Issue 25 求拍

falloutrangerUID: 2800348

I fundamentally agree with the statement that to make things as simple as possible requires real effort and courage. However, it should be noted that there are some complex things that should not and cannot be simplified, especially not for the sake of simplification itself.

In this high-tech era of satellite communication, global mobility, mass media and the Internet, things are becoming increasingly complex. In my view, there are at least two reasons for such a tendency. Firstly, the advancement in science and technology makes things more complicated. Science students a century ago only had to study Newton's Three Laws of Motion and the theory of gravity, but today many of them have to study the theory of relativity and even quantum mechanics. Two decades ago people wrote on paper, but today everyone has to learn to use computer and relevant software for word processing. The second reason has to do with the increase of population as well as people's mobility. The world's population is in a period of fast expanding. With the help of revolutionary communication methods such as cell phone and the Internet, each individual has much more contact with others than their parents do. More communication means more blending or conflicts of ideas, thoughts and ideologies. Different opinions and ideas intertwine with each other, making people's lives far more complex and diversified.

Generally speaking, it is more difficult and requires more efforts and courage to simplify things, rather than to move in the opposite direction. In order to make things simple, one has to have the perception and insight to see beyond what things ostensibly present themselves, has to have a tight grip on the core and stem of them, and has to have a clear view of the links and chains of different things. Otherwise, they risk losing their sense of direction as well as ultimate objectives. Besides, to simplify things require people to fully understand each part of them, all the details and their relationship with each other, so that they may pick up the essential parts and piece them into a simpler but still wholesome picture.

Nevertheless, there are always exceptions to the general rules of simplification, and sometimes we risk oversimplifying things that, by nature, are complicated and ought not to be simplified. Massive and complex systematic projects such as the Manhattan Project or the Apollo Program, come immediately into mind. Both required tremendous funds, resources and manpower, as well as the wisdom and efforts of tens of thousands of greatest minds of their respective times. On the other hand, such huge projects are extreme fragile, because thousands of different departments and groups are working for it at the same time. If any part of the chain is broken, the whole project would be compromised. Therefore to simplify these projects would be to take off some indispensable parts of the chain, and the wholesomeness will inexorably be jeopardized.

To sum up, things are becoming more and more complex in this rapid changing world due to the advancement of technology, as well as the increase of population and human mobility. Thus to make things as simple as possible requires real effort. However, we should remain circumspect about the risk of oversimplification, because there are things that cannot be simplified due to their complex nature.

德芬郡奶油UID: 2843869

连个标题都没有。。。

valindUID: 2332265

看第一句就知道是哪个了

crazyjooUID: 2805124

I fundamentally agree with the statement that to make things as simple as possible requires real effort and courage. However, it should be noted that there are some complex things that should not and cannot be simplified, especially not for the sake of simplification itself.

In this high-tech era of satellite communication, global mobility, mass media and the Internet, things are becoming increasingly complex. In my view, there are at least two reasons for such a tendency. Firstly, the advancement in science and technology makes things more complicated. Science students a century ago only had to study Newton's Three Laws of Motion and the theory of gravity, but today many of them have to study the theory of relativity and even quantum mechanics. Two decades ago people wrote on paper, but today everyone has to learn to use computer and relevant software for word processing. The second reason has to do with the increase of population as well as people's mobility. The world's population is in a period of fast expanding. With the help of revolutionary communication methods such as cell phone and the Internet, each individual has much more contact with others than their parents do. More communication means more blending or conflicts of ideas, thoughts and ideologies. Different opinions and ideas intertwine with each other, making people's lives far more complex and diversified.

Generally speaking, it is more difficult and requires more efforts and courage to simplify things, rather than to move in the opposite direction. In order to make things simple, one has to have the perception and insight to see beyond what things ostensibly present themselves, has to have a tight grip on the core and stem of them, and has to have a clear view of the links and chains of different things. Otherwise, they risk losing their sense of direction as well as ultimate objectives. Besides, to simplify things require people to fully understand each part of them, all the details and their relationship with each other,(这里的意思和上面的有些重复） so that they may pick up the essential parts and piece them (piece个人觉得不大恰当）into a simpler （intergate them into a simpler one)but still wholesome picture.

