student with 500 RMB as reward,but the student rejected.Such pretty quality of student have we can lead to a more powful country.
Last but not least,many inventions which have a big influence on country economic development,especially for china.China is a big agriculture country which based on many inventions from shool research,such as transgene of crop,the recollection of crop waste to advance to be oil of car and energe for family use.And these kind of examples can listness.
In one world,there is no doubt that school improving can result in development of a country.

lain0119UID: 2695504

There is an old saying that better education can lead to a prosperous and strong country.It is the experience of our forfathers,however,it is correct even in morden society.Education is dispensible(应该是indispensable) in playing the role of developing a country,and reasons follow behind that many superior students graduating from school devote to prosper our country(最好具体点,到底在哪些方面呢),and many shools invent a huge amount of inventions which have a big influence on agriculture every year.
(最好有个连接词)Our country is now in a condition which our ecnomy is booming(定语从句的使用让句子有点啰嗦了),and it just so happens that(直接用连接词therefore好些?!) our country need(s) more intellegint students.A majortiy of companies cannot employ the applicant who they trully need at job fair.Like last year,GuangZhou traped in a embraased situation of lacking 30 thousand of advanced technologe engineering,as well as construcion bank require(s) nearly one thousand of professional manager(s).To get rid of this situation,our country should enhance strengh of improving school to cultive more students who can meet need of factories and companies.
(连接词)More attention on impoving school can benefit to form(benefit forming) nice and integritble conception.(这句话什么意思...不懂...)(后来懂了,就是培养高素质人才嘛~但是这句话真的很含混)Citizens in the atmosphere of government emphasizing school development willing to let their school to attend college,encourage people around him/her to work hardly,especially have power to face crime.(不知道你在说什么= =)For instance,my friend,jack,lost his purse which have 2300 RMB a couple of bank card(s),nevertheless,the day after he lost his purse,a college student came to his home and gave his purse return with the help of policeman,and my friend insist on expressing grateful to the student with 500 RMB as reward,but the student rejected.Such pretty quality of student have we can lead to a more powful country.最好要说一下这么高素质的人才真是improving school的结果啊~还有,拾金不昧好象和crime没有什么关系,顶多是有道德= =
Last but not least,many inventions(要说明这是由于improving school带来的) which have a big influence on country economic development,especially for china.China is a big agriculture country which based on many inventions from shool research,such as transgene of crop,the recollection of crop waste to advance to be oil of car and energe for family use.And these kind of examples can listness.
In one world(在一个世界中?!),there is no doubt that school improving can result in development of a country(developing a country).

以上。句子的意思最好摆得清楚些，如果难句不能表达意思还不如用短句呢~

s499992008UID: 2688967

Even thouth the basic science playS the role like that foundation to the building,while just from this spectacular,we draw conlusion thar all university students should take basic science course,regardless of their field of concentration may be hasty.Learning basic science course better can construct a straight way for gaining our field professional knowledge.
To start with,the student who have obtained professional knowledge can be called talent.Nowdays,the society require specialised talent rather than basic science talent,and we all know that cultivating a common talent just need 4 years in general,while cultivating a professional talent probably 7 years even more.For instance,a phamacy research company willing to hire people who be capable of development of dugs,such as antitumor drugs,new type of antihypertensive and so on.Accoring to the last year report,in guangdong,some companies lacked of high-technology engineering as many as 30 thousands.In one word,in this competitive society,the company would not hire common people with owning basic science skills,however,hire professional talents.
On the other hand,for students who be about to graduate,possessing specilised skilles would provide more opportunity to choose a better job.For example,applicants with computer science degrees would not only be qualified for jobs in high-tech companies,they would also be well prepared for any job with computer skills as a prerequesite.With a large range of potential jobs to choose from,students are more likely to find a job that suits their particular needs and interests.On the contrary,the students who just owing basic science skills might have narrow direction to find a job,and also have lower salary compare with professional talent.
Last but not least,the benefits from professional knowledge are all prerequisite of learning basic science.If we just pursue our major as much as possible,neglect significance of learning basic science,I deem that our high knowledge building would be blow down with just breeze.In another word,there would not have fish without water.

