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tonyyoucanUID: 2806157

1. 5.4   09.6.7北美9 C! T, o5 @/ b; k) D1 M
Twenty years from now, people will have more free time(leisure time) than we do now

Among lots of employees and employers, the dramsstic disscussion of issue about whether people will have more free time to enjoy is never ceased. On one side, providers consider as the ecomony increased, people get more wealthy, they could have more leisure time to spend. The opponents on the other side bring forward the view that in the twenty years later, the competation will become more fierce forcing people to cut down their free time to enjoy life. In my own opinion, I buttress the latter opinion by following reasons.
Nowadays, it is very prevalent to connect the happiness to money, Oceans of people are straggle to making more money, they never stop their busy steps to view the landscape they passed by. In those workers mind, the wealth come to the first, they spent little time to care about their family and enjoy the amzing life. So, even the time fleets twenty years later, those people will do the same things, the amount of leisure time they spent will never change. For instance, the career of auditor, they are always handling with the tough, almost same prosscess of accounting.In certificed pubilc accountants, they even have no time to spending the money they owing!
Furthermore, the mortage and children educaton tuitoin make parents under heavy pressure, sometimes, parennts have no choose but to lessen leisure time. The price of appartment in China is soaring in recent years, in big city such as Shanghai, BeiJinng and Hangzhou, the employers have to pay for mortage in order to have a their own place to sheild in bustling city. So spend more free time to enjoy life means they will endure more months to pay mortage or even the risk of land off.
In addition, as the society developed,the competition become more drastic in twenty years later. Amounts of whiter-collar workers will be forced to take more extra tuition so as to catch the step of social development. The only extra time time they could use is after work, so people have less free time to spend in latter twenty years.
To sum up, taking all the factors into accountant, the increasing social competation, pressure of paying apartment mortage and children tuition fees leading people to working more and study more. I would say, in the latter tewnty years, people will have less leisure time to consume.

Natalie蝶UID: 2806232

Among lots of employees and employers, the dramsstic这个是dramastic吗？ disscussion of issue about whether people will have more free time to enjoy is never ceased. On one side, proponents consider as the ecomony increasedincrease means become bigger or larger in amount or in size.so i think here you 'd better use developed/advanced , people get wealthier, they could have more leisure time to spend. The opponents on the other side bring forward the view that in the twenty years later这里的in和later不清, the competation will become more fierce forcing people to cut down their free time to enjoy life. In my own opinion, I buttress the latter opinion by following reasons.
       Nowadays, it is very prevalent to connect the happiness to money, Oceans of people are struggling to make more money, they never stop their busy steps to view the landscape they passed by. In those workers' mind, the wealth come to the first我认为这里应该是comes first, they spent little time to care about their family and enjoy the amzing life. spend sth doing sth我认为更idiomatic(拙见）So, even the time fleets twenty years later, those people will do the same things, the amount of leisure time they spent will never change. For instance, the career of auditor, they are always handling with the tough, almost same prosscess of accounting.In certificed pubilc accountants, they even have no time to spending the money they own.      
       Furthermore, the mortage and children educaton tuitoin make parents under heavy pressure, sometimes, parennts have no chioce but to lessen leisure time. The price of appartment in China is soaring in recent years, in big city such as Shanghai, BeiJinng and Hangzhou, the employers have to pay for mortage in order to have a their own place to sheild in bustling city. So spend more free time to enjoy life means they will endure more months to pay mortage or even the risk of land off.
       In addition, as the society developed,the competition become more drastic in twenty years later. Amounts of whiter-collar workers will be forced to take more extra tuition(i don't catch you here) so as to catch the step of social development. The only extra time time they could use is after work, so people have less free time to spend in latter twenty years.
       To sum up, taking all the factors into accountant, the increasing social competation, pressure of paying apartment mortage and children tuition fees leading 时态问题people to working我认为不用动名词 more and study more. I would say, in the latter tewnty years, people will have less leisure time to consume.关于latter的用法，我认为这是一个比较级，表示在一段很长的时间里德后面20年，这里我举一个百度的例子

• In the latter years of his life he lived alone and never welcomed visitors.
  他晚年独居，从不欢迎来访者。

我发现LL很喜欢把to后面带动名词~no matter it is a prepositon or not

Natalie蝶UID: 2806232

i think some of your expressions are more diversed than mine! which is worthy of my admiration! and the structure is coherent and clear~

tonyyoucanUID: 2806157

3# Natalie蝶

谢谢楼上帮我批改作文的，你的拼写很好，我的拼写问题蛮多的，呵呵~~
而且您的文章 结构蛮严谨，用词也值得我学习呢~~ 加油加油

tonyyoucanUID: 2806157

5.5 作文2
5.5
09.12.4北美
do you think people should buy things made in their own country, even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else



Whether people should purchase the productions produced by their own country or buying the same things which made by other countries at low price? Different people hold different opinions, some advocate hold perspective that people must spend their money on their domestic products, some objectors bring their view that purchase a low price, same quality products is a more wise decision. In my own opinion, there are no certain answers, people should buy the things depend on their own various situations


Lots of people buy their domestic commodities for the reason of increasing GDP(Gross domestic product). If people only buy their domestic products, there will be more working opportunities. Since people in the country have well jobs, the society will be more harmonious, vice versa. For instance, in 2008, the economy crisis hit the American economy, millions of employees were laid-off, so the security in America become worse and American choose a new President to take charge of their own government. We could conclude that purchase domestic merchandise can definitely benefit their own country's economy.


