求改，issue131，感觉跑题了。。又感觉没有。。。。有拍必回！！快考了，大家互相帮忙

kobewang1234UID: 2746447

TOPIC: ISSUE131 - "The arts (painting,music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of asociety."
WORDS: 740
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-6-29 22:39:00

I fundamentally with the speaker that thearts indeed reveal the hidden ideas and impulses of a society. However, byadopting the term of ‘otherwise’, the speaker implies that without arts theseideas and impulses cannot manifest themselves, to which I would like to takeexception.

To begin with, the arts could render helpto reveal the hidden and dark side of a society. The authority and governmentalways try to conceal it and the general public has few opportunities to see itwith their own eyes. For instance, Repin's world famous painting- Barge Haulerson the Volga depicts a cruel picture that eleven barge haulers were workingvery hard on the beach of the Volga. The painting is intended a highlycondemnation of the inhumane labor which could not always be seen by thepublic. Another two examples, Mark Twain's world famous novel-- Running forGovernor reveals the hypocritical nature of the so-called election indemocratic institution which is often concealed by the authorities andgovernments. By appreciating these artworks, civilians could find the hiddenside of a society easily.

Moreover, the arts could also help peopleto capture the moment that would elapse in a minute and the beauty that peoplealways overlook in their daily life. Artists could use their specific artistryto realize these aims. To be specific, the well known painting-- lady with aparasol painted by Claude Monet successfully depicts an elegant and gorgeouslady with a parasol standing on the field. Perhaps even the lady herself didnot notice the beautiful scenery without the help of Monet. One more instance,the French post-impressionist Vincent Van Gogh's painting-- Sun Flower helpspeople who are living in the city and have few opportunities to see the realsun flowers to appreciate the flowers standing for optimistic. Without theinspirations and efforts of those artists, people would never note the elapsingbeauty and the special plants that they would never see in their life. Inaddition, some nonmainstream arts such as rock'n roll, hiphop and so forthcould help people to notice the hidden ideas of young people. Youngsters showtheir true feelings including happiness, anger, sorrow, respect, etc by thespecial styles of music. By listening to and appreciate the lyrics and beats ofthese songs, adults would find the hidden feeling that they could notunderstand directly.

What's more, some literature would alsoplay a crucial role in enlightening a revolution. The authors reveal the hiddenimpulses through words and sentences in their books. To be specific, Karl Marxwrote the book-- the Communist Manifesto which was later regarded the mostprecious and enlightening literary work that direct people to pursue communism.The masterpiece written by Karl Marx described the communism systematically andindicates the worldwide tide of communism.

However, by using the word 'otherwise', thespeaker implies that only through art works, can those hidden ideas andimpulses manifest themselves, which in my opinion, goes against the experienceof human history. Due to the absence of certain insights and crafts, taking artas the approach of expressing is not easy and available for all ordinaryindividuals. Those people who are not capable of expressing their ideologiesand impulses by this means are likely to take other more direct ways. Forinstance, for the majority of ordinary people who believed in the God, it isthrough prayers rather than paintings that show their loyalty and expect to theGod. In this case, the alternative way, in which people express themselves,might not only as effective as art works but also has certain more directinfluence on expressing the ideas and impulses of the society. The rationalealso applies to literature. Although many novels describe the malcontention inthe eve of independence of the United States, it is the insurgence by themasses rather than a handful of art works gain the freedom and independence, nomatter how brilliant and insightful those works are about this issue. In short,besides arts, there is always other direct and forceful reflection of those'hidden' ideas and impulses.

In sum, although the speaker's claim thatthe arts reflect certain ideas and impulses of a society bears some merits andreveal the function of didactics and self-expression by arts to some extent, itis premature to assume that those ideas and impulse cannot directly manifestthemselves and it is the only way to indicate 'otherwise' hidden ideas andimpulses.

短发mmUID: 2840480

1# kobewang1234
还没看你的文章看到这个字数，吓人啊，首先问个问题，你怎么可以在那么短时间内洋洋洒洒740个字呢，我每次写45分钟之内必来不及字数不会超过400。
看了下大致的文章，没有细看，作者一直在强调Art怎么样Art怎么样，然后好不容易看到个literature，个人浊见，题目里面art被拆分为3个单词，可见题目已经给了思路，art是个宏观概念，凡写大书洋洋洒洒往往比较泛，记得论坛一个顾问有一篇Chapter 说这是一个condition，然后要case-by-case。首先找到关键字hidden ideas and impulses of a society。然后什么叫hidden ideas and impulses of a sociiety，你是怎么理解的，举个例子可能不是很恰当，对于painting 来说这种idea可能是世间美与丑善与恶的描绘从抽象变得具体的过程，对于music来说cover了表演者对生活的情感，literature来说更为直观的文字描述着几百年来劳动人民的思想情感。例子举得得比较泛，（开头+三段文章+结尾）同样740个字但是肯定比假大空要好，说得过了，不要介意，我只是这么想的。欢迎交流

kobewang1234UID: 2746447

金山打字通

短发mmUID: 2840480

3# kobewang1234
俄~~~

yogurt4UID: 198389

你把作文稍微修改一下再拿上来比较好。语法错误＋太多的单词连在一块比较annoying，虽然后者可能是打字软件的问题。

习作看了一下，感觉还算写的很清晰的。不过我个人对otherwise的理解跟你有出入，你认为otherwise=arts only, 我觉得arts相对科技，文化，宗教and etc.在发掘hidden ideas and impulses上的作用是锦上添花。
anyway你这样写也是没有问题的，你开头已经做了限制。

yogurt4UID: 198389

回拍连接：
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1115325-1-3.html

那个楼主也要考了，请lz去提提建议。谢谢ing

lingmin66UID: 2404789

我怎么就觉得写得很好呢，我是写不出这样的文章的，先不说具体内容怎么样，句型都太复杂且那么多字~~~~~~~~ 佩服~~~~

yogurt4UID: 198389

哈哈  楼主就是谦虚嘛