蔓落UID: 2779470

Even thouth the basic science playS(拼写注意） the role like that（the） foundation to the building,while(前面已经有even though） just from this spectacular,we draw conlusion thar（拼写错误） all university students should take basic science course（复数）,regardless of their field of concentration may be hasty.Learning basic science course better can construct a straight way for gaining our field professional knowledge.
To start with,the student who have obtained professional knowledge can be called talent.Nowdays,the society require specialised talent rather than basic science talent,and we all know that cultivating a common talent just need 4 years in general,while cultivating a professional talent probably 7 years even more（后面的分句缺少谓语吧）.For instance,a phamacy research company（be） willing to hire people who be capable of development of dugs,such as antitumor drugs,new type of antihypertensive and so on.Accoring to the last year report,in guangdong,some companies lacked of high-technology engineering as many as 30 thousands.In one word,in this competitive society（两个in同时出现有点重复，状语可以放在后面）,the company would not hire common people with owning basic science skills,however,hire professional talents.
On the other hand,for students who be about to graduate,possessing specilised skilles would provide more opportunity to choose a better job.For example,applicants with computer science degrees would not only be qualified for jobs in high-tech companies,（缺少连词）they would also be well prepared for any job with computer skills as a prerequesite.With a large range of potential jobs to choose from,students are more likely to find a job that suits their particular needs and interests.On the contrary,the students who just owing basic science skills might have narrow direction to find a job,and also have lower salary compare with professional talent.（这段给的分论点很鲜明，例子证明很流畅，比上段更具有条理性）
last but not least,the benefits from professional knowledge are all prerequisite of learning basic science.If we just pursue our major as much as possible,neglect significance of learning basic science,I deem that our high knowledge building would be blow down with just breeze.In another word,there would not have fish without water.（结尾段与开头的例子很好的照应，最后一句总结很巧妙，学习学习）

总的来说文章条理很是清晰，分论点也很明确，特别感觉文章的后半部分很不错~但是任然会存在一些小的语法错误，比如第二段很多句子我不太理解意思~层次不是很分明~
互相学习~加油！

老王家的小猫UID: 2781258

Even though the basic science plays the role like that foundation to the building, while just from this spectacular, we draw conclusion that all university students should take basic science course, regardless of their field of concentration may be hasty. Learning basic science course better can construct a straight way for gaining our field professional knowledge.（最后一句为什么和前后都没有联系呀？）
To start with, the students who have obtained professional knowledge can be called talent. Nowadays, the society require specialized talent rather than basic science talent, and we all know that cultivating a common talent just need 4 years in general, while cultivating a professional talent probably 7 years even more. For instance, a phamacy research company willing to hire people who be capable of development of drugs, such as antitumor drugs, new type of antihypertensive and so on. According to the last year report, in guangdong, some companies lacked of high-technology engineering as many as 30 thousands. In one word, in this competitive society, the company would not hire common people with owning basic science skills ,however, hire professional talents.(In a word, in this competitive society, the company would rather to hire professional talents than those common people with only basic science skills.) 这段有点不明白，中间说培养专才和通才所用时间不同有什么用？
On the other hand, for students who be（are）about to graduate, possessing specialized skills would provide more opportunity to choose a better job. For example, applicants with computer science degrees would not only be qualified for jobs in high-tech companies, they would also be well prepared for any job with computer skills as a prerequisite. With a large range of potential jobs to choose from, students are more likely to find a job that suits their particular needs and interests. On the contrary, the students who just owing basic science skills might have narrow direction to find a job, and also have lower salary compare with professional talent.

