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43"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."
Nowadays, a controversial and intricate issue has been brought in to focus that a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards otherwise he isn't able to be an effective leader as the statement promote, lots of people maybe approve this opinion. In my point of view, making a so hasty contestation is simplistic and ostensible, for balancing between it pros and cons, we should consider it comprehensively and systematically. my viewpoint is that to be an effective leader, a
public official should maintain ethical and moral standards sometimes but not that maintain the highest and forever.

Firstly and basically, the arguer's assertion has some merits primarily in that have sufficient empirical supports and logical proofs although suffers from some significant deficiencies. Indeed, to be an effective leader, a public official should keep up ethical and moral standards, since their image and action generally stand for the national dignity and moral standards, and a public official action usually takes an effect on the public and young people and promote them to aspire after and imitate them. Some cases that are very persuasive can illustrate the viewpoint very clearly. Zhou En Lai, the premier of China, he maintain the ethical and moral standards at diplomatic activities and daily life all the while, and so he got the respect and memory form his people. on the contrary, Hitler, a crazy Nazi massacred of Jews, neglect and disobey ethical and moral standards as a result he is shamed and objected by the descendant although he has the super ability at military affairs. All these evidence certify that it is partially indisputable for a public official to hold up the ethical and moral standards.

Despite the desirable part of the arguer's contestation, we must be aware of overextended underscore is inadvisable and problematic, in a short, I am skeptical the opinion at two respects as the analysis as below.

The speaker excessively underline the "highest" is unreasonable and infeasible because that the highest isn't an exact notion and we can't judge it accurately. The ethical and moral standards are diverse and various due to different people ,nation and culture as well as the variety of people's value, education, experience and so on. The answer of the highest ethical and moral standards is various and vague, how can we require a public official maintain the highest ethical and moral standards and which criterion they should choose and keep up.

Additionally, It is unnecessary for a public official maintain ethical and moral standards forever. Generally, there isn't perfect people in the world include an effective leader. Some leaders sometimes aren't able to accentuate the ethic and moral
when they pursuit human peace and progress and the society steady and harmony, otherwise, they extraordinarily emphasis the ethic and moral that can't deal with the problem about political affairs and the society. Furthermore, even though some
leaders have some flaws we shouldn't entirely deny the effect they had made. A appropriate instance can indicate the point beyond any doubt that Chinaman Mao made some mistakes at his autumn but that we still admit he lead us to fight for our
nation and freedom and he is an effective leader. Hence, it is inadvisable and problematical for us to judge whether a public official is effective or not through they maintain the highest ethical and moral standards or not.

Based on the analysis made above, we can draw a conclusion that the notion about highest ethical and moral standards isn't legitimate and can't be estimated accurately. To be an effective leader, They should seek a balance between maintain the ethical and moral standards and deal with their affairs effectively.

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43"To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

Nowadays, a controversial and intricate issue has been brought in to focus that a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards otherwise he isn't（正式写作中最好不要用缩写，写成is not较好） able to be an effective leader as the statement promote, lots of people maybe approve this opinion. (这句话好长,我觉得可以断成两句的）In my point of view, making a so hasty contestation is simplistic and ostensible, for balancing between its pros and cons, we should consider it comprehensively and systematically. （这句话也是，我觉得从for开始的可以另起一句话；另外，balance between its pros and cons 和 consider it comprehensively and systematically有些重复）my viewpoint is that to be an effective leader, a public official should maintain ethical and moral standards sometimes（有时候？就是说有时候遵守一下，大部分时间不遵守吗？sometimes表示的频率是比较低的，这句话的意思我不敢苟同...） but not that maintain the highest and forever.（这句话我能猜出你的意思，但是读着觉得很奇怪，特别是not that，可是我也不确定怎么改... need not maintain？)

