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发表于 2010-3-28 18:24:58 |显示全部楼层

TOPIC: ISSUE208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."


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As far as I concern, the speaker's assertion seems to oversimplify this issue. Admittedly, to some extent, the appearance and behavior of individuals in a society reflect personal taste and social values, but sometimes they do not. Some social values are so deep and hidden that can not be accurately embodied by the exterior looking of people. Therefore, we should analyze this issue more comprehensively.



Undoubtedly, in some aspects, most people choose their appearance and behave according to personal attitudes and interests, which sometimes reveal social ideas and values. We live in a society, therefore we are inevitably influenced by it. It is a potential and natural process. For instance, people in China will choose red clothes when celebrating festivals while people in Western countries will prefer white clothes. Similarly, when greeting with each other, Americans are more likely to hug with each other which shows their spirit of freedom and open mind. However, in the same case, English people are intended to behave in a gentle, respectful and courteous manner towards one another which shows their strong recognition of human dignity. It is true that some shallow aspects of the society can be told by the way people look, dress, and act. Hence, there's no denying that personal appearance and behavior not only reveals personal attitudes but also presents the society's ideas and values.



However, sometimes the outside appearance can not exactly indicate personal attitudes and values, let alone the social ones. As some people do not care about the external appearance or behavior, simply judge by the outside look may bring misunderstanding. If seeing an old man dressed raggedly, we probably consider him as a poor. You will never imagine he could be Einstein, the greatest physicist in the past century. Being emerged in science world, he always forgot to cut hair and shave off mustache, which made him look frowsy. In such cases, it is our eyes that betray us. To the social extent, modernization requires people to dress similarly due to the function of work, which is irrelevant with people's own interest. Also, along with world's globalization, people's aesthetics is sharing more and more similarities. Fashion has become a general pursuit. If clothes of certain style achieve high praise in a famous fashion show, they will gain popularity among the majorities sooner or later. Thus, nowadays, external appearance and behavior can not express the exact social ideas and values as before.



Actually, authentic social values lie in culture and history. Culture is defined as a set of distinctive material, intellectual, emotional, and spiritual features of a social group. The way people look, dress, and act is just a small part of culture. In other words, culture is concerned with almost every aspect of social life. Thus, through the study of culture, one can have a more comprehensive view of social ideas and values. Yet, to gain a deeper understanding, the study of history is indispensable. History reveals social humanity due to its continuity. Only by the study of the past can we find the origin of social values.



To sum up, the appearance and behaviors do reveal the ideas and values of a society to some extent. Nevertheless, the trend of globalization has diminished the effect of this approach. From a broader scope, the study of culture and history is essential to gain a deep and comprehensive understanding. Culture and history not only present the external appearance but also reveal the hidden ideas and impulses of a society.


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As far as I concern, the speaker's assertion seems to oversimplify this issue. Admittedly, to some extent, the appearance and behavior of individuals in a society reflect personal taste and social values, but sometimes they do not. Some social values are so deep and hidden that can not be accurately embodied by the exterior looking of people. Therefore, we should analyze this issue more comprehensively.(开头很清晰)

Undoubtedly, in some aspects, most people choose their appearance and behave(用名词) according to personal attitudes and interests, which sometimes reveal social ideas and values. We live in a society, therefore we are inevitably influenced by it. It is a potential and natural process. For instance, people in China will choose red clothes when celebrating festivals while people in Western countries will prefer white clothes. Similarly, when greeting with each other, Americans are more likely to hug with each other which shows their spirit of freedom and open mind. However, in the same case, English people are intended to behave in a gentle, respectful and courteous manner towards one another which shows their strong recognition of human dignity. It is true that some shallow aspects of the society can be told by the way people look, dress, and act. Hence, there's no denying that personal appearance and behavior not only reveals personal attitudes but also presents the society's ideas and values. (TS反映了两个联接:appearance&personal attitudes, personal attitudes&social ideas。文段主要处理的是appearance&social ideas的问题。我的理解是personal attitudes是二者间的桥梁,是否要带一下呢?比如点出个人attitudes会受到社会态度的影响。例子不错,感觉挺好的~)

However, sometimes the outside appearance can not exactly indicate personal attitudes and values, let alone the social ones. As some people do not care about the external appearance or behavior, simply judge by the outside look may bring misunderstanding. If seeing an old man dressed raggedly, we probably consider him as a poor. You will never imagine he could be Einstein, the greatest physicist in the past century. Being emerged in science world, he always forgot to cut hair and shave off mustache, which made him look frowsy. In such cases, it is our eyes that betray us. To the social extent, modernization requires people to dress similarly due to the function of work, which is irrelevant with people's own interest. Also, along with world's globalization, people's aesthetics is sharing more and more similarities. Fashion has become a general pursuit. If clothes of certain style achieve high praise in a famous fashion show, they will gain popularity among the majorities sooner or later. Thus, nowadays, external appearance and behavior can not express the exact social ideas and values as before.

Actually, authentic social values lie in culture and history. Culture is defined as a set of distinctive material, intellectual, emotional, and spiritual features of a social group. The way people look, dress, and act is just a small part of culture. In other words, culture is concerned with almost every aspect of social life.(would you name some themes here?) Thus, through the study of culture, one can have a more comprehensive view of social ideas and values. Yet, to gain a deeper understanding, the study of history is indispensable. History reveals social humanity due to its continuity. Only by the study of the past can we find the origin of social values.

To sum up, the appearance and behaviors do reveal the ideas and values of a society to some extent. Nevertheless, the trend of globalization has diminished the effect of this approach. From a broader scope, the study of culture and history is essential to gain a deep and comprehensive understanding. Culture and history not only present the external appearance but also reveal the hidden ideas and impulses of a society.


写得很不错了~!一篇看下来觉得没啥好改的[于是觉得又愉悦(因为省力)又纠结(因为没啥可改的= =)]……
写到这程度,模式化是必然的,除了文本的模式外,还有思路的模式吧。不过这并不一定是坏现象,AW要求的思辨也是一种固定的思维模式嘛。自由写作啥的太困难了,不确定度高,考场上有思维模板会好一些的。保持下去~考前状态要维护好呀!

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