Last but not least, the benefits from professional knowledge are all prerequisite of learning basic science.(呵呵，从后面看来，这句说反了吧) If we just pursue our major as much as possible, neglect significance of learning basic science, I deem that our high knowledge building would be blow down with just breeze. In another word, there would not have fish without water.
（个人感觉用词很有深度，不过中间To start with……， 有点不清楚具体逻辑是什么。呵呵，还要注意词汇的拼写哦，这里我没有标出来，不过错太多可是会吃亏的喽~）

s499992008UID: 2688967

Though the advantages of having a humorous and easygoing teacher are considerable,they can not compete with the benefits of having a serious and strict teacher, when efficiency is taken into deliberation. A serious and strict teacher always can create an atmosphere that makes students not afraid to relax when they are learning.
To start with, a serious and strict are always regarded as an exponent of responsible. For instance,my friend,jack,brought his son to register an english extention class whose teacher is very serious and also is my friend’s high school classmate. Thanks to my friend’s son who is a very naughty and believe that he is the son of teacher’s friend, he can gain more loose and relaxed surronding,but the fact is that teacher alwayes punished him like other studnets to write more times when they had a wrong spell of english words. In conclusion that ,a teacher who is very serious and strict virtually equal every individual student, no matter who he is.From my spectacular,strict and serious teacher is presentation of responsible.
On the other hand, strict and serious teacher can make students not slacking and pay more attention on the class.For example,I still remember in high school that my deskmate was sleeping at class,and  the teacher who is strict noticed him and punished him to stand on his feet outside of the classroom for one hour.Since then, he was never afraid of sleeping at his class,at the same time, we afraid to be punished to sleep at class so we never do that. Obviously,our performance on this course increased agradually because of this teacher.Serious and strict teacher can bring great record on classes.
      Serious teacher can bring the benefits I mentioned above,but the coin has two sides. Serious teacher would set barriers between teachers and students,and not benefit students to express their activity and creative ideas. Take my friend’s son I mentioned above as an another example.Once he came out a easy and direct a solution to a mathsmatics question, but he afraided to consult it with teacher whether his thought is right or wrong, while the exam paper had the question and the result proved that his solution to this question was wrong.
     In a nutshell,weighing gains and losses,I deem that serious and strict teacher is more effective.
   感觉这篇写的超烂。。而且我自己也注意到了没有对比，不知道在A比B好的问题上，没有对比行吗？

lain0119UID: 2695504

(总觉得前面要加点什么背景什么的~)Though the advantages of having a humorous and easygoing teacher are considerable,they can not compete with the benefits of having a serious and strict teacher, when (the)efficiency is taken into deliberation. A serious and strict teacher always can create an atmosphere that makes students not afraid to relax (不害怕休息?!有点奇怪)when they are learning.
To start with, a serious and strict are(主谓不一致) always regarded as an exponent of responsible(责任的解释者?!这个用法很奇怪...) . For instance,my friend,jack,brought his son to register an english extention class whose teacher is very serious and also is my friend’s high school classmate. Thanks to  my friend’s son who is a very naughty (幸亏我朋友的儿子很淘气?!这个用法逻辑和语感都不通啊...)and believe that he is the son of teacher’s friend, he can gain more loose and relaxed surronding(gain surrouding?!没得这个用法的),but the fact is that teacher alwayes punished him like other studnets to write more times when they had a wrong spell of english words(had spelled english words wrong). In conclusion that ,a teacher who is very serious and strict virtually equal(equal动词的用法错了，这个是没得使动用法的。。。） every individual student, no matter who he is.（in conclusion后面最好就不要有别的句子了，毕竟都总结了不是？！~）From my spectacular,strict and serious teacher is presentation of responsible.（外国人的思维还是跟中国人的思维有差异的，毕竟不是惩罚学生就叫有责任。。。）
On the other hand, strict and serious teacher can make students not slacking（slack) and pay more attention on(to learning) the class.For example,I still remember in high school that my deskmate was sleeping at class,and  the teacher who is strict noticed him and punished him to stand on his feet outside of the classroom for one hour(这恐怖的老师。。。）.Since then, he was never afraid of sleeping at his class,at the same time, we afraid to be punished to sleep at class so we never do that（这老师真叫一个反人类，人累了当然休息下午可厚非。。。考试的时候尽量不要举这样的例子。。。这老师不叫严格，叫变态。。。）. Obviously,our performance on this course increased agradually because of this teacher（这个逻辑有点不顺，要说明你们成绩的提高是因为你们不敢在她课上睡觉，从而集中了精神，否则还有可能是别的原因，比如那个老师本来课就讲的很好）.Serious and strict teacher can bring great record on classes.
   Serious teacher can bring the benefits I mentioned above,but the coin has two sides. Serious teacher would set barriers（这个阻碍是指的实体的阻碍，用在这里不恰当） between teachers and students,and not benefit（这个词也不是很恰当，用and inhibit） students to express their activity and creative ideas. Take my friend’s son I mentioned above as an another example.Once he came out a easy and direct a（？） solution to a mathsmatics question, but he afraided to consult it with（consult to） teacher whether his thought is right or wrong, while（这个连接词也很诡异，用as a result 来连接可能好点） the exam paper had the question and the result proved that his solution to this question was wrong.这个让步段必须再次打回来，比如指出尽管如此大部分学生还是受益于严厉的老师的2 E7 B3 J0 ^$ f* T
     In a nutshell,weighing gains and losses,I deem that serious and strict teacher is more effective.