Firstly and basically, the arguer's assertion has some merits primarily in that have sufficient empirical supports and logical proofs although suffers from some significant deficiencies. （有语法错误吧？从句少了主语，或者是用动名词做主语；谓语单复数不一致；although只用在句首。另外恕我直言，这句话是不是有点前后矛盾呢？有了sufficient supports & logical proofs 还会有significant deficiencies？而且这句话还会混淆这段的主题，这段到底是要支持还是反对这个观点呢？） Indeed, to be an effective leader, a public official should keep up ethical and moral standards, since their image and action generally stand for the national dignity and moral standards, and a public official action usually takes an effect on the public and young people and promote them to aspire after and imitate them. Some cases that are very persuasive （Some persuasive cases就可以啦）can illustrate the viewpoint very clearly. Zhou En Lai, the premier of China, he（不用的，Zhou Enlai已经是主语了） maintained the ethical and moral standards at diplomatic activities and daily life all the while, and so he got the respect and memory form his people. o（O）n the contrary, Hitler, a crazy Nazi massacred of Jews, neglected and disobeyed ethical and moral standards as a result he is（was） shamed and objected by the descendant although he has（had） the super ability at military affairs（希特勒的军事才华很杰出吗？不大清楚...）. All these（the，evidence是不可数名词） evidence certify（certifies） that it is partially indisputable for a public official to hold up the ethical and moral standards.

楼主多注意时态、单复数哦，过世的人用过去时。
希特勒的那个例子，只分析到他被人唾弃，似乎没说到他的领导是否effective？ effective 不等于good，对不？

另外我自己在思考一个问题，effecttive是否牵涉到价值上应不应该，还是说仅仅从管理的技术上、效率上来评判？我还没有想清楚，但看来，楼主认为，effective leader等同于一个好领导，而我觉得这点有点问题，或者至少应该先申明一下

Despite the desirable part of the arguer's contestation, we must be aware of （that，后面是个从句）overextended underscore（这个词做名词时表示下划线，不是强调的意思） is inadvisable and problematic, in a short, I am skeptical the opinion at two respects as the analysis as below.（缺少连词，建议从In a short 开始重新断句）

The speaker excessively underline the "highest"（用句子做主语？那么少了引导词？加个That？） is unreasonable and infeasible because that the highest （最高的什么？）isn't an exact notion and we can't judge it accurately. The ethical and moral standards are diverse and various due to different people ,nation and culture as well as the variety of people's value, education, experience and so on. The answer of the highest ethical and moral standards is various and vague, how can we require a public official maintain the highest ethical and moral standards and which criterion they should choose and keep up？

Additionally, It is unnecessary for a public official maintain ethical and moral standards forever. Generally, there isn't （are not）perfect people in the world include an effective leader.（有语法错误，含义上也有点模糊...） Some leaders sometimes aren't able to accentuate the ethic and moral
when they pursuit human peace and progress and the society steady and harmony, otherwise, they extraordinarily emphasis the ethic and moral that can't deal with the problem about political affairs and the society. （为什么注意了道德就不能解决问题呢？ 不一定的对伐？或者你给个极端的具体的例子说明下？）Furthermore, even though some
leaders have some flaws we shouldn't entirely deny the effect they had made. An appropriate instance can indicate the point beyond any doubt that Chinaman Mao made some mistakes at his autumn but that we still admit he lead（led） us to fight for our
nation and freedom and he is an effective leader. （beyond开始另起一句吧）Hence, it is inadvisable and problematical for us to judge whether a public official is effective or not through they maintain the highest ethical and moral standards or not.

Based on the analysis made above, we can draw a conclusion that the notion about highest ethical and moral standards isn't legitimate and can't be estimated accurately. To be an effective leader, they should seek a balance between maintaining the ethical and moral standards and dealing with their affairs effectively.

楼主的文章有明显的模板痕迹，有些地方长句太多太绕，不如用短一点的句子表达得更清楚。

如果批得狠了请多包涵！

lynnzhang2009UID: 2789534

真是感谢你的修改啊！ 2# algabra

lynnzhang2009UID: 2789534

我又改了一下，补充比较大的我再发上来。你有时间再看看可以不？紫色是我添加或又修改的。呵呵，真是谢谢给我修改啊！
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Not surprisingly, he was not an effective leader and he is（was） shamed and objected by the descendant although he has（had） the ability at military affairs .

Additionally, It is unnecessary for a public official maintain ethical and moral standards forever. Generally, there isn't （are not）perfect people in the world
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