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3.30----Newspapers and magazines are the best way of learning about a foreign country

We used to gain a lot of foreign information through newspapers and magazines, we waited for their publication to learn what had happened in the last couple of days in the outside world . However, from my perspective, it is not accurate to say they are the best way of learning about a foreign country since we have already got more advanced media besides the own disadvantages of newspapers and magazines.

In the first place, with the rapid development of information technology, internet now has taken the place of newspapers and magazines to be the most popular media for us to learn information. Compared with newspapers and magazines, the foreign information on the website is free and up to date. Meanwhile, as blogs and twitters become globally prevailing, people are more likely to share their lives in the foreign countries or their experiments and knowledge about foreign cultures on the website. For instance, if you want to have vacations in some foreign places, you just need to search on the website, huge amounts of information including other’s suggestion in choosing the best travel path or their learning and gathering from the foreign culture will be shown as the result, I’m sure you could gain a lot from those informaiton. Another important thing is, those direct and personal information do not need you to pay expenses on them like the newspapers and magazines. So at this point, I don’t think newspaper and magazines are of uniqueness and significance for people nowadays as they used to be.

Moreover, besides the strong competitor, newspapers and magazines have their own deficiency. As being the official publications, the attitudes showed in them are restricted. For example, during the period of time in second world war, China and Russia formed an alliance, so Chinese newspapers at that time all described Russia as a wealthy, peaceful and harmony country. And people all received the concept and wishing for the help of them .Unfortunately they finally found that Russia was also trapped in numerous troubles themselves. So as journalists tend to put their own emotions and judges in their articles of the magazines and newspapers due to the political conditions and their personal attitudes, thus they may misguide people to mistakenly recognize the foreign countries.

Although newspapers and magazines are attracting since they are easily portable and have  plenty of excellent photograghs and articles, we can not just describe them as the best media for us to learn about a foreign country. In case that we might be misguided by them， we could turn to other methods to learn about the foreign countries.

发觉以前作文字数都太少了。。以后尽量都写点，起码要到450吧~~

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前几天网络出现问题，我会尽快给你改了发过来，实在不还意思，见谅啊

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3.31-----Advertisements make products seem better than they are.

Advertisements is one of the major instruments for companies to convey their product information and to attract more customers. However, products in advertisements nowadays seems more faraway from the realistic ones, which make advertisements less reliable among people. We could explain this phenomenon as a way for companies to appeal more clients and to make profit.

In the first place, for those products of good qualities, advertisements are necessary because only through this way could let them known and be used among clients. From my perspective, it is not a serious deal for those products to be seem better they actually are in the advertisements. For instance, we are always fascinated by the advertisements of the famous brand---Adidas, they use large amount of technologies and sports stars to stress more power on their advertisements, I was once deeply impressed by one of their advertisement, in the advertisement, the basketball athlete Michael Jondon just flied to the spot wearing the Adidas shoes. Wearing that pair of shoes actually can not allow you to fly, but the advertisements really help to increase the demand of the shoes.

And secondly, for those commodities which are actually poor of their qualities, it is nothing strange for the companies to exaggerate the function and appearance of the products. Usually companies selling products of poor qualities just want to make profit. They do not care about fame or their reputation. So in this situation, they tend to make their products seem devoid of deficiency in the advertisement, while the real ones are disappointing. For instance, we always found the stake in the advertisements so delicious and appealing that we immediately went to the restraint to tasted it, but the real food they put in front of us was so tiny and ordinary that made us puzzled about the difference between advertisements and reality. In a word, making profit is the final goal of some companies , so they do not care the real qualities of their products and just devote more to make their advertisements look as attractive as possible.

Thirdly, in some conditions, the products are actually the same of they are in reality, it is just the music or the background sceneries accompanying the advertisements that make them seem more extraordinary. In fact, advertisement is one kind of art. As we all know, art comes from life, but it finally departs from the real life. We should accept advertisements the same artistic works as those dramas and movies which have been regarded as unrealistic art.