真的如你所说这篇文章是没得对比的，个人认为还是要有对比哈~否则ETS就会来一句the strusture is somewhat developed， 分儿也跟着下去了；另外文章的例子和逻辑也要好好雕琢一下，有些例子没说到位以至于有点不精准；词也有一些用得不是很恰当的地方，还要多多加油呢~~~

s499992008UID: 2688967

Some students are more influencd more by their teacher than by their friends
     In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to the rising of the significance of education, the teacher plays the key role influence students whether their students have a good record, sufficient competitive power, and correct morals and ethics. In terms of these aspects, students are more influenced more by their teacher than by their friends.
     To start with, teachers have more valuable experience than students’friends who are usually as the same age as they are. For instance, my frined’s son jack, encountered a problem that his psp was gone, and he thought that his psp was stolen by his roommate who had a bit of quarrel with him before, and his initiate friend adviced him to search his dormate private spaces without permission, and this event was known by his teacher . Obviously, the action was prevented by his teacher.After his teacher knew the details of this event, and he told jack that he should have a consideration whether his psp was gone,and finally jack found his psp under his bed. In conclusion that, the teacher have more experience help students to copy with the problems in life time, and it avoid unnecessary misunderstanding.  
Secondly,teacher have more knowledge than students’ friends in general.Students gained a fair protion of their knowledge vary basic science from specialized major, from primary shool to college, and their current knowledge are their basic foundment success in the future. Their friends,however,always spend their time on palying sports, communicating,going back home after class together,we can say that the majority of their topics and times they are talking about are nothing relationship with learning. Take jack as another example.Jack are willing to talk about the topics such as,football, NBA matchs, as well as computer games. In another word, I believe that even though the time of friends together be occupied more than teachers, the knowledge from their topic are limited.
Last but least, friends are more familiar with students than teachers. Friends may be spend time together all day, but teachers comprehend their studens just in the school.Teachers can not being together with students all time, their advice to the students would be more fewer comparatively
All in all, I deem that some students are more influencd more by their teacher than by their friends.