Some opponents consider choose abroad goods at lower price but having the same quality is more smart choice. Nowadays, it is apt and prevalent to combine overseas' products with good quality. For example, In China, when people go shopping in the supermarkets, 90 percents of buyers prefer abroad products, even they are at higher price. All the purchasers believe the high quality oversea products would bring them less repairing trouble and security guarantees.


However, both sides have their own reason, as one sword have two edges. I consider people should buy the products according to there own decision. Not all the abroad commodities are high quality. Taking the Toyota company into consideration, people could find reputation of big company lead them make the wrong decision sometime. The problem of brake
existed in Japanese automobile corporation Toyota made the vehicles more dangerous. Nevertheless, if all the people purchase their own products, it have no benefits for globalization, since people never trade each other in order to protect their own countries' interests


To sum up, I consider people should purchase the merchandises not only according to their situation and decision, but also to the the benefits of world.

ggjyUID: 2706471

挺好，新东方范儿十足，完整，丰满。在猜明天会不会和你一组，咱俩帖子在一起

bruce520UID: 2634940

Among lots of employees and employers, the dramsstic disscussion of issue about whether people will have more free time to enjoy is never ceased. On one side, providers consider as the ecomony increased, people get more wealthy[wealthy有自己的的比较级形式], they could have more leisure time to spend. The opponents on the other side bring forward the view that in the twenty years later, the competation will become more fierce forcing people to cut down their free time to enjoy life. In my own opinion, I buttress the latter opinion by following reasons.

Nowadays, it is very prevalent to connect the happiness to money, Oceans of people are straggle to making more money, they never stop their busy steps to view the landscape they passed by.[这个貌似不能作为topic sentence，建议第一句还是要有TS] In those workers mind, the wealth come to the first, they spent little time to care about their family and enjoy the amzing life. So, even the time fleets twenty years later, those people will do the same things, the amount of leisure time they spent will never change. For instance, the career of auditor, they are always handling with the tough, almost same prosscess of accounting.In certificed pubilc accountants, they even have no time to spending the money they owing!

Furthermore, the mortage and children educaton tuitoin make parents under heavy pressure, sometimes, parennts have no choose but to lessen leisure time. The price of appartment in China is soaring in recent years, in big city such as Shanghai, BeiJinng and Hangzhou, the employers have to pay for mortage in order to have a their own place to sheild in bustling city. So spend more free time to enjoy life means they will endure more months to pay mortage or even the risk of land off.

In addition, as the society developed, the competition become more drastic in twenty years later. Amounts of whiter-collar workers will be forced to take more extra tuition so as to catch the step of social development. The only extra time time they could use is after work, so people have less free time to spend in latter twenty years.

To sum up, taking all the factors into accountant, the increasing social competation, pressure of paying apartment mortage and children tuition fees leading people to working more and study more. I would say, in the latter tewnty years, people will have less leisure time to consume.

拼写错误很多，可能还是刚开始写，论证的主题部分还需要进一步格式化建议。

ggjyUID: 2706471

Whether people should purchase the productions produced by their own country or buying（should后面两个并列的动词应该是do而不是doing）  the same things which made by other countries at low price? Different people hold different opinions, (来个句号吧，下面逗号太多了)some advocate hold perspective that people must spend their money on their domestic products, some objectors bring their view that purchase a low price, same quality products is a more wise decision. （some objectors keep their view that purchasing a lower price with same quality product is a wiser decision.这样写顺眼点不？你再考虑一下）In my own opinion,（there are no certain answers, 这句没必要说了感觉）people should buy the things depend on their own various situations（这句也有点奇怪，就是不知道怎么能不奇怪了，你再好好考虑下啊）
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Lots of people buy their domestic commodities for the reason of increasing of GDP(Gross domestic product). If people only buy their domestic products, there will be more working opportunities. Since people in the country have well jobs, the society will be more harmonious, vice versa. For instance, in 2008, the economy（应该是economic) crisis hit the American economy, millions of employees were laid-off, so the security in America become（这里是不是应该过去时？） worse and American choose a new President to take charge of their own government. We could conclude that purchase domestic merchandise can definitely benefit their own country's economy.. s  z  @1 d1 Q# [) H9 z' M
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Some opponents consider choose abroad goods at lower price but having the same quality is more smart choice. Nowadays, it is apt and prevalent to combine overseas' products with good quality. For example, In China, when people go shopping in the supermarkets, 90 percents of buyers prefer abroad products, even they are at（in） higher price. All the purchasers believe the high quality oversea products would bring them less repairing trouble and security guarantees（ 这俩倒一下位置吧，要不然less修饰的对象容易产生歧义）

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However, both sides have their own reason, as one sword have two edges（one coin always has tow sides）. I consider people should buy the products according to there own decision.（这句貌似跟第一段的完全重复了）Not all the abroad commodities are（have） high quality. Taking the Toyota company into consideration, people could find reputation of big company lead (leading) them to make the wrong decision sometime. The problem of brake
existed in Japanese automobile corporation Toyota made the vehicles more dangerous. Nevertheless, if all the people purchase their own products, it have no benefits for globalization, since people never trade each other in order to protect their own countries' interests3 ~0 j) T) p0 _0 k4 z( v* T
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To sum up, I consider （这个词用得有点多）people should purchase the merchandises not only according to their situation and decision, but also to the the benefits of world.

ggjyUID: 2706471

十分晕菜 。。。我在WORD里改的传上来怎么这样。。。过分。。。括号里的是我改的，中间有加TO 的地方直接加的，不好意思，你仔细分辨一下吧，由于水平有限所以不知道我改的对你会不会有帮助，你再自己去辨别正误吧