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4.The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
“of the two leading real estate firms in our town-Adams Realty and Fitch has 25,many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams’ revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch,and included home sales that averaged $168000,compared to Fitch’s$144000.Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well :ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.”
在本市的良家最大的房地产经纪公司----Adams Realty和Fitch Realty之中,Adams显然更优秀一些.Adams有40名房地产经纪人,而Fitch只有25个,且很多是兼职工作.而且,Adams去年的收入是Fitch的两倍,其平均房价为$168000,而Fitch仅为$144000.在Adams销售的房屋卖得也更快:十年前,我把我的房产交给Fitch,它用了四个多月才卖出去；去年，我在Adams卖了另一处房产,仅用一个月就售出了.因此,要升秒年个让你的房产卖的更快更好,你应该选择Adams,
         The writer of this argument is someone who we are not familiar with.The argument

might be written by someone related to Adams Realty which has vested interests in the

result of the argument. What's more, it was posted on an Internet discussion site where

there are little regulation and constrain and are always the first place to advertize. Thus,

it may just be an advertisement of Adams Realty and the result may not be reliable.

         First of all, the assumption that Adams Realty and Fitch Realty are the two leading

real estate firms is open to question. Without the condition of other similar companies, we

can hardly evaluate the quality of these two companies. The author would better to provide

other companies condition about their scale, asset, profit and achievement in real estate

field. These information could provide readers with a clear understanding of the quality of

this kinds of companies and make the readers easy to choose the firm they like.

         The number of the agents and the hours they work do not necessarily indicate the effect of

the firm. For example, one worker who work part-time may be more effective than another two

workers who work more hours. In addition, many other factors can affect the efficiency of the

workers. Such as the regulation measure, the culture of the firm, the knowledge and skill of

the workers.

          The argument is weakened by the fact that it does not take into account the inherent

difference in houses sold by two firms. It is at least likely that Adams Realty usually is

good at selling the houses which are higher cost while the Fitch Realty usually is good at

selling the houses which are lower cost. Thus, Adams's revenue and the houses' averaged price

is more than Fitch. It may, In fact, be the fact that Fitch's profit is higher than Adams's

because Fitch's cost is lower than Adams's and thus Fitch Realty may be more

effective. Besides, the author neglects the possibility that the sale volume amounted to be

an aberration and that in most other years Adams has actually sold fewer properties than

Fitch.

         Finally, the case of the first house sold by Adams ten years ago is incomparable to

the second house sold by Fitch last year. The condition of economy of ten years ago is

likely different from the economic condition last year. Such as goods price, inflation rate and

the government policies. These factors could affect the effect of selling

houses. Moreover, the author does not provide the information that may be crucial for the

houses sales. For example, How old are two houses respectively? What are the size of the

houses respectively? Where are the location of two houses respectively? Hence, it is almost

impossible for us to evaluate the effect of two firms based entirely on this case. The conclusion

that if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price you should use Adams is

unwarranted. Before the readers are encouraged to use Adams, the reliability of this case must

be put into consideration.

            The argument for real estate based on only two firms and one case could provide some

useful information for us to refer to. However, we can not believe it without

suspicion. After all, given that some companies in order to make more profit, they cheat

customers by all means. For example. many apocryphal advertisement are represented by stars

who have not social responsibility. Before the decision about choosing which firm to use is made,

a more complete understanding of this kind of companies is needed and helpful to us.(604wrds)

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