All in all, I think that advertisements do make products seem better than they are. However, the phenomenon may out of a inspiration of companies to make more profits, or out of the desire to make the products popular, or just out of a artistic demand. No matter the motivation is, we as customers should be more careful when select products through those advertisements.

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3.30 修改 by speedzshaw

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3.30 修改 by crazylu

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我明天改好给你吧！下午你好像加我Q了 还蛮巧的 ^^ 18# chailybai

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31-----Advertisements make products seem better than they are.( _3 T$ x& h+ Y  b2 W4 u

Advertisements is one of the major instruments for companies to convey their product information and to attract more customers. However, products in advertisements nowadays seems more faraway from the realistic ones, which make advertisements less reliable among people. We could explain this phenomenon as a way for companies to appeal more clients and to make profit.

realistic ones 不是很合适 我觉得有点怪 不妨直接用 the real ones
We could explain this phenomenon as a way for companies to appeal more clients and to make profit. 换成 this phenomenon can be explained as a way for companies to appeal more clients and to make profit 效果更好，另外 我觉得这句话在文中出现得有点不合逻辑，我个人认为第一段要突出的是广告中的产品比现实中的好的原因，而不是和突出广告商做广告的原因
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In the first place, for those products of good qualities, advertisements are necessary because only through this way could let them (let them 删掉 改成 they be) known and be used among clients. From my perspective, it is not a serious (换成big 更地道) deal for（for 换成 that） those products to be seem better they actually are in the advertisements. For instance, we are （改成I am 比较好）always fascinated by the advertisements of the famous brand---Adidas, they use large amount of technologies and sports stars to stress more power on their advertisements, I was once deeply impressed by one of their advertisement, in the advertisement, the basketball athlete Michael Jordon just flied to the spot wearing the Adidas shoes. Wearing that pair of shoes actually can not allow you to fly, but the advertisements really help to increase the demand of the shoes. （这个广告的叙述 论据感不强 由这个鞋子让人飞到广告增加需求 有点中国式的跳跃性思维）

And secondly, for those commodities which are actually poor of their qualities, it is nothing strange for the companies to exaggerate the function and appearance of the products. Usually companies selling products of poor qualities just want to make profit. They do not care about fame or their reputation. So in this situation, they tend to make their products seem devoid of deficiency in the advertisement, while the real ones are disappointing. For instance, we always found the stake in the advertisements so delicious and appealing that we immediately went to the restraint to tasted it, but the real food they put in front of us was so tiny and ordinary that made us puzzled about the difference between advertisements and reality. In a word, making profit is the final goal of some companies , so they do not care the real qualities of their products and just devote more to make their advertisements look as attractive as possible.
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Thirdly, in some conditions, the products are actually the same of they are in reality, it is just the music or the background sceneries accompanying the advertisements that make them seem more extraordinary. In fact, advertisement is one kind of art. As we all know, art comes from life, but it finally departs from the real life. We should accept advertisements the same artistic works as those dramas and movies which have been regarded as unrealistic art
（这段应该重点突出一下背景使得这个产品更好）

All in all, I think that advertisements do make products seem better than they are. However, the phenomenon may out of an inspiration of companies to make more profits, or out of the desire to make the products popular, or just out of an artistic demand. No matter the motivation is, we as customers should be more careful when select products through those advertisements.（结尾只需突出广告中的东西比现实的好 后面的有些画蛇添足的感觉）

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不好意思，昨天学校停电了， 一直没改你的文章
我的两篇文章在  https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1075143&extra=&page=2  12 楼和17楼
加油！！

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4.2---Playing sports teaches people lessons about life.4 [%

People all around world are fascinated by sports games. As a matter of fact, an exciting sports game sometimes not only provides us the pleasure and excising when we watched or attended in it, it also teach us lessons about life. We can learn attitude towards life, towards the failures and victories, and also learn how to work in a team.

