【1010G精英组】ARGUMENT7 F组回收站

悦微微志燮UID: 2759026

3# makeithappen

The argument above is well-presented, but lacks logic. The author assume(assumes?) that Ann Green exceed Frankbraun when deal with the problem with environment. But the author only provides the evidence about the severe environment situation of Clearview when FrankBraun in charge of Clearview, which could not illustrate that Ann Green would be a optimal mayor.
Although the three situations: the number of factories in Clearview has doubled, air pollution levels have increased, and the local hospital has treated more patients with respiratory illnesses, occur at the same time, they are not must be causality. There is another thing to cause the air pollution and respiratory illnesses, not the rocketing factories number. For example, the terrible environment of near town would lead to the Clearview's increasing of air pollution and the number of respiratory illnesses. And Frank Braun, a member of the Clearview town council, has tried his best to prevent the air pollution.
The argument is weaken by the fact it does not take performances in other areas into account when compare(comparing?) these two candidates. If Frank Braun is in charge of unemployment issue in Clearviewtown council and the unemployed rate greatly decline since the increasing ofnumber of factories in Clearview, then Frank Braun arrive his assignment perfectly.The issue of pollution obviously not Frank Braun's range governed. Thus a morecomplete investigation about both Frank Braun and Ann Green's work should be made, before we can （少一个动词)the conclusion that Ann Green is superior to Frank Braun.
Finally, although Ann Green might have more experience than Frank Braun in dealing the environmental issue,nothing guarantee that environmental problems in Clearview will certainly besolved since we lack the information about what really cause the environmental problems and how to solve them. If environmental problems lasting(last?) for long-time, as we all known some methods for solving environmental problems such as clarify the air should take a relatively long time, we could not expect one mayor solving it immediately. Also, the mayor have more responsibility in developing Economic and stabling the society, and sometimes the development of Economic and stability will hurt environment more or less. So Ann Green would face impediment when solving the environmental problems, which would weaken her determination of solving environmental problems. And without looking more specific into both two people, we could not know who can done(do?) a best job when being the mayor, since solving environmental problems is just one of mayor's assignment, not all.
The argument recommending Ann Green for the mayor based on Ann Green and Frank Braun's title and the severe environmental problems in Clearview townwarn the citizens of Clearview to pay attention to their the environmental problems. But before a conclusion about who is the optimal major, a more complete understanding of all the candidate's ability and character is needed.After all, a false major can destroy the whole town financially and psychologicallyin a short time.

条理很清晰，但是用词用句有些简单，而且有一些小错误~

xmaszztUID: 2796708

我分析了半天。。。。

写了半天。。。

才发现昨天晚上果然是我理解你的文章错误了。。。=。=

没问题了。。刚发的编辑了。。

lxin333UID: 2650844

17# xmaszzt

我都还没看 咋就编辑掉了！