ISSUE144

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TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist,not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, suchas novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

When asked about who gives societysomething of lasting value, many people believe that it is the artist`scontribution not the critic`s, because the artist creates art itself and giveit new meanings. But through further discussion we can see that the work ofartist and critic are the two indispensable parts in creating the lasting valueto society.
To begin with, the artists are the ones whovoice their emotion of their lives and society out by creating art work. Art,as the most vivid and infectious form for people to express their values ofsociety and life, often not only shows us how the society is like at the moment,also plays an pioneering role of leading the new thoughts for the socialgroups. When reading the poems of Li Bai, who was a famous poet in ancientChina, we could imagine the sufferings of the people under the exploitation ofthe governing class also the undiminished struggles trying to change thesituation. Obviously, we cannot enjoy so many masterpieces and understand thesociety
through them without theseartists.
However, the critic also plays veryimportant role in helping society understand and approve the value of theartwork .As I mentioned above, art often creates new ideas and voices out thethings that no one used to say. So the artists often have to break the oldrules and explore the new areas when they are putting the new ideas intoartwork. When the society sees the new artwork, definitely everyone can havehis or her own feelings about it, no matter the feeling is strong or weak, likeor dislike. But whether the artwork have value or not and to which extent thevalue is ,can`t be judged by the common people who have no specific knowledgeof arts but only the critic who can explain and judge the artwork. A well-knownexample comes about John Keats, one of the three key figures in the secondgeneration of the Romantic Movement. During his life, his poems were notgenerally well received by the society; however, years later when the criticsreread his work and introduced his poems to the society with explanations andnotions of their value , his reputation grew and he held significant posthumousinfluence on many later poets. In short, the chance that new artwork can beviewed, accepted and even praised by the society actually comes from theintroduction made by the critic who helps the society better understands the valuesof the new artwork.
In addition, when both the society andartist find it`s hard to judge the value of coming ideas of new arts, thecritic can help making a decision by telling them some similar examples mayhave with the new art at all times and in all countries from his scientificknowledge system, or by explaining the potential meanings or functions the newart will have from the perspective of art development. This may explain whymany world famous art college masters and museum curators are all critics. Theyare no more the outsiders but the main force in art creation, helping the artistsrevising their new ideas of art development.
In conclusion, in the attempt to givesociety something of lasting value, what we need is the both of our hands thatthe artist who creates the new artwork and critic who helps introduce theartwork to the public and help artist choose the right path, rather than any ofthem.

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When asked about who gives societysomething of lasting value, many people believe that it is the artist`scontribution not the critic`s, because the artist creates art itself[感觉有点怪] and giveit new meanings[什么意思？]. But through further discussion we can see that the work ofartist and critic are the two indispensable parts in creating the lasting valueto society.
[balance立场，建议先在word里修改一下，红线太多了]

To begin with, the artists are the ones whovoice [out应该在这里吧]their emotion of their lives and society out by creating art work. Art,as the most vivid and infectious[这个词不认识，传染性的，汗，感觉还是换个词比较好，比如touching, moving这类不要又歧义的] form for people to express their values[value怎么表达？] ofsociety and life, often not only shows us how[what like?] the society is like at the moment,[but] also plays an pioneering role of leading the new thoughts for the socialgroups. When reading the poems of Li Bai, who was a famous poet in ancientChina, we could imagine [how could the rater image if he do not know who is Li Bai?]the sufferings of the people under the exploitation ofthe governing class also the undiminished struggles trying to change thesituation. Obviously[用这类词一定要小心，是不是obviously了], we cannot enjoy so many masterpieces and understand thesociety
through them without theseartists.
[1. 词组搭配上有点问题 2. 例子不是太好。本段要表达的意思不是太有说服力，并不能充分说明art的价值是什么，artist如何表现的，以及两者的联系]

However[转折了么？前面有说critic不重要？], the critic also plays [a] veryimportant role in helping society[people] [to] understand and approve the value of theartwork .As I mentioned above, art often creates new ideas and voices out thethings that no one used to say[no one太武断了]. So the artists often have to break the oldrules and explore the new areas when they are putting the new ideas intoartwork. When the society[是人看吧？people] sees the new artwork, definitely everyone can havehis or her own feelings about it, no matter the feeling is strong or weak, likeor dislike. [这句子有点乱]But whether the artwork have value or not and to which extent thevalue is ,can`t be judged by the common people who have no specific knowledgeof arts but only the critic who can explain and judge the artwork.[为什么普通人不能判断价值？] A well-knownexample comes about John Keats, one of the three key figures in the secondgeneration of the Romantic Movement. During his life, his poems were notgenerally well received by the society; however, years later when the criticsreread his work and introduced his poems to the society with explanations andnotions of their value , his reputation grew and he held significant posthumousinfluence on many later poets. In short, the chance that new artwork can beviewed, accepted and even praised by the society actually comes from theintroduction made by the critic who helps the society better understands the valuesof the new artwork.
[1. 表达的意思似乎有点过于绝对，为什么只有critics能判断art的价值呢？有的作品普通人也能受到心灵的震撼2. 关于例子，这个人我也不认识。。。既然critics能判断，为啥当时没人判断出价值呢，为什么他们判断就对呢，critics的作用还有什么？我觉得论述的似乎都不够]

In addition, when both the society andartist[这两个怎么both了。。。] find it`s [还是写it is吧，’之后不要空格的吧]hard to judge the value of coming ideas of new arts, thecritic can help making a decision by telling them some similar examples mayhave with the new art at all times and in all countries from his scientificknowledge system, or by explaining the potential meanings or functions the newart will have from the perspective of art development. This may explain whymany world famous art college masters and museum curators are all critics. Theyare no more the outsiders but the main force in art creation, helping the artistsrevising their new ideas of art development.
[这段似乎解释了critic是靠什么吃饭的，感觉在三段中没有in addition的意思。前两段讲了artist和critic，从balance的结构上讲，这段似乎要两者结合下。整体上感觉文章没有侧重点，尤其是artist的部分，没有把其作用强调出来]

In conclusion, in the attempt to givesociety something of lasting value, what we need is the[the去掉] both of our hands thatthe artist who creates the new artwork and critic who helps introduce[introducing] theartwork to the public and help artist choose the right path, rather than any ofthem.
[中规中矩]

[第一次给别人改，水平不够望见谅。语法词组我也不是很擅长，没敢改太多。结构上来说可以想想Body3写什么内容来加强你要表达的意思，不要总想着句子写长。]

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