水谣碧玺UID: 2765062

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to the rising of the significance of education, the teacher plays the key role that influence students whether their students have a good record, sufficient competitive power, and correct morals and ethics. In terms of these aspects, students are more influenced more by their teacher than by their friends.
To start with, teachers have more valuable experience than students’ friends who are usually as the same age as they are. For instance, my frined’s (friend) son jack, encountered a problem that his psp(??这是啥) was gone, and he thought that his psp was stolen by his roommate who had a bit of quarrel with him before, and his initiate friend adviced（advice是名词，怎么有过去时？应该用advised,这是动词形式）him to search his dormate private spaces without permission, and this event was known by his teacher . （这个句子好长的，读的累有点繁琐，看能不能分开写）Obviously, the action was prevented by his teacher. After his teacher knew the details of this event, and he told jack that he(这些he有点混乱啊，指代不清) should have a consideration whether his psp was gone, and finally jack found his psp under his bed. In conclusion that, the teacher have more experience help students to copy with the problems in life time（lifetime）, and it avoids unnecessary misunderstanding.  , O; r) k9 m" y5 i2 y
Secondly, teachers have more knowledge than students’ friends in general. Students gained a fair protion(portion? of their knowledge vary basic science from specialized major, from primary school to college, and their current knowledge are their basic fundament success in the future. Their friends, however, always spend their time on playing sports, communicating, going back home after class together, we can say that the majority of their topics and time(s) they are talking about are nothing relationship with learning(发现你很喜欢把好几个句子穿在一起，如果这样表达并不如简单句效果好的话，还是用简单句吧，毕竟意思要比句式重要。可以尝试别的句型，少写点从句). Take jack as another example. Jack are willing to talk about the topics，such as, football, NBA matches, as well as computer games. In another word, I believe that even though the time of friends together be occupied more than teachers, the knowledge from their topic are limited." u3 h4 z: M' M' \5 d& q, f
Last but least, friends are more familiar with students than teachers. Friends may be spend time together all day, but teachers comprehend their students just in the school. Teachers can not being together with students all time, their advice to the students would be more fewer comparatively
All in all, I deem that some students are more influenced more by their teacher than by their friends.(结尾是不是可以多写点啊，还是时间不够了)

楼主的拼写错误较严重啊，建议多注意一下啊。

站着游泳的鱼UID: 2774999

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to the rising of the significance of education, the teacher plays the key role influence students （on） whether their students have a good record, sufficient competitive power, and correct morals and ethics. （你的意思是老师对于学生的帮助很大吗？个人觉得这种复杂的句子最好不要出现在第一段，第一段用简单句子表明立场就好了。）In terms of these aspects, students are （more去掉） influenced more by their teachers than by their friends.（个人认为第一段表明观点表明的有点不太完全，只是在这些方面老师影响的比较多吗？更多别的方面呢？是老师影响的多还是朋友影响的多呢?作者的观点不鲜明。）
     To start with, teachers have more valuable experience than students’ friends who are usually as the same age as they are. For instance, my （frined’s friend’s注意一下拼写） son jack, encountered(改成come up against )a problem that his psp was gone, and he thought that his psp was stolen by his roommate who had a bit of （去掉a bit of）quarrel（quarreled） with him before, and his initiate friend(什么叫initiate friend可能是最好的朋友的意思吧？如果是的话，用best friend就行了) adviced（advised） him to search his dormate（roommate） private spaces without permission, and this event（event指大事，个人觉得用thing就行了） was known by his teacher . Obviously, the action was prevented（stopped） by his teacher. After his teacher knew the details of this event（thing）, and he told jack that he should have a consideration whether his psp was gone, and finally jack found his psp under his bed. In conclusion that（去掉that）, the teacher have more experience（to） help students to copy（cope） with the problems in life time, and it（去掉it） avoid unnecessary misunderstanding.  / R! |) e+ e8 |% D0 ^
   Secondly, teacher have more knowledge than students’ friends in general.（这句话有点绝对哦~）Students gained（gain，注意前后的时态一致哦~） a fair protion（portion还有这是相当一部分的意思吗？） of their knowledge vary basic science from specialized major, from primary shool to college, （这部分结构有点混乱哦~from science to specialized major）and their current knowledge are their basic foundment success in the future.（这句话结构有点混乱，可以改成这样：Most of the knowledge that students gained from primary school to university, vary from basic science to specialized major is their fundamental of success in the future.这样是不是顺溜点呢~呵呵~ ） Their friends, however, always spend their time on palying sports, communicating（chatting）, going back home after class together, we can say that the majority of their topics and times they are talking about are nothing relationship with learning.（这句话中国特色很浓呦~国外应该更重视身心的发展吧~） Take jack as another example, Jack are willing to talk about the topics such as football, NBA matchs（拼写matches）, as well as computer games. In another word, I believe that even though the time of friends（getting） together be（is） occupied more than teachers, the knowledge from their topic are limited.(这句话貌似有两个主语……这个错误我以前也是一直犯个不停，改成这样比较好：I believe that even though we spend much more time getting along with friends, we get little knowledge from them.)
   Last but least(这个词组用的粉帅气，但是丢了一个单词呦~last but not least), friends are more familiar with students than（with）teachers. Friends may be spend time together all day, but teachers comprehend (contact with) their studens just in the school. Teachers can not (cannot不用缩写这个意识很好呀~) being together with students all(the) time, their advice(advices) to the students would be more fewer comparatively7.(这是啥意思……是不是要说老师的建议更重要呢？其实用much more essential就可以了。)
All in all, I deem that some students are more influencd mre （估计是定时赶喽的吧……拼写呀influenced more by） their teacher(teachers) than by their friends.
觉得童鞋很喜欢用长句子和复杂词，托福注重的是逻辑正确然后把话说清楚说明白，就好了，句子不是越长越好，长短结合，关键是要读的流利，舒服，词藻华丽不会加分的，建议童鞋多看看别人的例文，写句子时候，放轻松~尽量像说话一样平实地把道理说出来就好鸟~没什么别的了，童鞋继续努力哈~we still have enough time, trust yourself~~!

