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TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 39
TIME: 00:05:00
DATE: 2010-07-07 14:06:01

Position: There are so many serious problems in the socialization of children that result in negative effect on the destiny of society.
A: Our school education paid to little attention to the socialization of children.
B: Our home education failed to help children socializing.
C: The existing social environment is very dangerous to children who are not well socialized. (example from all kinds of news)
D: In summary, both school and home education have not yet learned how to help children to be socialized, and that are what social problems result from.

TOPIC: ARGUMENT186 - The following is a recommendation from the director of personnel to the president of Professional Printing Company.

"In a recent telephone survey of automobile factory workers, older employees were less likely to report that having a supervisor present increases their productivity. Among workers aged 18 to 29, 27 percent said that they are more productive in the presence of their immediate supervisor, compared to 12 percent for those aged 30 or over, and only 8 percent for those aged 50 or over. Clearly, if our printing company hires mainly older employees, we will increase productivity and save money because of the reduced need for supervisors."
WORDS: 28
TIME: 00:05:00

DATE: 2010-07-07 14:06:01

A: False analogy between the automobile factory workers and workers in the Professional Printing Company.
B: The author takes presenting in the work place as the only way of supervising.
C: The absence of any information of performance of other workers.

D: The recommendation leaves wasted money because of hiring older employees out of consideration.

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issue 提纲从横向来论述，三个角度比较全面              argument论证角度还可以再丰富
还可以试一下纵向哦
另外可以考虑反驳题中的前提

总：提纲可以写的丰富些，论证角度、例子，都可以写上