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[i习作temp] 第一篇ISSUE,,周围没有考伴,诚恳的希望大家指正。。多谢了 [复制链接]

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发表于 2010-5-14 17:40:17 |显示全部楼层
第一次写,知道写的不怎么样,句子啥得也不好,真心的希望有路过的人给看看,好有点底,我在这里谢过大家了,看看思路和结构,可能大家的一席话,我让会受用匪浅的
Issue 69
"Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

It has been a wide discussed issue that whether government should place restriction on scientific
research and development, I firmly attain the idea that restrictions are necessary for the scientific research and development ,which ensure the society's healthy development in the long run., but all the restrictions should be well considered ,which will be the obstacle for the our society’s technology development.


Admittedly, there are so many regulations for scientist doing their work in our daily academic research, which make
many scientist feel grounded at a certain spot ,just like a baby taken care by a really restrict mother, who can not do something risky or creative even it might be beneficial for the growth of himself. When we look any history book of a nation, we are not surprised to
find out that so many genius scientist was controlled too much by the government, which
directly limited their ability to contribute more to their country. Caihen, the inventor of modern paper ,who was suffering from the red tape and other useless regulation of government ,paid way much more time on fighting against the system rather than developing more effective methods of making cheap paper for people.


However, we can not ignore the importance of restriction from government that are intended to protect our society's safety and human society's morality. In modern time, all kinds of technology are invented by scientists. On one hand, some of them are
really helpful for us, which make our life much easier than ever before, one the other hand ,some of them
bring the biggest threaten we have never been encountered. Nuclear weapons, which was made to end the war, is now a worldwide issue that has been concerned by all countries. If government does not place restrictions on such thing, we never know what will happen if there is a crazy scientist using such powerful weapon to do something illegal. Hence, government has the responsibility to set certain regulation to guide the scientific research and development.


Furthermore, reasonable restrictions are the guarantee of the healthy development of science .We all acknowledge that if there is no regulation in our society, it would be chaos that we are never longing for. Same to the development of science, well designed restrictions can provide a healthy environment for all kinds of scientist. For example, most of governments establish a comprehensive legal system to make sure the authorized paper used or quoted legally based on the law. Anyone who steals other scientist’s work will be punished severely. Though such protection, the hard work of scientist is well respected and a positive academic environment is established, and the scientist are eager to devote themselves more to the study they are working on, which may push the whole society into another significant era.

Based on analyzes above, we can get the conclusion that government have the responsibility to place restriction on scientific and development. Only can we wisely use the function of restriction for science development , our humanity will have a bright future rather than chaos.

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发表于 2010-5-14 20:15:17 |显示全部楼层
个人意见,仅供参考:整体还不错,平衡观点。一些小笔误不碍事。我第一次看别人的作文,最近都在看北美,感觉我们的用词还有句子都有些散,不过你的还不错。但可不可以能在每段的开头给出主题句。这样论证会清晰一些。

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发表于 2010-5-14 20:52:52 |显示全部楼层
认真看了楼主的文章,留个脚印。因为我也是最近才开始准备AW,不敢提什么建议,我觉得作为楼主的第一篇I,还是很不错的。我前几天也刚写了第一篇,写的过程和写的结果自认为惨不忍睹啊..不管怎么样,一起为梦想加油哈~
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发表于 2010-5-15 11:14:06 |显示全部楼层
3# ToChu
我觉得是写的不怎么样,关键是时间很紧,45分钟的时候我也就400字,后来又补了一段时间才写完的。。唉,不过看到你们的评论,我会加油的。。你也是啊 ,加油杀G..你是啥时候考啊?

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发表于 2010-5-15 11:16:25 |显示全部楼层
2# tear-nini
楼上说的是啊,我是tile主题句,肯能是太短了,没有很突出。。我已经给你回信了,看你的邮箱吧

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发表于 2010-5-15 16:59:52 |显示全部楼层
4# mydream2012

虽然时间还算够,可是我无形地感到时间的紧迫性呀。。。然后自己又要克服自己的惰性。。。哎。。。我是7月30号考,你呢?
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发表于 2010-5-15 22:31:47 |显示全部楼层
6# ToChu
我比你还靠前呢,七月20号就要考了。。。

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