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发表于 2010-7-23 08:56:47 |显示全部楼层
7.22(08.10.25NA)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.6 |5 @8 k: L6 D9 g* A
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Some people believe that one's habits in his or she personal life have nothing to do with whether he or she will succeed(这里逻辑好像有点乱,建议直接 with his future life) and one's background and education lever indeed play an important role.However,I totally disagree with that point of view.I believe people's personal habits determine their future.

First,if he or she is always keeping a room or apartment untidy,colleagues of course (??,这是Roomate 还是classmate )don't want to make friend with him or her because he or she may be untidy and dirty too.Thus,he or she may be isolated by most of the workmates,later bosses will more likely hold the opinion that he or she has some deficiencies in his or her characters.

Second,nowadays,our society provides a competitive environment and we can't live without competition(不能说我们离不开竞争,可以说竞争无处不在). Non-competition society exists only in the fairy tells(fairy tale)!So that calls for an efficient working style.But high-efficient working style isn't be obtained in a short period of time,it is up to how he or she deals with problem orderly,that is to say whether he or she is organized.4 H7 S- _! C. D
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Third,those who isn't (are not 不要用缩写)organized are more likely to solve problems uncompletely and they have more chances to make mistakes all due to their confusion in almost every aspect of their life.* k8 x7 C% t0 o; L
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Just an the saying goes:"Details determine one's winning or lost".And I think those who are organized in life are organized at work,and they have the better chances to succeed.4 y" V& |) }) e# ~4 u: \  t! \; X  x
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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.

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发表于 2010-7-23 10:41:57 |显示全部楼层
Date: 22/07/10(08.10.25NA)
Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
Taking what concerns me into consideration, I firmly hold the idea that students who keep rooms neat and organized will have a better chance to succeed than students who turn a blind eye on their mess room.
First and foremost, an organized surrounding can do contribute to people by forming the habit of arranging themselves up. A contributory fact can be lent to validate my assertion is that handling the ability to make our rooms neat and organized benefits us a lot by nurturing attentiveness and efficiency, which are really imperative factors to oneself. Taking lawyers as an example, lawyers are those who are required of highly rigorous logic and reasoning due to their profession, and in a large scale it is the habit of organizing and neatening that helps its forming and strengthening. Only with the habit of organizing can a person achieve the ability of attentiveness which is crucial to us, and we should draw a solid recognition that this kind of habit origins in such small matter as keeping one’s own room neat and organized.
Besides, enhancement of efficiency is one of the results of keeping the room neat and organized. Let’s imagine what devastating result can we draw in a disordered lab which is totally a mess, which will be a disaster from its beginning to its ending. The doctrine applies to our own room, too. With a neat room we will find what we are searching for as quickly as we can and there will be no possibility of losing something in a dark corner. By organizing our room we can make sure our time will never be wasted in looking for something which is overflowed in the mess room.
All in all as I concern, supposedly people with the habit of keeping their rooms organized and neat have a better chance to win due to its nurturing of attentiveness and efficiency, which are the key factors of success.

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发表于 2010-7-23 13:37:36 |显示全部楼层
441# wangyueleng

Some people believe that one's habits (in his or she personal life这一节感觉没必要可以删掉) have nothing to do with whether he or she will succeed and(转折关系,不要用and换成in contrast one's background and education lever indeed play an important role.However,I totally disagree with that point of view.I believe people's personal habits(话题转换有点急) determine their future.* v0 t3 F/ Z- y) Z0 X- P
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First,if he or she is always keeping a room or apartment untidy,colleagues of course don't want to make friend with him or her because he or she may be untidy and dirty too.
(句子太长,主题句最好简明一些)Thus,he or she may be isolated by most of the workmates,later bosses will more likely hold the opinion that he or she has some deficiencies in his or her characters.
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Second,nowadays,our society provides a competitive environment and we can't live without competition. Non-competition society exists only in the fairy tells!
(这句说的很chiglishSo that calls for an efficient working style.But high-efficient working style isn't be obtained in a short period of time,it is up to how he or she deals with problem orderly,that is to say whether he or she is organized.
Third,those who isn't organized are more likely to solve problems uncompletely and they have more chances to make mistakes all due to their confusion in almost every aspect of their life.
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Just an the saying goes:"Details determine one's winning or lost".And I think those who are organized in life are organized at work,and they have the better chances to succeed.



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字数严重不够,将来会很吃亏的;2、作者的论理很单薄,没有深入细致的例子3、句子长短不一,长句显得很乱,建议在造句上继续努力(个人意见,仅供参考)

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发表于 2010-7-23 14:46:08 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-7-23 17:34:28 |显示全部楼层
7.22晚了些~~大家加油哦!!
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发表于 2010-7-24 11:40:41 |显示全部楼层
看到大家的好文章,心情里格澎湃,决定共勉
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发表于 2010-7-24 14:22:42 |显示全部楼层
第一次写全文
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发表于 2010-7-24 15:08:44 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 云涛云涛 于 2010-7-24 15:15 编辑

刚加入群
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本帖最后由 好吧那就这样 于 2010-7-24 19:43 编辑

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发表于 2010-7-24 15:40:36 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2010-7-24 16:56:33 |显示全部楼层
今天刚完成一战,就不写了,下周开始,已报9月份

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发表于 2010-7-24 18:49:46 |显示全部楼层
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Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Sports teach people lessons about life.

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