欢迎拍文修改小组第六次作业argument236

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The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a local Solano newspaper.
"The Solano school district should do away with its music education programs. After all, music programs are not especially popular in our schools: only 20 percent of our high school students participated in music programs last year. Furthermore, very few of the Solano district's college-bound students are interested in majoring in music at the university level. Also, when the school district of our neighboring town of Rutherford eliminated its music programs two years ago, the overall grade point average in the high school increased by 10 percent the next year. Surely the money spent on Solano music programs could be better used to improve the quality of traditional academic courses."

In this argument the editor recommends that, in order to improve the quality of traditional academic courses, the Solano school district should do away with its music education programs. To support this argument, the editor points out that music programs are not especially popular in our schools, only 20 percents of high school students participated in music programs and very few of students are interested in majoring in music. The editor also cites the evidence from their neighboring town of Rutherford, which got a great improvement in the overall grade point when they eliminated its music programs. This argument is unconvincing for several reasons.

First of all, the survey support the argument that the music program should be eliminated for it is not popular in the students is lack of logical. the editor fails to make the relationship between the popularizing and the action to eliminate the music program. The foundation of music program is to improve the quality of students, not for the popular. Even the role of this school is evaluate the vale of a program with the level of the popular, the editor should prove the comparison between the number ofstudents who participated in music programs and other programs. That is entirely possible that 20 percents of student is the largest number in all programs. For this reason, he evidence that 20 percents of high school students participated in music programs is not support the fact that music program is not popular in high school. And even it is true that the music program is not popular in high school, the truth cannot be the evidence that only few of students are interested in majoring in music. It is entirely possible that most of students are not talent enough to take the music as their major.

Secondly, the editor fails to establish the relationship between the music program and the improvement in traditional courses. He assumes that if the high school eliminate the music program , they should have enough money to make the traditional courses better in some way. To support this assumption, the editor provides the evidence that happened in their neighboring town. Clearly, the editor ignores some other factors that might cause the result that the overall grade point average in the high school increased by 10 percent the next year in neighboring town of Rutherford. Such as the improvement of the teacher’s teaching skills, the more quality of the students. Otherwise, the reason why neighboring town eliminate the music program might be not the want to do so. They might had some reason make them have to do this, like thay lack of the teacher to teach the music and thay cannot find another one. Even the neighboring town get the improvement just because the action that eliminate the music program, there is no evidence shows that the same event will be happen in The Solano school district.

In conclusion, the argument is indefensible as it stands. To strength it the editor must assure me that the comparison the number of students between the music program and others; the evidence that the elimination music program is the only one reason for the improvement of high school in the neighboring town. Before given more information, the editor should not conclude the unconvincing conclusion.