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贴上参考了好多提纲而写成的提纲- -...老G们帮我看看有啥问题啊..
真的是好几年没写过英语文章，力不从心啊...就快上刑场了...求拍求拍...
语言烂这没办法。。一时半会儿挽回不了了。。
我自己感觉我的例子根本展不开，每个例子挖挖空能写一两句，看例文的例子都是整段整段的。。学不来啊。。
求个建议。。我还没开窍啊。。

TOPIC: ISSUE151 - "High-speed electronic communications media, such as electronic mail and television, tend to prevent meaningful and thoughtful communication."

翻译：高速的电子通讯媒介，如电子邮件和电视，阻止了人们有思想、有意义的交流
Position:不同意该观点，不会阻止
（1）电子邮件和电视等通信手段使人们的沟通更为方便，快捷。现在人们倾向于使用电话，电子邮件沟通，原因一是即使相隔很远，也瞬间可以联系上通过Internet或电话。原因二是省钱，电话费和网费比起坐飞机的钱少很多。举例子：我在外地读大学，每周通过电话和父母通话，讲述一周的学习生活，平时也通过电子邮件和父母沟通。转折，这些方式，也使得人们的见面沟通变少。举例子:过去的人们总喜欢在节日登门拜访。现在的节日人们都不愿意再登门拜访了,人们都用更快的方式发短信或者打电话。
（2）（让步）尽管见面少了难免生疏,但是meaningful和thoughtful的沟通并不一定因此被阻止。原因1是通过电子邮件电话等方式沟通只是形式上的变化，实际上人们的沟通会因为方便快捷而更加频繁，过去因为见面比较麻烦，每年见面一两次都很困难，现在方便了每周甚至每天都可以沟通。许多跨国的贸易，电子商务都是通过电话和电子邮件完成交易的，这样更提高了公司的效率也节约了开销。
（3）原因2是科技现在更进步了，产生可视电话，通过网络也可以看到对方，人们可以在谈话的时候看到对方的表情、肢体语言甚至眼神，这并不亚于面对面的交流。举例，远距离恋爱，有很多情侣是通过电话或者网络来沟通，跟见面没什么区别了，“距离产生美”，他们的感情甚至会增进。电子邮件和书信一样，通过文字交流，一样的mind-to-mind，许多人通过电子邮件交朋友，和书信没多大区别了。只要有心，任何形式的沟通都会是meaningful和thoughtful的，并不会因为方式的改变而被阻止。

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In this era of rapid development of technology, the ways of communication between people have been greatly changed that high-speed electronic communications media have almost represented the ways of traditional communication such as writing letters or talking face-to-face. Some people found it to prevent meaningful and thoughtful communication. Actually, the new ways of communication are so effective that makes people communicating better rather than destroy it.

High-speed electronic communications media have both advantages and disadvantages. On one hand, new means of communication such as electronic mail, television and telephone tends to faster and more convenient communication. Currently, people prefer to communicate through e-mail or telephone not only because they are convenient but also through they are cheaper. Distance is not a barrel of communication any more. No matter how long the distance is, it is possible to get to see each other in several seconds. In terms of the spending, fee of telephone or Internet is much less than the travel spending including the transportation expenses and the hotel expenses. My university is far from my home that I could not go home frequently, so I call my parents every week to talk to them about my school life. Once I missed my mother and father, I call them. It may be one of the best ways for students to communicate with parents, as it is so convenient and cheap. On the other hand, high-speed electronic communications media prevent people from face-to-face meeting, it may increase the distance between people. Traditionally, people always visit families and friends during some important festivals. Though the velocity of airplanes and cars is greatly increasing， people are willing to choose a faster way which is to give a call even send SMS now.

Admittedly, new ways of communication may alienate people. It may, in turn, bring some benefits. In fact, meaningful and thoughtful communication may not be prevented. Firstly, it is only the ways of communication have been changed, not the effect of communication. People contact much more often that they call each other weekly even daily through e-mail or telephone. Yet, several years before, they could hardly communicate once or twice yearly because it is such a burden that it spends a long time to have a meet. Almost all national trades and electronic commerce are working through e-mail and telephone. It greatly increases the efficiency of their work and decreases the expenses of their companies.

Moreover, as the development of technology, visible telephone could help people communicate much more vividly. One could see the countenance, body language or even make eye contact with the other when they are having conversation, which nearly the same as having a face-to-face conversation. Just like many couples of lovers keep a long distance relationship based on the convenient and vivid way of communication. It is said that absence makes the heart grow fonder, and it may enhance their love. E-mail may be the same as letter, by which people could communicate mind-to-mind. That is the reason why people prefer to make friends through e-mail. If only people willing to have a deep, meaningful and thoughtful communication, it will be, no matter how people communicate.

Obviously, new things are born to make people live a better life or it would soon been deserted. High-speed electronic communications media will certainly help people to communicate faster and deeper if people take good use of it.