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Getting into work outside the academic world can help college and university faculty offer more practical courses and education to students. As it stands, we society spend 【主语是同位语，我也不太确定这里应该是单数还是复数，也许是按就近原则】 a great number of resources and efforts to bring up a large group of young men angnd women who are <potencialy> 【potential】 leaders in sciences, arts and <literature>【so forth】. The main <reson> 【reason】 for modern states to "invest" in education is to culture person <the real-world needs> 【with needs from real-world】. I agree that faculties in some professions which has <tite>【tight?close可能会好点】 correlation with daily life and practical industry shoud go outside to keep in touch with the <practices>【跟前面的practical有点重复，建议用realistic appliance】. 【从这里分段】There are several benefits for the faculties to do so. In the first place, outside world has a lot of new ideas which are the seeds of innovation in <the> related <profession>【professions】. Such as in engineering of household industry, the professor can always see sparkle when he talks with the engineers and fixers who work daily in the repair store on the street.【你是想说家族企业？这个场景设定不太典型】 In the second place, theory <altough> <spread>【spreaded】 aloud in the classroom would 【still】 have to be tested in practical world 【, and】then people can decide whether it is ture. Especially for students, knowledges only in the form of <literary>【literatures】 in books and 【on】<blackboard>【blackboards】 can <not>【hardly，not太绝对了】 give them <clarity>【clear】 impression eventhough the information they accepted <are>【is】 definately correct. More practices by hand are the most <excerlent>【excellent】 <assitent>【assistants】 of <professors>【teachers，professor并不对应教学，而对应与研究】. The Chinese Traditional Medicine, for instance, make a lot of neophyte in learning feel frustrated since the vast number of herbs which look similar with each other but has <totely>【totally】 different <function>【functions】. Fortunately, only about one week's <out-campous>【out-campus】 <camp>【excursion】 can solve the task by observing those live plants in the small forest, touching those lovely herb by student's skin. The vivid color, the real smell and the inside structure all help students distinguish those plants and let them memory them lasting and clear.
However, some subjects are not necessary and not <avalible>【suitable】 to work outside to get innovational information such as <theorycal physics>【theoretical physics，前面的中医首字母大写了，注意统一】, advanced mathematics, and other professions whose main <object>【objects】 <is>【are】 the natural truth that we do not know by now【这个原因不太充分吧】. Their <task>【tasks】 mainly focus on some assumption on unknown secrets of cosmic【严格来说数学不是科学，所以它跟自然、宇宙的神秘也是否有关系值得商榷】, therefor they can not find any answer directly from practical world【这个说理很有问题，既然他们是探求自然的未知，为什么又不能从现实世界中找答案呢？】. Someone main <hold>【argue】 that these kind of professions are too far from us and even sometimes seem useless. Actually it is just these professions which at first work only on paper, in studio, in faculty’s brain change the world largely. They are pioneers of our real world. As Zhenning Yang, the Nobel Prize holder of <phsic>【physics】, said: my group have interest in high-energy phsics which may show its value 30 years later, but the character that we can not see the benefit rightnow usually hinder people’s step【引号，并且首字母大写】. To be further, we could infer that it is not that these <theory based>【theory-based】 profession can not be practiced outside, but just not be worked outside by now.
The main destination of education <decide>【decieds】 that many professions should work outside and 【be 】practiced a lot. Only in this way can not only students have deep understanding of what had been taught【,】 but also teachers have up-stated mind and examples to make their <course>【courses】 abreast with the society <changingin great accerlerate>【changing at an accelerated speed】. Except for some fundenmatal and play the rule as “avant-grand” in human being’s life, it is unnecessary for them to woke out the acadamic world in the phase of theory pursuing【except for的句式用错了】. Sooner or later, certain professions related to these fundermantal subjects could practice the fruit of them in real world following the society’s pioneers【这句话有点点冗余】. To conclude, 整体上基本满足了Issue的格式，只是注意段落的分开。 最头疼的是小问题太多了，单复数、单词拼写等。善用word的自动拼写检查功能。 逻辑上和例子的选取上还是有待改进，一定注意逻辑的连贯性、例子的典型性。 | 
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