Similar to our lives, sports game has ups and downs as well, the similarity makes us learn from sports how to deal with the adversities and difficulties we meet with in life. When joining in sports , you may have to face the problem like injury, the loss of confidence or the lack of courage to carry on which also appear in your real life, you could learn to solve these problems through the sports games. For instance, I pick basketball as my hobby and keep attend basketball matches the majority of my free time, however, there was a time that I found myself just could not endure with it any more since I have little chance to play on the basketball court on behalf of our team, the coach did not think me of enough competency.  But eventually I did not give up, I exercised more harder, the sweat wet my cloth each time after training, in result, I was able to attend the game after about one year’s hard working. What I have learned for the experience is the sense of perseverance and the positive attitude towards life. Everyone may experience different kind of sports game in life, and there must be something that you can learn from the it.

The second thing we can learn from sports is that we need to face losses and wins more intelligent. We should not be overconfident after a victory or become pessimistic after a failure. Being smarter when facing with such problems is what the sports can teach us. An famous athlete, Machael Jordon once said , since he have suffered so many loses and wins in his career, what he really care is to have fun in the basketball court, to play an excellent game, which was the real meaning of sports. So if you have experience the joy of attending in a wonderful sports game, you may never care about the results of it. And also, it is more important to have pleasure rather than care about the failure or victory in our daily life.

Finally, we could as well learn how to corporate with others in a team from sports. Sports game usually is in the form of team work, which calls for you to work with the others to allocate your strength and advantages logically. We always see quarrel and fighting among the members in one team in sports game, and that team is more likely to lose the game. In real life, if we failed to corporate and create a harmony atmosphere to work with others, we may finally achieve nothing.
So the development of a sense of community-mind is important when attending the sports games, it will help you become more comfortable in a team work.

So as mentioned above, there are actually a lot of things we can learn from the sports , ranging from the attitudes towards life, the right way to dispose with loses and wins to the significance of corporation in a team. Therefore, there are actually more sports can do rather than make you stay healthy and keep fit.


写的太多了。。囧。。于是超时了15分钟。。
以后要注意控制时间和字数~~~

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4.2---Playing sports teaches people lessons about life.4 [%# h' s/ m' U' Z2 \. m

People all around world are fascinated by sports games. As a matter of fact, an exciting sports game sometimes not only provides us the（去掉） pleasure and excising（是exercise吧？不过这个理由有些奇怪，sport 不就是exercise吗？） when we watched or attended in it, it also teach us lessons about life. We can learn attitude towards life, towards the failures and victories, and also learn how to work in a team.


Similar to our lives, sports game has ups and downs as well, the similarity makes us learn from sports how to deal with the adversities and difficulties we meet with in life. （这个句子的表达上有问题，主语和learn的宾语都表达得不清晰）When joining in sports , you may have to face the problem like injury, the loss of confidence or the lack of courage to carry on which also appear in your real life. you could learn to solve these problems through the（去掉） sports games. For instance, I pick basketball as my hobby and keep attend basketball matches the majority（这个应该是可数名词吧） of my free time, however, there was a？？？ time(time是不可数名词) that I found myself just could not endure with it any more since I have little chance to play on the basketball court on behalf of our team, the coach did not think me of enough competency.  But eventually I did not give up, I exercised more harder（不用加more）, the sweat wet my cloth each time after training, in result, I was able to attend the game after about one year’s hard working. What I have learned for（from） the experience is the sense of perseverance and the positive attitude towards life. Everyone may experience different kind of sports game in life, and there must be something that you can learn from the it？？？.3 \! ^% Q( B! J5 f, o! {

The second thing we can learn from sports is that we need to face losses and wins more intelligent. We should not be overconfident after a victory or become pessimistic after a failure.（表达有些中式了） Being smarter
（没有对比对象）when facing with such problems is what the sports can teach us. An famous athlete, Michael Jordon once said（have been said） , since he have suffered so many loses and wins in his career, what he really care is to have fun in the basketball court, to play an excellent game, which was the real meaning of sports. So if you have experience the joy of attending in a wonderful sports game, you may never care about the results of it. And also, it is more important（没有对比对象） to have pleasure rather than care about the failure or victory in our daily life.



