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3.21--Is it necessary to understand the past to solve problems present and future

From my point of view, I think that it is necessary to understand the past in order to solve problems present and future. It is generally believed that success is based on the accumulation of failures, which could also be understand in another way, that is to say, it’s the past experiences of your failure that teach you how to solve the present as well as the future difficulties you may meet up with.

We may all wondered once why we had to learn history of a nation or the world in school in the current time. However, when we grow elder, we gradually get the essence of history, like my teacher said, history is the group memory of a nation or the whole human being. We remember the past because it really can teach a lot of truth and principles so significantly that could be used in the incidents that we are meeting or will meet up with.

We could learn from other’s past sufferings, however, what really crucial is our own experiences. For instance, we will never walk a road again if we know it would lead to the wrong direction , we will use the model to help solving problems since we know the function of it based on the past using experiences. We all grow with the accumulation of past, it was a long journey full of all kinds of failures and successes which we could learn from at current or in the future usage.

Although sometimes past successful experiences would make you overconfident and lead you to the wrong direction. The benefit we could gain from understanding the past outweigh the passive factors. So it is necessary and of great significance for us to always remember the past and have a deep understanding of it .

第一次发，来砸我吧~~~

chailybaiUID: 2741896

People nowadays are facing with two major issues ---------health caring and environmental protection, which are the most difficult puzzles for the global governments to solve in this century. However, if taken seriousness and the extent of urgence into account，I think government should emphasize on the environment issues rather than health care issues, since environment affect us so greatly not lonely in our daily life but in the geologic , physical , oceanic conditions of earth which are directly related to the creatures living in earth.

The emergence of industrial age had brought severe environmental contamination problems to us, we found dramatically increasing number of environmental issues we should face including the crisis of water in most area, global warming which is caused by air pollution, and increasingly extinct species because of the vanish of forests. Actually environmental issues have already caused nations to put attention on them, but there are still much more for governments to do. If keep those problems remain, we may find our daily life difficult to carry on since there is little water and food available while your living circumstance is full of noise and garbage.

Environmental pollution is also the main cause of health problems of human. As researches had showed us, there are large amounts of people suffer from diseases caused by eating the polluted fruits or fish. It is generally agreed that environment is of close relation to people’s health, so if environmental issues could be solved, less attention could be paid on health issues then.

Moreover, as health care issues may need a large deal of funds foundation and a long-term period of research with lots of experiments and applying, while the same amount money and time could be devoted to reduce the seriousness of environmental pollution issues immediately. So I think the option of current issues for the government to pay more attention to should be the problems of environmental contamination.

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Teachers should not show their political or social views known in the classroom.

We were all directly affected by the speech of our teachers during the process of growth , so we know how significant influence teachers would put on their students. Whatever they say has the power to rebuild students’ view of points and their attitude towards society. In this way, I agree that teachers should not present their political or social views in class, however, I think the conclusion may not applied when students gradually own the capability to distinguish truth from falsehood.

The majority of us do not know the rules of world at first, we get education to learn what make up the society and world and the fundamental principles under them. And teachers play the roles of telling us those truths, so what they said at that time were all principles and truths for us. For instance, I was once told by our history teacher that our nation’s greatest chairman Mao is of no deficiency, he contributed his all and completely twisted the adverse situation of China, I accepted it without any hesitation at that moment, since I regard whatever the teachers’ saying as principles and truths. But as we learned more about Chinese history, I eventually realized that it was not objective of my teacher to say Mao is perfect, no one in the history did not make a mistake, even Mao can not avoid making several wrong judgements in his latter age and push the Chinese people in another severe disaster. So the wrong conclusion of teachers about their political or social views may be accepted by students and affect their ability in judging the relative political and social historical or contemporary incidents.