s499992008UID: 2688967

Students who can keep their own rooms organized are more likely to succeed
My friend jack, are customed to organize his room when he is young with his mother education. Because of this well custome,jack slowly learned how to regulate himself well and how to cultivate his independent ability.And all these provided a substantial foundation for jack successful future.
      To start with, students who can keep their own rooms organized have the ability of regulating himself, and they knew to give himself a warn in heart that he should concerntrate on learning when he have a relaxation for a long time; they knew what is advantage or disadvantage to them when they are in an unfamiliar surronding; as well as they know which kind of friend should be made. For instance, jack never play with his neighborhood young children who usually go to have a fight and see porn movie and other violence movie.
     On the other hand, students who can keep their own rooms organized have the ability of making decisions by themself. For people who want to have a success, it is necessary to have this kind of ability. In terms of people who maybe have his own company in the future, it is inevitable to make decision what the goal should be setted for the company. For example, when i was young, and I was company with my mother to shopping to buy clothes which they decided to purchase which kind of clothe. After I grow up, I buy clothes myself.At first, the clothes which I bought can not satisfy me after long time wearing, and it not happens on the clothes my mother bought for me. In another word, the decisions you make in your first or second time may not be smart, but with the experience increasing your decision will be more and more corrective.
     Last but not least, keeping rooms organized require more patience and persistance. It is easy to keep room organized 3 days,however, it is hard to keep it for 10 years. The feature we obtained in the process of organizing room also may one factor which determine our success in the future.
     All in all, the benefits from organizing room can promote people success.

s499992008UID: 2688967

Printed books have greater effects on society than television has
     Nowdays, the economic and techology are booming, and it can bring us huge change on our life. Like before, the knowledge we learned nearly come from the printed books, however, the ways we obtain the knowledege are various, and one of the most primary is especially television, which is not only affect the way of gaining knowledge, but also other aspects such as entertainment, the way of awaring of current events in the world and so forth.
To start with, it is no doubt that printed books are already influence our since it is invented, but the strengh of it degrads gradualy.We seldom to see that people at home learned something through books, and most majority of situations the books are put into the bookshelfs. Besides, the price of books are alreays dear, for instance, an NBA magzine cost 30 RMB, and we can acknowledge the contest through television with just little price of electricity.In addition, reading books need a peaceful environment and just allow one people to read, on the contrary, the televison can permit people around television sitting beds to enjoy the time together. I will give some light to this point, for example, my frineds and I can watch NBA match together, and reading books can not.
On the another hand, television prosper our life more enjoyable, and we just need to switch on the television and choose the program which we like among various programes such as basketball match, drama, movie and examples are listless, which is differ to reading books can only limit one aspect of knowledge. Information can be known quickly and comprehendly, for example, the wenchuan earthquake in china are broading live to all of the people all day which makes us know catastophe at the first time,though, the printed books cannot do this.
Even though, we cannot ignore the funtion of printed books, especially for students like me, and a portion of knowledge we learned in the college are from printed books, but we selely to see the book after getting off the duty of students, we prefer to learn something through television.
早上写的作文。。没有改。。时间来不及了，，要去上课了。。所以错误应该不少

