【Flyer小组习作】Issue208 6.28

MaryWongUID: 2619999

Issue208
There are ever-changing modern fashion on clothes, hair styles and even different ways to smile and talk for people to choose nowadays. People make their own choice in accordence with their outlook on life and the world ideology in their mind. If you want to get a quick understanding of a new place, making a carefully analysis on the residents' dressing and behavior would be a wise idea.
Whatever kinds of clothes and behaviors people select, they all serve to people's daily life and contribute to make the hoster more comfortble, more attractive, and more impressing. Then the choice of the manner and pament can reflect one's worldview and value system. This is nowhere more true than men and women with restrict religious such as Pakistan dress religion. Especially women there can not even expose their beautiful faces until they married. But such pity in others eyes is not any tight restrain in their mind at all. The belief showed by the dressing makes them proud of themself. And that is enough.
In a not dissimilar way, in the field of World Cup 2010 which absorb everyone's eyes recently, the officials told us that the footplayer's clothes this year are all made by the recycle matierail of plasitic baverage bottle after deep
refineness with new technology. This new way in dressing teach us the real practice to the advocation of low carbon and the environment protection. This World Cup moves us audience by their eager heart to change the world better beyond the football field.
Turn our attention to people's variable behaviors all over the world. No one could deny that polite and fervid natives you meet in the foreign country will leave you so great impression that you would conclude that the ideology and character of most people there are macia and kind. Take Sudan for instance, a texi driver who is in hurry may stop
when he saw a hurt bird lay down in front of the car. And he would go off and at leasr help this pitty bird lay aside. This is not a uncommon thing in Sudan and the mercy he showed to a bird notes us this nation's benevolent thought.
Contrarily, people walk in the luxury street in Tokeyo alway have no careness about any other matter but their heavy task and unsurvivabal pressure. The rapid pace of life deprive the smile on citizen's face. This repressive atmosphere tell us the stressful life situantion in this society with the ergent desire to pursue profit。
The way people dress and behavior usually is the reflection of people’s thought inside. Someone choose beauty, comfort, austere of formality as their standerd in selecting the clothes and manner. As it stands, we can judge the person generaly that they may be modern, straightforward or rigid in accordence with their personal choice. Furthernore, we can tell the general chatacteristic of the whole society which constituted by every residents.
抱歉，字数不够。

candygegeUID: 2792059

Issue208
There are ever-changing modern fashion on clothes, hair styles and even different ways to smile and talk for people to choose nowadays（这句话有点别扭）. People make their own choices in accordence with their outlook on life and the world ideology(这里是要表达世界观的意思吗？是否可以改用worldview, world ideology 似乎是意识形态。) in their mind. If you want to get a quick understanding of a new place, making a carefully(careful, 用discreet或cautious似乎更好) analysis on the residents' dressing and behavior would be a wise idea.
Whatever kinds of clothes and behaviors people select, they all serve to people's daily life and contribute to make the hoster（？） more comfortable, more attractive, and more impressing. Then the choice of the manner and pament(?) can reflect one's worldview and value system.(这里的推论有点牵强) This is nowhere more true(这里用true是什么含义？) than men and women with restrict religious(religious restriction) such as Pakistan dress religion. Especially women there can not even expose their beautiful faces until they(可以去掉they) married. But such pity in others eyes is not any tight restrain（不懂，想要表达的是？） in their mind at all. The belief showed by the dressing makes them proud of themself（themselves）. And that is enough.（但是并不是所有人都有这样的信仰啊，那么你的推段：The belief showed by the dressing makes them proud of themselves 就显得牵强了）
In a not dissimilar way（Similarly）, in the field of World Cup 2010 which absorb everyone's eyes recently, the officials told us that the footplayer's(footplayers') clothes this year are all made by the recycle(recycled) matierail of plasitic baverage bottle after deep refineness(refining) with new technology. This new way in dressing teach us the real practice to the advocation of low carbon and the environment protection. This World Cup moves us audience by their eager heart to change the world better beyond the football field.(例子新颖，紧扣当前热点，用世界杯的着装来反映社会对低碳与环保的态度，但是和主题的表达并不符合吧，这个例子的内在含义是为了表现低碳理念刻意要求球员穿这种衣服（由上至下），而不是球员的自己着装的体现（由下至上）)
Turn our attention to people's variable behaviors all over the world. No one could deny that polite and fervid natives you meet in the(a) foreign country will leave you so great impression that you would(might) conclude that the ideology and character of most people there are macia(?)and kind. Take Sudan for instance, a texi driver who is in hurry may stop when he saw a hurt bird lay down in front of the car. And he would go off and at leasr help this pitty bird lay aside. This is not a uncommon thing in Sudan and the mercy he showed to a bird notes us this nation's benevolent thought(我觉得这个例子比较生僻，可能是因为我对苏丹这个国家比较陌生).
Contrarily, people walking in the luxury street in Tokeyo alway have no careness(are careless) about any other matters but their heavy task and unsurvivabal(?) pressure. The rapid pace of life deprive the smile on citizen's face. This repressive atmosphere tell us the stressful life situantion in this society with the ergent desire to pursue profit.
The way people dress and behavior(应该也用动词，act) usually is the reflection of people’s thought inside. Someone choose beauty, comfort, austere of formality as their standerd in selecting the clothes and manner. As it stands, we can judge the person generaly that they may be modern, straightforward or rigid in accordence with their personal choice. Furthernore, we can tell the general chatacteristic of the whole society which constituted by every residents.

总体感觉
是不是写的时候比较匆忙？感觉有很多小的错误，字数也比较少。
全文完全赞同题目的观点，虽然在首段做了些限定（a quick understanding, a carefully analysis）,但遗憾的是在后文的阐述中没有展开。全文给人一种很绝对的感觉，举得例子也似乎过于绝对化。给人感觉对于问题的思考不是很全面。
当然，有可能你个人的观点就是如此，但是写ISSUE文章的话，我认为还是应该给出更全面的思考。