However, when students successfully developed their own sense of judgement, teacher will no longer affect them so easily. As class being a appropriate place for discussing a proper topic especially in the universities, a political or social topic usually gain widely popularity because teachers and students may hold different opinions and they all try to convince each other. At this stage, students just take their teachers’ viewpoint as an opinion, they will take it into account seriously but never accept it as truth. So I think teacher could say what they think about politics and the society freely at this period of time and do not need to worry about the consequences.

All in all, teachers should realize their roles during different period of time in students’ lives. In their first stage, teachers should take them to walk in the right direction while help them built the correct justice against the falsehood. And when successfully finish the task, teachers could then discuss those political and social topics with students like the conversations held between adults.

dphenixyUID: 2657199

We were all directly affected by the speech of our teachers during the process of growth , so we know how significant influence teachers would put on their students. Whatever they say has the power to rebuild students’ view of points and their attitude towards society. In this way, I agree that teachers should not present their political or social views in class, however,
（however是副词不能这么用，要另起一句）I think the conclusion may not applied when students gradually own the capability to distinguish truth from falsehood. 语言没的说，很流利，但是托福作文感觉还是观点简单一点好，有时候逻辑太严密了反而会犯观点不明这个大忌，当然这只是我个人感觉，仅供参考^_^
The majority of us do not know the rules of world at first, （中间应该加个连词）we get education to learn what make up the society and world and the fundamental principles under them. And teachers play the roles of telling us those truths, so what they said at that time were all principles and truths for us. For instance, I was once told by our history teacher that our nation’s greatest chairman Mao is of no deficiency, （连词或者分句）he contributed his all and completely twisted the adverse situation of China, （连词或者分句）I accepted it without any hesitation at that moment, since I regard（ed） whatever the teachers’ saying（said或者teachers’ saying is） as principles and truths. But as we（I） learned more about Chinese history, I eventually realized that it was not objective of my teacher to say Mao is perfect, （连词或者分句）no one in the history did not make a mistake, （连词或者分句）even Mao can not avoid making several wrong judgements(judgments) in his latter age (old age) and push the Chinese people in another severe disaster. So the wrong conclusion of teachers about their political or social views may be accepted by students and affect their ability in judging the relative(related)
political and social historical or contemporary(修饰词多了点) incidents.
However, when students successfully developed their own sense of judgement, teacher will no longer affect them so easily. As class being a appropriate place for discussing a proper topic especially in the universities, a political or social topic usually gain widely popularity because teachers and students may hold different opinions and they all try to convince each other. At this stage, students just take their teachers’ viewpoint as an opinion, （连词或者分句）they will take it into account seriously but never accept it as truth. So I think teachers could say what they think about politics and the society freely at this period of time and do not need to worry about the consequences。
All in all, teachers should realize their roles during different period of time in students’ lives. In their（指代不明） first stage, teachers should take them to walk in the right direction while help them built the correct justice against the falsehood. And when successfully finish the task, teachers could then discuss those political and social topics with students like the conversations held between adults（最后一句感觉这样写不是很合适，毕竟老师们不是从小学一直教到大学的，可以把不同阶段的老师分开说）
总的来说楼主写作功底很不错，文章组织和例子也不错，值得学习。主要的问题就是要注意句子之间的连接，不能只用个逗号就完事了。

chailybaiUID: 2741896

3.25作文修改1.0版本，谢谢dphenixy 筒子~~~:lol
Teachers should not show their political or social views known in the classroom.

We were all directly affected by the speech of our teachers during the process of growth , so we know how significant influence teachers would put on their students. Whatever they say has the power to rebuild students’ view of points and their attitude towards society. In this way, I agree that teachers should not present their political or social views in class, however, I think the conclusion may not applied when students gradually own the capability to distinguish truth from falsehood. So it is more accurately to say that teachers should not show their political or social views in students’ early age.

