issue185 丑闻有益 求拍~

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TOPIC: ISSUE185 - "Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."
WORDS: 356
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/3/14 1:12:42

老土得很，总起，1，政治丑闻，2，社会企业丑闻  3，不良丑闻的不良影响

Scandals are negative information about a celebrity or famous objects which are detested and welcome at the same time. Some scandals can ruin people's whole life, while others promote the popularity of the objects by increasing their exposures to the public. In either way, with the impact they bring to the society scandals can shift public attentions on problems that were previously neglected or concealed by parties concerned, thus impel efforts to solve the problems. In this sense, scandals are really helpful.

The most influential impact come from political scandals because they could breed substantial political changes that may not be achieved through doctrinarism or incremental reform. Officials' defalcation prevail in China, but little has the situation been improved until last year, when scandal of an official regaling cigarettes which worth thousands of money diffused on the Internet. The official was fiercely attacked for appropriating public funds for personal enjoyment and was soon dismissed. Throughout history, cases in which presidents of nations are disposed by morally unacceptable scandals are abundant. Nixon was forced to resign after the famous Watergate scandal, which drew world wild attention on leadership ethics and supervision. Sensational scandals of corruptive officials are mostly favored by news media--people like to see bad guys getting caught. By revealing those political scandals and evoking public antagonism towards political derelict behavior, media can really serve as important tool of public supervision.


Social scandals, corporation scandals especially, are also conducive to positive changes. Entrepreneurs forgot business ethics and national regulations, while scandals can give them warnings and remind them. In 2007 melamine was found in milk powders made in China. The news threw an atom bomb into the Chinese society and quickly shifted public attention on previously neglected area—food security. After a long period investigation into the scandal, media revealed that the whole milk powder industry had seriously violated food security regulations and had connived in the melamine excess. Later the government enforced stricter law on food inspection and the food industry was more cautious ever since. If this scandal had not been disclosed by the report of melamine milk affected infants, food security would probably remain a distant topic for Chinese people and the industry would continue tread on public health.





However, a coin has two sides. While the society on the whole can benefit from scandals in the long run, some people fell as victims of scandal, especially illusive scandals—rumors. Lu wuxuan, the prime minister of Korean, committed suicide after the scandal of his families' defalcation was exposed. He himself was believed to have no direct relation to those defalcations. Lu was murdered by unbearable pressure induced by rumors. Women are even more fragile in a scandal. In the spring of 2008, some private photos of sexual life of Chen Guanxi, a Hong Kong singer, was posted on the internet. Female artists in those photos suffered from severe public criticism and are forced to give up their career in the entertainment field. This incident has showed the public the dissolute lifestyle of certain artists, but some people accused the man who stole those pictures from Chen and popularized them for encroaching on individual privacy. Those scandals are based on incomplete or even false information, ignorance of human rights, and most importantly, are of little value to the benefit of the society, can be devastating and should be carefully prohibited.

In sum, scandals are helpful in many aspects for rousing public awareness for new social crisis, still it is important to fight against fake scandals and distinguish scandals from rumors in private sphere.


revised version  657 words

123runfordreamUID: 2697608

issue185 丑闻有益
求拍~
TOPIC: ISSUE185 - "Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."
WORDS: 356
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/3/14 1:12:42

老土得很，总起，1，政治丑闻，2，社会企业丑闻  3，不良丑闻的不良影响

Scandals are negative information about a celebrity or famous objects which are detested and welcome at the same time. Some scandals can ruin people's whole life, while others promote the popularity of the objects by increasing their exposures to the public. In either way, with the impact they bring to the society scandals can shift public attentions on problems that were previously neglected or concealed by parties concerned, thus impel efforts to solve the problems. In this sense, scandals are really helpful.

The most influential impact come from political scandals because they could breed substantial political changes that may not be achieved through doctrinarism or incremental reform. Officials' defalcation prevail in China, but little has the situation been improved until last year, when scandal of an official regaling cigarettes which worth thousands of money diffused on the Internet. The official was fiercely attacked for appropriating public funds for personal enjoyment and was soon dismissed. Throughout history, cases in which presidents of nations are disposed by morally unacceptable scandals are abundant. Nixon was forced to resign after the famous Watergate scandal, which drew world wild attention on leadership ethics and supervision. Sensational scandals of corruptive officials are mostly favored by news media--people like to see bad guys getting caught. By revealing those political scandals and evoking public antagonism towards political derelict behavior, media can really serve as important tool of public supervision.


Social scandals, corporation scandals especially,(这个定义严格说来不是很准确，political scandal 也算是social scandal 的一部分，还是很重要的一部分。凡事丑闻，必定是在社会上引起了广泛关注才有其坏的或者如你所说的好的影响。) are also conducive to positive changes. Entrepreneurs forgot business ethics and national regulations, while scandals can give them warnings and remind them. In 2007 melamine was found in milk powders made in China. The news threw an atom bomb into the Chinese society and quickly shifted public attention on previously neglected area—food security. After a long period investigation into the scandal, media revealed that the whole milk powder industry had seriously violated food security regulations and had connived in the melamine excess. Later the government enforced stricter law on food inspection and the food industry was more cautious ever since. If this scandal had not been disclosed by the report of melamine milk affected infants, food security would probably remain a distant topic for Chinese people and the industry would continue tread on public health.