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Finally, we could as well(后置，放到句尾)
learn how to corporate with others in a team from sports. Sports game usually is in the form of team work, which calls for you to work with the others to allocate your strength and advantages logically. We always see quarrel and fighting among the members in one team （of a team）in sports game, and that team is more likely to lose the game. In real life, if we failed to corporate and create a harmony atmosphere to work with others, we may finally achieve nothing.; z" t+ r( {$ ^1 g+ }
So the development of a sense of community-mind is important when attending the sports games, it will help you become more comfortable in a team work.

So as mentioned above, there are actually a lot of things we can learn from the sports , ranging from the attitudes towards life, the right way to dispose with loses and wins to the significance of corporation in a team. Therefore, there are actually more sports can do rather than make you stay healthy and keep fit(看不懂)。


一些冠词像the 之类的用法注意下，还有一些意思和句式的表达也要注意下。
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4.3------------It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you

Watching movie nowadays becomes a principal way for us to get relaxation and entertainment . People get into cinemas to select the specific movie to watch. However, audience always find it hard to choose the right type of movie for them, whether to select the amusing movie to get recreation or turn to the serious movie to get a deeper thinking. From my perspective, it is better to choose the proper type of movie according to different situation, as the distinctive features of the two kinds of movie apparently suit different mode and different purpose of the spectators.

First of all, for those who are frustrated or at a loss, the amusing movie is definitely the best choice. Amusing movie always contains lots of laughter, romance and tricks, those elements are disposed to provide entertainment to the audience. For example, when I feel upset because of the difficulties and adverse I meet with in school, I usually turn to movies describing the leading role’s happy campus life, the plot and environment in the movie is so familiar to me that I always put myself into the situation of the main character, to enjoy the harmony atmosphere around her when she is with her friends and to share the joy of success with her. After watching those movies, I find a more positive attitude to deal with the troubles in my life. So, I think amusing movie will be a good choice when you are in frustration.

Futhermore, if you feel like to widen you horizons or want to have a meditation about the principles about world, serious movies are suitable to you. A serious movie usually contains variety of knowledge and truth you can learn from, meanwhile, the world described here is more cruel and realistic, which could teach you how to deal with the tough situations in society. Moreover, a serious movie may leave us a so deep impression that it affects our life deeply. For instance, I was once deeply moved by a movie named The Perfect world, it told a story about a criminal, he tried to help a child escaping from the terrible life he stayed in, however, as being a criminal, everybody he met with was against him, even the child distrusted him. Finally he helped the child find his parents, and shoot by the police as being regarded as the one who arrested the child. The story has a sad ending, but I feel inspired by it because it tell me the principle that we should always stay true to who we are even when we suffer opposition and criticism. So we can conclude that serious movies are more suitable when you want learn a lesson or you need a deep meditation about world.

As mentioned above, it is hard to say which type of movie is better, whether the serious movies or the amusing movies, they both have their features and have the specific group of audience. As a fact of factor, you can not just stick into one type of movie, it is better to select the right one according to your mood or the situations.

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挺好，我也应该多总结些这样的例子，譬如我遇到什么挫折了在学校，我看了啥电影，然后就心情好了。Btw. The Pursuit of Happiness就挺好
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As mentioned above, it is hard to say which type of movie is better, whether the serious movies or the amusing movies, they both have their features and have the specific group of audience. As a fact of factor, you can not just stick into one type of movie, it is better to select the right one according to your mood or the situations.

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4.4---------------Do you agree or disagree that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?

Nowadays scientists are more respected and better protected by the society, actually there are laws like the patent to prevent the wealth and authority of those scientists. But questions come that should scientists be responsible for the negative impacts of their inventions, as their inventions including the vehicles, the bombs that really do something harmful to us. From my perspective, I think scientists do not need be responsible for the negative impacts of their inventions.