The majority of us do not know the rules of world at first, therefore we get education to learn what make up the society and world, to get the fundamental principles under them. And teachers play the roles of telling us those truths, so what they said at that time were all principles and truths for us. For instance, I was once told by our history teacher that our nation’s greatest chairman Mao is of no deficiency, and that he contributed his all and completely twisted the adverse situation of China, I accepted it without any hesitation at that moment, since I regarded whatever the teacher said as principles and truths. But as we learned more about Chinese history, I eventually realized that it was not objective of my teacher to say Mao is perfect, in fact no one in the history did not make a mistake, even Mao can not avoid making several wrong judgements in his latter age and push the Chinese people in another severe disaster. So the wrong conclusion of teachers about their political or social views may be accepted by students and affect their ability in judging the related political or social incidents which are historical or contemporary

However, when students successfully developed their own sense of judgement, teacher will no longer affect them so easily. As class being a appropriate place for discussing a proper topic especially in the universities, a political or social topic usually gain widely popularity because teachers and students may hold different opinions and they all try to convince each other. At this stage, students just take their teachers’ viewpoint as an opinion, therefore they will take it into account seriously but never accept it as truth. So I think teacher could say what they think about politics and the society freely at this period of time and do not need to worry about the consequences.

All in all, teachers should realize their roles during different period of time in students’ lives. In their first stage, teachers should take their students to walk in the right direction while help them built the correct justice against the falsehood. And when successfully finish the task and entering the second stage, teachers could then discuss those political and social topics with students like the conversations held between adults. So teachers should clearly realize their roles in different stages in students ’lives and find a proper time to show their political and social views.

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We were all directly affected by the speech of our teachers during the process of growth , so we know how significant influence teachers would put on their students. Whatever they say has the power to rebuild students’ view of points and their attitudes towards society. In this way, I agree that teachers should not present their political or social views in class, however, I think the conclusion may not applied when students gradually (逐渐有分辨是非的能力的话，老师还是不应该灌输political ideas，应该是到学生已经形成了一定的世界观的时候才可以向他们表达吧)own the capability to distinguish truth from falsehood.（这句话写的很好的说，除了那个gradually - -）The majority of us do not know the rules of world at first, we get education to learn what makes up the society and world and the fundamental principles under them. And teachers play the roles of telling us those truths, so what they said at that time were all principles and truths for us. For instance, I was once told by our history teacher that our nation’s greatest chairman Mao is of no deficiency, he contributed his all and completely twisted the adverse situation of China(这句话写的很漂亮), I accepted it without any hesitation at that moment, since I regarded whatever the teachers said as principles and truths. But as I learned more about Chinese history, I eventually realized that it was not objective of my teacher to say that (这句话总感觉读不顺，所以加个that ，only my personal idea )Mao is perfect. no one in the history did not make a mistake, even Mao can not avoid making several wrong judgements in his latter age and push the Chinese people in another severe disaster. So the wrong conclusion of teachers about their political or social views may be accepted by students and affect their ability in judging the relative political and social historical or contemporary incidents.( n; f* q% |  [9 k3 r  V2 q+ q. }' b, @However, when students successfully developed their own sense of judgement, teacher will no longer affect them so easily. As class being an appropriate place for discussing a proper topic especially in the universities, a political or social topic usually gain widely popularity because teachers and students may hold different opinions and they all try to convince each other. At this stage, students just take their teachers’ viewpoint as an opinion. they will take it into account seriously but never accept it as truth(这句话也写滴很好). So I think teachers could say what they think about politics and the society freely at this period of time and do not need to worry about the consequences.0 _% b4 ~" E, E* h5 r& SAll in all, teachers should realize their roles during different period of time in students’ lives. In their first stage, teachers should take them to walk in the right direction while helping them built the correct justice against the falsehood. And when successfully finish the task, teachers could then discuss those political and social topics with students like the conversations held between adults.
需要注意的就是，句子与句子之间的连词，否则就是很基本的错误了。呵呵~~看得出来写作水平挺强大的说，偶只能说观摩了，错误都提不出什么~~
白天有课，改的比较晚，见谅哦~~

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There is no doubt that education is of great significance for the development of a nation. However, I don’t see fundamental education on very young children  of the same importance of it provided in the universities. From my point of view, universities play an undeniable role in the development of our society since they contribute so many inventions, scientific achievements and celebrities to the world.

