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Purely based on groundless assumption and questionable evidence, the statement draws a conclusion thatthe town needs to improve the atmosphere of the libraries so that students will come to them more because of theircomfortablness .To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer points out evidence that stuents come to their school libraries much less in recent years.Moreover, he indicates that students read less than in the past by coming to library less. On the face of it, the author's argument appears to be convincing to some extent. Further contemplation, however, reveals that it neglects some consequential concerns that should be addressed to corroborate the argument .In my point of view, this argument suffers from three logical flaws.

First of all ,the author wrongly depends on gratuitous assumption that students come to library less in recent years. In the argument the arguer fails to give information about through which means the librarians knows that there are fewer students coming to library .In addition ,the seventh-grade students cannot represent all students .It is likely that the seventh-grade students had so many activites to participate that they spend less time in library .Students of ather grades may visit the library much more .Therefore, the argument is unwarranted without ruling out such possibility

Secondly,even though students did come to library much less than before ,the arguer cannot assume that they read less than in the past .For example ,it is entirely possible that students begin to buy books themselves .Perhaps they go to the public library in the center of the city ,which has much more books than that of the school.Any of these scenarios, if true, would help emasculate the claim that students are reading less than in the past .

Thirdly,even students go to the library of shcool less and read less ,the arguer cannot assume that it is because the atmosphere of library is not good that leads to that fact .There is no evidence provided in this argument to prove that correlation.It is entirely possible that students cannot find the books they need in the library .Perhaps the open hour is not appropiate for students .If these scenarios are true ,even the atmosphereof the library is improved a lot ,students still won't go there much.Therefore, the argument is unwarranted without ruling out such possibility

In sum ,this arguer fails to substantiate its claim that  making the library a comfortable place can cause students to come to the library much ,for the reason that the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains .To make the argument more persuasive ,the arguer would have to demonstrate that it is the uncomfortableness that gives rise to the reduces number of trips students make to library .Therefore ,if the argument had included the given factors discussed above ,it would have been more thorough and logically acceptable.
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