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[i习作temp] issue51第一篇,看不下去的就别改了,求个改进思路 [复制链接]

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发表于 2010-7-9 21:48:50 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
本帖最后由 hugozhao 于 2010-7-10 10:18 编辑

51.Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.



Nowadays education reformation causes more of a stir in the public eye,especially those suggestions which tend to give our students more liberty according to their own interests. However, the more liberty offered to the students, the more individual diversity came about. For those who stick to their interests and dreams and spare no pains achieving them, liberty dose impel them to their success. On the other hand, once the students change their interests from time to time, the consequence gets just the opposite.

There is no doubt that interest is the best teacher. Without the help of interest, one loses his
intrinsic
force. In this situation, one always gets something which is not what he wants to only under great pressure. Parents compelling their children taking various sorts of courses such as instrument, dancing or drawing lessons is a perfect illustration. Children at their age of 5 or 6
are not able to form a lifelong dream or interest. What is worse, their words wound not be taken seriesly even if the children speak them out. Then comes the endless practicing, repeating, resisting, wittering and crying. Generation after generation, it is hardly
surprising to find out that every child has stepped into a specific field, but few of them becomes an master. In one word it is not difficult to figure out that both compelling and interest expedite our development, but in order to obtain a efficient and enduring power, you’d better put cultivating your interest at the first place.


It is obviously true that each man has his own interest. But why parents insist obliging their children to do what they do not like at all? Many people, me include, can not form a exhaustive cognition
towards a specific field. A violinist playing a piece of music in the concert is elegant, but can you feel the pain on his
cheeks the long-time practicing brought to him? A
athlete holding and kissing his gold medal is envious, but can you realize the re·gretfulness of millions of athlete that doing the same training but gained nothing? A CEO obtaining millions of money is envious

but can you endure the pressure that one step wrong causing the losing of the whole career? You may never know what is behind the shining outward of each field until you stepped into it. Once the possibility of quit and change your choice is available in the situation, you quit and what you have done before all come to nothing. You did not become an
violinist, and you even did not know how to play a simple piece. The vicious circle wasting most of one’s time is what the parents wound not want to see most, even at the cost of forcing their children year after year. That is the negative part of fulfill individual needs all the time.

In conclusion, to make it logically acceptable, we should compare the fulfilling and the
persistence of one’s needs and interests. Only by satisfy one’s needs on the
basis
of
persistence can the education work most efficiency.



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发表于 2010-7-9 21:51:37 |只看该作者
你都不想看的东西 还要发上来让人改 orz

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本帖最后由 睡到自然醒 于 2010-7-9 22:00 编辑

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1042201&highlight=
ps:江雪。。。
谢谢司机书,谢谢S1

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发表于 2010-7-9 21:55:59 |只看该作者
人称和时态都在不停的变。。。 读起来还是挺辛苦的。。。

另外你这个可能不符合版上修改作文的格式

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发表于 2010-7-9 22:26:35 |只看该作者
改作文不容易的 可能作者写作文花一个小时 我改作文需要一个半小时。所以我不开修改铺 只挑我看得下去的作文改。

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