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Nowdays, the economic(economy) and techology are booming, and it can bring(整个逗号到这一砣用bringing吧) us huge change on our life. Like(Unlike) before, the knowledge we learned(learn) nearly come(comes) from the printed books(book), however(删）, （at present) the ways we obtain the knowledege are various, and one of the most primary (way) is especially (the)television, which is(删） not only affect(affects) the way of gaining knowledge, but also other （缺谓语）aspects such as entertainment, the way of awaring of current events in the world and so forth.( z+ U  ]/ h% {# `! m这一段的小错误太多了吧~~~）
To start with, it is no doubt that printed books are（删） already influence our （lives？）since it is（it has been) invented, but the strengh of it degrads gradualy.We seldom to(删to) see that people at home learned(learn) something through books, and (the) most majority of situations the books are put into the bookshelfs(bookshelves).(这句话可以用高级点的独立主格结构~） Besides, the price of books are（is) alreays dear(最好不用这个词~用expensive好点~）, for instance, an NBA magzine cost 30 RMB, and we can acknowledge the contest through （the）television with just little(low) price of electricity.In addition, reading books need a peaceful environment and just allow(s) one people(person) to read, on the contrary, the televison can permit people around television（有点啰嗦哈~） sitting beds to enjoy the time together（这句话怎么说都有点奇怪，电视可以让很多人坐在床上围着电视看= =用沙发都比床好些吧。。。）. I will give some light to this point, for example, my frineds and I can watch NBA match together, and reading books can not.'（这个举例很多余。其实这段的主题句不单要点明书本失去了力量，最好还要点明电视是如何powerful~）
On the another(other) hand, (the) television prosper(prospers) our life more enjoyable, and we just need to switch on the television and choose the program which we like among various programes such as basketball match, drama, movie and examples are listless, which is differ to reading books can only limit one aspect of knowledge. （主题句精炼点吧。。。4行的写主题句啊。。。）Information can be known quickly and comprehendly, for example, the wenchuan earthquake in china are（were） broading（being broadcast) live to all of the people all day which makes us know catastophe at the first time,though, the printed books cannot do this. (这段没有主题句。。。集中说一点，到底是内容丰富还是传播信息及时？）
Even though, we cannot ignore the funtion of printed books, especially for students like me, and a portion of knowledge we learned in the college are from printed books, but we selely to see the book after getting off the duty of students, we prefer to learn something through television.(这段其实和第二段的意思是重合的，而且。。。一段居然只有一句话。。。）
上课回来还是好好改一下吧~lz有很多错误其实是可以自己改正的~

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like to make decision by myself or by others
     Majority of famous people in the world all make decisions by themself when they face dilemma situation, after a period of time training, which lead them to walk on a successful way. And few people in this famous people region are willing to be designed the way by other people. I deem that making decisions by other people for ourself is riduculous, because no one, even our parents, cannot know more than yourself about your features.  
      To start with, the poeple who know you overall and basicly is always yourself, no matter where your are and what time it is. Every one has his/her own ideas, even they described it to other people, however, they maybe not set up a comprehensive plan for you because they donot know what is the true and essential meaning of your idea. On the contrary, people can based on himself convention to think out a good idea. For instance, my mother accompanyed with me bought clothes for me in the first 20 years of my life, with the time changing, my style of clothes have already been changed, like last time, she bought a childfish clothes for me, if i wear that clothes walking on the road of college, that everyone would laugh me. Even though, parents are the second most familiar people also make some errors.
     On the other hand, making decisions provide opportunities to practise our judgement ability, which has huge influence on people's future life. Take millionaire Bill Gates for example. He made up his mind to be the owner of himself, when he was a child, and at that time he had already choose his clothes by himself rather than his parents.Hence, he created a well foundament of independent, leading to a big decision for himself, at fact a big change for the world, is choosing to quit the school and opening his company with his friends, Microsoft, the most influencial company in the world. If he just followed his parents plan going on studying at the college, and maybe not have a Bill Gates who already be known in all over the world.  
         In a nutshell, people who make decisions by themself are likely to be success