The importance of university could be listed as the followings. First of all, it facilitates the scientific researches and provide a proper atmosphere for the professors and students to concentrate on one specific topic. It is under this condition that make the universities provide so many crucial inventions to us. For instance, the great invention Internet actually was first created and used for doing research in the campus until people find the commercial potential behind it. And secondly, universities had cultivated many successful individuals that greatly affect the history of our world. They are playing the leading role in various fields including politics, economy, physics and so forth.

It is because of the great influence universities have on our society that make I think that government should pay more of its budget on colleges rather than fundamental education. In fact, fundamental education is also of great importance for not only the harmony of our community but also the future of our young generations. However, compared with college education, fundamental education does not need so much money and could not provide so many direct contributions to the society.

So based on the above reasons, I think that a wise government should realize the importance of universities and put more of their budget in them while not neglect the development of the fundamental education of the young generation.

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3.27 独立作文
People who do not work because they get enough money are rarely happy

People nowadays could be classified into two different groups----people who earn to pay for their life through work and people inherit the wealth from their families. From my perspective, obviously the group who work to pay for themselves are happier, since through work, we can get a goal to fight for, receive experiences about various situations and the pleasure to gain reward.

First of all, as a matter of fact, there are numerous individuals who live on their families, they may inherit wealth from their parents. And since they have got large amounts of possessions when they were born, it is hard for them to search for a target to fight for. For instance, there are now many rich students leave school at an early age and live on their families. Researches show that those kind of people are more likely to commit crimes or trapped in drug problems. I think the phenomenon could just be explained as their loss of desire to pursue a better life.

Secondly, as we gain lots of experiences and knowledge from our work, we gradually learn more about the principles and truths about the world which may help us in our future lives. Furthermore, people always feel pleasure when they realize that their accumulation of knowledge is increasing.   But for those who do not attend work, they will never know the happiness to harvest from work.

Moreover, people who are dependent on their families do not know the pleasure we get when accomplish our tasks and gain our rewards. That’s the happiness after devoting and hardworking which the group of people who do not work will never taste .

As an old saying goes:” We gain only through what we have devoted” , and if you devote nothing but have already own the things others dream of, you are bound to lose something as the situation seems not fair for others. Unfortunately the thing you lose is happiness, which others could gain from their work. So that's not a strange thing that people who do not attend work because they get enough money are rarely happy.

终于在30分钟里面写完了，呼呼~~~

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There is no doubt that education is of great significance for the development of a nation. However, I don’t see fundamental education on very young children  of the same importance of it provided in  ...
chailybai 发表于 2010-3-26 05:10

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3.26

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3.28

To be well-informed people should get information from many different information sources.

With the dramatic increasing of information of this century, scientists have used the scientific term information exploding to describe the emergence of such mass amount of information. Therefore for people who want to gain wide range of information, it is of great significance to find reasonable information sources. From my perspective, people should know how to use the resources based on different situations and not just search anywhere to find large range of information which they may not need at all.

With the rapid development of information technology, more advanced instruments has been created to help people deal with the phenomenon known as the information exploding. The instrument could be seen as an unique and crucial information source. Actually, you could gain large amount of various information in less than a second through the retrieval engine. For instance, for those who are buried in hundreds of reference books to find specific information, they ’d better turn to Google scholar to search for their scientific information because of its convenience and effectiveness. So with the modern instrument which could bring us so many facilities, we could become more well-informed just by utilizing them effectively.