First of all, the original purposes of those inventions are to help human live a better life. Scientists devote their time and hard-working to provide more effective tools or more convenient facilities. So scientists should not be blamed for their devotion. For instance, one of the greatest scientists, Albert Einstein, who create the amazing atom bomb, was once criticized for his invention, since in the Second World War, the atom bomb was used as a weapon and caused countless death and injuries. Meanwhile, Einstein himself is regretted of the fact that his creation had made so many people hurt. However, when he first decided to invent this thing, he just wanted to improve the scientific situation at that time, actually if the atom bomb be corrected used, it will do many things beneficial to us. So in my opinion, it’s the way people use that invention rather than the invention itself should take responsibility to the negative consequences.

Second, if scientists should take responsibilities for their creations, chances are that they will find it hard to concentrate on their invention work since they will always put some focus on the affects of those discoveries. As a matter of fact, the process of invention allows the scientists to completely devote into what they are doing, but if the thought that the inventions may have negative affects on environment or human, they may find it hard to carry on. Therefore, there may be less and less advanced inventions created and our lives may have to stay to the current situation. As mentioned above, it will disrupt the work of scientists if they should be responsible for their inventions.

Finally, taken the positive affects of those inventions of scientists into account, obviously the positive influences outweigh the negative ones. With these great invention, our daily lives has changed so much, the transportation system, the computer technology or the appearance of modern apartment, all these creations directly facilitate our life. In the other hand, we need new discoveries to help us deal with the negative affects those great inventions leave us such as the environmental contamination problem. So considering what scientists have brought to us, the bad side of their inventions should be neglected.

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Watching movie nowadays becomes a principal way for us to get relaxation and entertainment . People get into cinemas to select the specific movie to watch. However, audiences always find it hard to choose the right type of movie for them, whether to select the amusing movie to get recreation or turn to the serious movie to get a deeper thinking. From my perspective, it is better to choose the proper type of movie according to different situation, as the distinctive features of the two kinds of movie apparently suit different mode and different purpose of the spectators.

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First of all, for those who are frustrated or at a loss, the amusing movie is definitely the best choice. Amusing movie always contains lots of laughter, romance and tricks, those elements are disposed to provide entertainment to the audience.(这句有两个谓语动词,用which代吧） For example, when I feel upset because of the difficulties and adverse（这做啥解释？） I meet with in school, I usually turn to movies describing the leading role’s happy campus life, the plot and environment in the movie is so familiar to me that I always put myself into the situation of the main character, to enjoy the harmony atmosphere around her when she is with her friends and to share the joy of success with her. After watching those movies, I find a more positive attitude to deal with the troubles in my life. So, I think amusing movie will be a good choice when you are in frustration.

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Futhermore, if you feel like to widen you horizons or want to have a meditation about the principles about world, serious movies are suitable to you. A serious movie usually contains variety of knowledge and truth you can learn from, meanwhile, the world described here is more cruel and realistic, which could teach you how to deal with the tough situations in society. Moreover, a serious movie may leave us a so deep impression that it affects our life deeply. For instance, I was once deeply moved by a movie named The Perfect world, it told a story about a criminal,（it 改 which吧） he tried to help a child escaping from the terrible life he stayed in（这句子长，谓语动词好多，句法错了。）, however, as being a criminal, everybody he met with was against him, even the child distrusted him. Finally he helped the child find his parents, and shoot by the police as being regarded as the one who arrested the child. The story has a sad ending, but I feel inspired by it because it tell me the principle that we should always stay true to who we are(啥意思？） even when we suffer opposition and criticism. So we can conclude that serious movies are more suitable when you want learn a lesson or you need a deep meditation about world.



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As mentioned above, it is hard to say which type of movie is better, whether the serious movies or the amusing movies, they both have their features and have the specific group of audience. As a fact of factor, you can not just stick into one type of movie, it is better to select the right one according to your mood or the situations.

PS：长句好多。膜拜下~不过注意句子主干、

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4月4日 by caoxuemei