【BigFish】04月07日issue40-By mseyj

mseyjUID: 2730706

求狠拍！ 句式！逻辑！(写的不是布置的，抱歉，补之前的高频）

Issue 40 Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, however unusual or idiosyncratic these interests may seem.

      Nowadays, we are benefited greatly from the countless rewarding scientific researches: our society is developed greatly and our life could be no more convenient than each of the era before. But there are some studies which do not seem to be so attractive and helpful to us. And recently some argue that scholars and researchers should concern that their work makes a contribution to the larger society. However, in my mind, it is more significant for them to pursue their individual interests, on the premise of having no evil purpose.

           As we all know, scientific researches are a process of exploring the unknown nature, thus, it would be very hard to judge which one of them would bring more benefits to our human being. If a priority must be taken, then who would make the choice is still a big question: the government or the mass? Admittedly, any one of us could not be objective and predict the results of the decision. Moreover, a number deal of beneficial works is byproduct of the process of researching. Alexander Fleming who discovered the famous antibiotic medicine-penicillin actually did a more plain research without any purpose of producing the antibiotic medicines. He found this profound medicine because of an accident. Then, a even usual research give us the most favorable results, so it is difficult to tell which research contribute to the larger society.

        Moreover, interests do play a vital role in the development of scientific researches for they serve as a huge impetus for researchers. Scholars who have plentiful interests on their studies would definitely work with more passion, and devotion. Thus, more significant achievements may come to the reality. Copernicus who was studying in the medicine at first became interested in the astronomy about which he contacted with a little knowledge later. With a great deal of interests, he worked very hard, and finally brought out the profound idea- the heliocentric theory. Hence, it is impossible to deny the crucial effect of the interests.

       However, to let scientists do whatever they prefer to do would be wrong. Researchers who possess an evil purpose and might do harmful researches to the society should be restrained by morality and laws. Take the clone technology for example. If the scientists who likely to clone a human without any parent realize his position without any limitation, then it would be a disaster: our ethic would be trapped in a totally disorder situation where would be no more families or even a nation. In short, appropriate restrictions to regulate the researches are needed.

          A free atmosphere providing a right for the scientists to carry out their works according to the interests is important in which they can work with more impetus and may contribute more to the society. Nevertheless, we should not overlook some researchers' immoral mind and the harmful results they could bring to us.

xiao.xinUID: 2682051

这是到目前为止我见过的逻辑最清晰的作文。我觉得4分没问题，但是句式变化不够，长句子太少。

江雪UID: 2790520

要注意，有些词组不用于被动语态，如benefit from；

从句泛滥，如there are some studies which do not seem to be so attractive and helpful to us，这个there be和which引导的定语从句都很莫名，直接用简单句就好了；

中式英语，如However, in my mind, it is more significant for them to pursue their individual interests, on the premise of having no evil purpose；

名词单复数，bring more benefits to our human being；

词语搭配，a number deal of beneficial works——你要用a number of还是a great deal of；
interests on their studies；a great deal of interests——a great deal of修饰不可数名词；

定冠词使用，a even——an even；

主谓一致，a even usual research give us the most favorable results；

表述不清，come to the reality 好歹也应该是人作主语；studying in the medicine——这不是“医学专业”的准确表达方式；

最后也是最重要的一个问题，句式杂糅。如果对复杂句式的掌握不到家，老老实实写简单句就是了。下面这两句算是比较awkward的了。
Copernicus who was studying in the medicine at first became interested in the astronomy about which he contacted with a little knowledge later.

If the scientists who likely to clone a human without any parent realize his position without any limitation, then it would be a disaster: our ethic would be trapped in a totally disorder situation where would be no more families or even a nation. In short, appropriate restrictions to regulate the researches are needed.

逻辑线，也不是太好。