However, advanced instrument could just decrease your time of finding the information, it does not clarify which piece of material is the right one for you and can not guarantee further movement of gaining the more complex information. So basic on this condition, I think people should search information from different information sources if they want to absorb specific knowledge and with plenty of time available. Usually in the libraries, books and materials are classified into different subjects, so it will facilitate the persons who want to gain deeper understanding of different academic areas. As being well-informed people, they should not only have various types of knowledge but also know the principles and truths through different information sources. That is to say, intensive understanding is also needed besides extensive reading.

In a word, we should get extensive reading through those modern retrieval instruments on one hand, and turn to different information sources for intensive understanding on the other hand. It is more precise to say a well-informed person is bound to find information resources suitable for him and will utilize it in the right place.

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With the dramatic increasing of information of this century, scientists have used the scientific term information exploding to describe the emergence of such mass amount of information...没懂... Therefore for people who want to gain wide range of information, it is of great significance to find reasonable information sources. From my perspective, people should know how to use the resources题目问是应该使用不同的sources不，不是如何使用啊 based on different situations and not just search anywhere to find large range of information which they may not need at all

With the rapid development of information technology, more advanced instruments has-->have been created to help people deal with the phenomenon known as the information exploding. TS长 The instrument could be seen as an unique and crucial information source. Actually, you could gain large amount of various
nformation in less than a second through the retrieval engine. For instance, for those who are buried in hundreds of reference books to find specific information, they ’d better turn to Google scholar to search for their scientific information because of its convenience and effectiveness. So with the modern instrument这个在这段中出现了几次，最好说下是什么具体点 which could bring us so many facilities, we could become more well-informed just by utilizing them effectively

However, advanced instrument(tools, methods, means)what kind of instrument,you need to explain it could just decrease your time of finding the information, it does not clarify which piece of material is the right one for you and can not guarantee further movement of gaining the more complex information. So basic on-->based on this condition, I think people should search information from different information sources if they want to absorb specific knowledge and with plenty of time available. Usually in the libraries, books and materials in libraries are classified into different subjects, so it will facilitate the persons-->one who wants to gain deeper understanding of different academic areas. As being well-informed people, they should not only have various types of knowledge but also know the principles and truths through different information sources. That is to say, intensive understanding is also needed besides extensive reading这里走题了.

In a word, we should get extensive reading through those modern retrieval instruments on one hand, and turn to嗯这个好 different information sources for intensive understanding on the other hand. It is more precise to say a well-informed person is bound to find information resources suitable for him and will utilize it in the right place. 句子很多都偏长而且不算是复杂句子，简单句连成的。TS不建议写长，有语法问题

chailybaiUID: 2741896

3.28修改稿1.0版本~~~感谢翠花的修改，很宝贵的意见啊~~~

With the dramatic increasing of information of this century, scientists have used the scientific term “Information Exploding“ to describe the emergence of such mass amount of information. Therefore for people who want to gain wide range of information, it is of great significance to find reasonable information sources. From my perspective, people should know how to take advantage of various sources based on different situations and not just search anywhere to find large range of information which they may not need at all.

With the rapid development of information technology, more advanced instruments have been created, such as the retrieval engine, which could help people deal with the phenomenon known as information exploding. The instrument could be seen as an unique and crucial information source. Actually, you could gain large amount of various information in less than a second through the retrieval engine. For instance, for those who are buried in hundreds of reference books, they ’d better turn to Google scholar to search for their scientific information , since it is more convenient and effective. So with the retrieval engine and other modern instruments which could bring us so many facilities, we could become more well-informed just by utilizing them effectively.

However, advanced tools minimize your labor of searching could just decrease your time of finding the information, it does not clarify which piece of material is the right one for you and can not guarantee further movement of gaining the more complex information. So based on this condition, I think people should search information from other different information sources if they want to absorb specific knowledge .Usually, books and materials in libraries are classified into different subjects, so it will facilitate one who wants to gain deeper understanding of different academic areas. As being well-informed people, they should not only have various types of knowledge but also be eager to know the principles and truths behind knowledge. In fact, only through different information sources could we find those principles.