However, a coin has two sides. While the society on the whole can benefit from scandals in the long run, some people fell as victims of scandal, especially illusive scandals—rumors. Lu wuxuan, the prime minister of Korean, committed suicide after the scandal of his families' defalcation was exposed. He himself was believed to have no direct relation to those defalcations. Lu was murdered by unbearable pressure induced by rumors. Women are even more fragile in a scandal. In the spring of 2008, some private photos of sexual life of Chen Guanxi, a Hong Kong singer, was posted on the internet. Female artists in those photos suffered from severe public criticism and are forced to give up their career in the entertainment field. This incident has showed the public the dissolute lifestyle of certain artists, but some people accused the man who stole those pictures from Chen and popularized them for encroaching on individual privacy. Those scandals are based on incomplete or even false information, ignorance of human rights, and most importantly, are of little value to the benefit of the society, can be devastating and should be carefully prohibited.

In sum, scandals are helpful in many aspects for rousing public awareness for new social crisis, still it is important to fight against fake scandals and distinguish scandals from rumors in private sphere.

revised version  657 words

In my opinion, you did a good job!
但是语法小问题要注意。你的思路中途有易道，我在想是否有什么不妥，AWINTO或者effective writing里有提到的一点。所以我有个小建议，你的第一段话里只说明了要对scandal的helpful方面阐述，是否在措辞上有所让步？我意思是，比如你暗示下大部分情况下scandal对社会是有帮助的，好为你下图阐述害处方面埋下伏笔？小建议~~

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2# 123runfordream

Scandals are negative information about famous individuals or groups which are detested by the parties concerned. There are many kinds of scandal relating to different subjects. Generally speaking, with the impact they bring to the society, political and corporation scandals can shift public attentions onto problems that were previously neglected or concealed by parties concerned, thus impel efforts to solve the problems. In this sense, some scandals are really helpful.
前面那个开头没写好，重写了……指出丑闻有很多种，本文讨论两种可能对社会有益的。

The most influential impact comes from political scandals because they could breed substantial political changes that may not be achieved through doctrinarism or incremental reform. Officials' defalcation prevail in China, but little has the situation been improved until last year, when scandal of an official regaling cigarettes which worth thousands of money diffused on the Internet. The official was fiercely attacked for appropriating public funds for personal enjoyment and was soon dismissed. The government took advantages of it and warned all public servants to be abstemious. 发现原文只写了官员的下场，忘记提出positive changes了。Throughout history, cases in which presidents of nations are disposed by morally unacceptable scandals are abundant. Nixon was forced to resign after the famous Watergate scandal, which drew world wild attention on leadership ethics and supervision. Sensational scandals of corruptive officials are mostly favored by news media--people like to see bad guys getting caught. By revealing those political scandals and evoking public antagonism towards political derelict behavior, media can really serve as important tool of public supervision and contribute to positive changes.  



Corporation scandals that drew broad public attention can also be conducive to the social welfare. 既然我的例子只说了企业丑闻，那就只写这个吧，跟政治丑闻也好区分点。Entrepreneurs forgot business ethics and national regulations from time to time, while scandals can give them warnings and remind them. In 2007 melamine was found in milk powders made in China. The news threw an atom bomb into the Chinese society and quickly shifted public attention to previously neglected area—food security. After a long period investigation into the scandal, media revealed that the whole milk powder industry had seriously violated food security regulations and had connived in the melamine excess. Later the government enforced stricter law on food inspection and the food industry was more cautious ever since. If this scandal had not been disclosed by the report of melamine milk affected infants, food security would probably remain a distant topic for Chinese people and the industry would continue to tread on public health.




However, a coin has two sides. 不能这样用么？While the society on the whole can benefit from scandals in the long run, some people fell as victims of scandal, especially illusive scandals—rumors. Lu wuxuan, the prime minister of Korean, committed suicide after the scandal of his families' defalcation was exposed. He himself was believed to have no direct relation to those defalcations. Lu was murdered by unbearable pressure induced by rumors. Women are even more fragile in a scandal. In the spring of 2008, some private photos of sexual life of Chen Guanxi, a Hong Kong singer, was posted on the internet. Female artists in those photos suffered from severe public criticism and are forced to give up their career in the entertainment field. This incident has showed the public the dissolute lifestyle of certain artists, but some people accused the man who stole those pictures from Chen and popularized them for encroaching on individual privacy. Those scandals are based on incomplete or even false information, ignorance of human rights, and most importantly, are of little value to the benefit of the society, can be devastating and should be carefully prohibited.

In sum, scandals are helpful in many aspects for rousing public awareness for new social crisis, still it is important to fight against fake scandals and distinguish scandals from rumors in private sphere. private sphere用错了吗？私人领域私人空间的意思啊，政治学术语

劳烦你又再看了一眼~~~THX！

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今天我请教了老师，他的建议是把两种可能性都在论点段提出。偶在研究研究~~