Nevertheless, there are always exceptions to the general rules of simplification, and sometimes we risk oversimplifying things that, by nature, are complicated and ought not to be simplified. （这里是想表达are complicated by nature的意思么？个人不知道能否这样表达，不过建议：whose complexity are determinded as birth）Massive and complex systematic projects such as the Manhattan Project or the Apollo Program, come immediately into mind. Both （of them)required tremendous funds, resources and manpower, as well as the wisdom and efforts of tens of thousands of greatest minds of their respective times. On the other hand, such huge projects are extreme(extremely) fragile, because thousands of different departments and groups are working for it at the same time. If any part of the chain is broken, the whole project would be compromised. Therefore to simplify these projects would be to take off some indispensable parts of the chain, and the wholesomeness will inexorably be jeopardized.

To sum up, things are becoming more and more complex in this rapid changing world due to the advancement of technology, as well as the increase of population and human mobility. Thus to make things as simple as possible requires real effort. However, we should remain circumspect about the risk of oversimplification, because there are things that cannot be simplified due to their complex nature.

第三段讲简化过程难，第四段一个nevertheless然后还是讲简化难，不过是从另一个角度。貌似之间的过渡句意思表达不大好

Nevertheless, there are always exceptions to the general rules of simplification, and sometimes we risk oversimplifying things that, by nature, are complicated and ought not to be simplified

个人觉得从On the other hand的角度出发比较好，而不是这个转折

作者句子比较流畅，语法错误在下找不出来 -.-; 值得学习之

德芬郡奶油UID: 2843869

I fundamentally agree with the statement that to make things as simple as possible requires real effort and courage. However, it should be noted that there are some complex things that should not and cannot be simplified, especially not for the sake of simplification itself.

In this high-tech era of satellite communication, global mobility, mass media and the Internet, things are becoming increasingly complex. In my view, there are at least two reasons for such a tendency. Firstly, the advancement in science and technology makes things more complicated. Science students a century ago only had to study Newton's Three Laws of Motion and the theory of gravity, but today many of them have to study the theory of relativity and even quantum mechanics. Two decades ago people wrote on paper, but today everyone has to learn to use computers and relevant softwares for word processing. The second reason has to do with the increase of population as well as people's mobility. The world's population is in a period of (删除) fast expanding (expansion). With the help of revolutionary communication methods (communicative devices) such as cell phone and the Internet, each individual has much more contact with others than their parents do (had). More communication means more blending (不妥) or conflicts of ideas, thoughts and ideologies. Different opinions and ideas intertwine with each other, making people's lives far more complex and diversified.

Generally speaking, it is more difficult and requires more efforts and courage to simplify things, rather than to move in the opposite direction. In order to make things simple, one has to have the perception and insight to see beyond what things ostensibly present themselves (appear to be), has to (删除) have a tight grip on the core and stem of them (seize the essence of them), and has to
(删除) have a clear view of the links and chains of (underlying relations among) different things. Otherwise, they risk losing their sense of direction as well as ultimate objectives. Besides, to simplify things require people (people have) to fully understand each part of them, (删除) all the details and their relationship with each other, so that they may
(could) pick up the essential parts (select the essential) and piece them into a simpler but still wholesome picture (换个表达方式).

Nevertheless, there are always exceptions to the general rules of simplification, and sometimes we risk oversimplifying things that, by nature, are complicated and ought not to be simplified. Massive and complex systematic projects such as the Manhattan Project or the Apollo Program,(删除) come immediately into mind. (直接说For example, projects … Program.) `Both required tremendous funds, resources and manpower, as well as the wisdom and efforts of tens of thousands of greatest minds of their respective times. On the other hand, such huge projects are extreme fragile ( extremely susceptible), because thousands of different departments and groups are working for (on) it at the same time. If any part of the chain is broken, the whole project would be compromised (不妥). Therefore to simplify these projects would be (means) to take off some indispensable parts of the chain, and the wholesomeness will inexorably be jeopardized.

To sum up, things are becoming more and more complex in this rapid (rapidly) changing world due to the advancement of technology, as well as the increase of population and human mobility. Thus to make things as simple as possible requires real effort. However, we should remain circumspect (discreet?) about the risk of oversimplification, because there are things that cannot be simplified due to their complex nature.

表达的准确性还可以，有些句子写得比较流畅，红笔标示的部分需要注意。

论述有点问题。第一段先重复题目的后半句，然后笔锋一转，指出有时候过度简化也是不可取的。第二段说的是why things are complex，第三段说的是how to make things simple，第四段举例说明why it is not always good to make things as simple as possible。结尾段是对第一段的paraphrase。

个人觉得第二段可以写things are complex and we have to make it simple，列举原因，呼应题目的后半句；第三段可以充分阐述why it is not always good to make things as simple as possible，举正反两方面的例子；然后第四段呼应第一段。