In a word, we should get extensive information searching through those modern retrieval instruments on one hand, and turn to different information sources for intensive understanding on the other hand. It is more precise to say a well-informed person should find information resources suitable for him and will utilize it in the right place.

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People nowadays could be classified into two different groups----people who earn to pay for their life through work and people inherit the wealth from their families. From my perspective, obviously the group who work to pay for themselves are happier, since through work, we can get a goal to fight for, receive experiences about various situations and the pleasure to gain reward.

First of all, as a matter of fact, there are numerous individuals who live on their families; they may inherit wealth from their parents. And since they have got large amounts of possessions when they were born, it is hard for them to search for a target to fight for. For instance, there are now many rich students leave school at an early age and live on their families. Researches show that those kind (kinds) of people are more likely to commit crimes or trapped in drug problems. I think the phenomenon could just be explained as their loss of desire to pursue a better life.

Secondly, as we gain lots of experiences and knowledge from our work, we gradually learn more about the principles and truths about the world which may help us in our future lives. Furthermore, people always feel pleasure when they realize that their accumulation of knowledge is increasing.   But for those who do not attend work, they will never know the happiness to harvest from work.

Moreover, people who are dependent on their families do not know the pleasure we get when accomplish our tasks and gain our rewards. That’s the happiness after devoting and hardworking which the group of people who do not work will never taste.

As an old saying goes:” We gain only through what we have devoted” , and if you devote nothing but have already own the things others dream of, you are bound to lose something as the situation seems not fair for others. Unfortunately the thing you lose is happiness, which others could gain from their work. So that's not a strange thing that people who do not attend work because they get enough money are rarely happy.

我语法比较稀烂，看不出太多毛病。
就论述来看的话，显得有点单薄。第二段还是不错，第三第四两段感觉像是在说一个问题，而且这两段没有论证，没有例子，很难有说服力。

继续加油~

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3.27 独立作文
People who do not work because they get enough money are rarely happy

People nowadays could be classified into two different groups----people who earn to pay for their life through work and people inherit the wealth from their families. From my perspective, obviously the group who work to pay for themselves are happier, since through work, we can get a goal to fight for, receive experiences about这个介词不太恰当吧 various situations and the pleasure to(of) gaining reward.
First of all, as a matter of fact, there are numerous individuals who live on their families, they 去掉may inherit wealth from their parents. And （however）since they have got large amounts of possessions when they were born, it is hard for them to search for a target to fight for. For instance, there are now many rich students leave school at an early age and（for the reason of could live on their families. Researches show that those kind of people are more likely to commit crimes or trapped in drug problems. I think the phenomenon could just be explained as their loss of desire to pursue a better life..

Secondly, as we gain lots of experiences and knowledge from our work, we gradually learn more about the principles and truths about the world which may help us in our future lives. Furthermore, people always feel pleasure when they realize that their accumulation of knowledge is increasing.   But for those who do not attend work, they will never know the happiness to（of） harvesting from work.

Moreover, people who are dependent on their families do not know the pleasure we get when accomplish our tasks and gain our rewards. That’s the happiness after devoting and hardworking（hardwork） ，which the group of people who do not work will never taste

As an old saying goes:” We gain only through what we have devoted” , and if you devote nothing but have already own the things others dream of, you are bound to lose something as(otherwise) the situation seems not fair for others. Unfortunately the thing you lose is happiness, which others could gain from their work. So that's not a strange thing that （for）people who do not attend work because they get enough money are rarely happy.（改成because they forfeit the oppotunity to obtain happiness from work.
理由很充分 除了个别的句子稍稍不妥 多练习多看应该很快好的 加油啊
谢谢你的评改 我的作文确实写跑题了 应该重新写一下 改晚了 麻烦谅解了