【Flyer杀G】小组第3次作业 6.28 ISSUE 48 -BY jingjing017

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TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

The speaker contends that the individuals attained extraordinary attention in the study of history rather than the groups of people who made the most significant events and trends ,unfortunately, the latter's importance have been ignored for a long time I wholeheartedly agree with the author, our history acknowledge spend more attention on famous individuals, such as heroes presidents greatest scientists. However, the author conceded that merely depend on the individuals the history can not evolving. This statement is too extreme, though groups of people play the unsubstantiated important role in the history, Some individuals, who makes great contribution in the history, must be etching in our memory for ever.
To begin with the speaker's threshold claim, our history places too much emphasis on individuals. Actually, during our history education, our teachers and textbooks figures out many famous people who greatly change the world, Consider the example of Confucius, who is probably the most distinguished person in the history of education, he has established the philosophy of Confucianism, He has raised many students, most of them also make the great contribution. In order to memorize this great person, in most place of china, people constructed the temple for him.
The history is replete with the examples that the world profoundly influenced by some great individuals. Consider another example of Nicolaus Copernicus, one of the most famous physical scientists, By his own attribution, almost all the physical basic theory before him were reversed, he make the physical science reach to a new place, and definitely impact the history and society. His name will keep in the physical history for ever. Similarly, Da vinci, Gandhi. They were the greatest person who must be praised because of their remarkable achievement in their field. According all these examples, it easily to find out that individuals does plays an important role in every realms of the history.
Admittedly, there are groups of people who have long been ignored in our memories who makes some significant events and trends. such as some Communist party members, before our country become emancipated, they devoted their time and even whole life to lead our people to achieve our dreams of independent. Most of them forgot by the history and people, however, we did not remember their names, their achievement will be keep in our history everlasting
To sum up. The author conclusion is too extreme, in our history, both the individuals and the groups of people' endeavor have change the world. None of them can we forgot. In fact, individuals is just one represent of the groups of people, etching them in our memories is remember our history.

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TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
The speaker contends that the individuals attained extraordinary attention in the study of history rather than the groups of people who made the most significant events and trends ,unfortunately, the latter's importance have been ignored for a long time I wholeheartedly agree with the author, our history acknowledge spend more attention on famous individuals, such as heroes presidents , greatest scientists. However, the author conceded that merely depend on the individuals the history can not evolving. This statement is too extreme, though groups of people play the unsubstantiated important role in the history, Some individuals, who makes great contribution in the history, must be etching in our memory for ever.\

//开头还不错, 重述题目 +　正反意见

To begin with the speaker's threshold claim, our history places too much emphasis on individuals. Actually, during our history education, our teachers and textbooks figures out many famous people who greatly change the world, Consider the example of Confucius, who is probably the most distinguished person in the history of education, he has established the philosophy of Confucianism, He has raised many students, most of them also make the great contribution. In order to memorize this great person, in most place of china, people constructed the temple for him.
//第一段，说明历史确实强调了个人的作用．
多举几个名人的例子，比如，Lincoln　改变历史，　Einstein　学术突破．．．，这样字数可以增多，论证也更有力



The history is replete with the examples that the world profoundly influenced by some great individuals. Consider another example of Nicolaus Copernicus, one of the most famous physical scientists, By his own attribution, almost all the physical basic theory before him were reversed, he make the physical science reach to a new place, and definitely impact the history and society. His name will keep in the physical history for ever. Similarly, Da vinci, Gandhi. They were the greatest person who must be praised because of their remarkable achievement in their field. According all these examples, it easily to find out that individuals does plays an important role in every realms of the history.
//第二段, 一些伟人确实改变的历史


Admittedly, there are groups of people who have long been ignored in our memories who makes some significant events and trends. such as some Communist party members, before our country become emancipated, they devoted their time and even whole life to lead our people to achieve our dreams of independent. Most of them forgot by the history and people, however, we did not remember their names, their achievement will be keep in our history everlasting
//但是一些无名人士也改变的历史

To sum up. The author conclusion is too extreme, in our history, both the individuals and the groups of people' endeavor have change the world. None of them can we forgot. In fact, individuals is just one represent of the groups of people, etching them in our memories is remember our history.

修改意见:
1．
字数太少了，才438字。 issue至少要写够500
2．
提纲也不太明确, 第一段和第二段是什么关系
3．
以上二者都导致一个结果,论证不是很有力。 多举一些事例，提纲写得清晰一些，论证就会好一些