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TOPIC: ARGUMENT48 - The following appeared in a newspaper article published in the country of Corpora.

"Twenty years ago, one half of all citizens in Corpora met the standards for adequate physical fitness as then defined by the national advisory board on physical fitness. Today, the board says that only one quarter of all citizens are adequately fit and suggests that spending too much time using computers may be the reason. But since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
WORDS: 357
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010/7/11 1:50:31

This argument concludes some reasons why people in the country of Corpora suffered the falling down of physical fitness as the following says: 1) it may for the reason that people use the computer too often which renders them to less healthy, then it denied itself by saying that it's not about the time using computer cause the regions where most people have the computers possess highest fitness. 2) It says that it's the low expenditures on fitness-related products that cause the falling. 3) Finally, it concludes that it's the decline of economy that impact on the less expenditure of the dwellers. All of the reasons above seem to be convincing, but actually some suspicious aspects are really obvious.

Firstly, it's hard to make a conclusion that it's or not using computer so often that make people less healthy, since there probably exists many other factors that will cause the result, such as people do less exercises, they don't eat regularly, or have some mental pressure. Then its second assertion, it denied itself by says the highest ownership of computers is not the reason. However, it cannot be concluded so fast because high ownership doesn't amount to the most frequency to use the computer, these people enjoy the highest level of fitness may just own the computers but they don't use it often.

Secondly, it's unconvincing to say that the lower expenditure on fitness-related products and services are the biggest reason of the falling of the health, since people may buy enough products related to fitness last year they don't need to buy this year, so low expenditures on fitness-related products doesn't mean they don't have that. Furthermore, there are other factors that cause the falling of the level of fitness.

Finally, the decline in the economy can't be a well-grounded reason why people lower their expenditures on fitness-related products, there are many other reasons why they don't buy products, they don't believe in the products, they choose to eat more regularly to compensate the lack of fitness related products.

In sum, it's unconvincing for the author to say that the decline of economics it's the reason why people's level of fitness declined.

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TOPIC: ISSUE73 - "In most professions and academic fields, imagination is more important than knowledge."
WORDS: 539
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/7/8 22:37:24

It's not a brilliant idea to say that when comes to the fields of most professions and academic fields, imagination takes preference to knowledge. although we all know that, imagination is so important a factor on the way of one's success which can help he to innovate and come out with original ideas, however, knowledge is the foundation of all the things that everyone want to achieve. Without the basement, no one can build a practical architecture, let alone masterpieces of building with imagination.

Firstly, in the field of arts, almost all the artists who want to make a difference in this territory have to learn the basic theory of arts, take Da vinci as an example, if he never draw thousands of eggs every day at first, how can he achieve the significant success in the field of painting during his lifetime. It's essential to know that imagination can give you many great and beautiful picture in you mind, but without knowledge you can never realize it and make it come true. and even in the field of arts which imagination is especially important we can still sense the importance of knowledge, when it come to the following fields, knowledge can be more paramount.

Secondly, as to the field of natural science, it's common sense that never will anyone innovate any theory if he don't know the knowledge of science. Dating back to the history, we can see that Newton would never create the theory of power after his imagination based on an apple if he never knew the knowledge of physics. And Albert Einstein would never create the work of relativity if he knew nothing about the fundamental knowledge about the relative principals. and now, if i'm honored to take myself as an example, it's obvious to know that i would never have a chance to stay here typing my ideas if i hadn't learned English, everything become meaningless no matter how imaginative i am.

At last, with the development of the globalization of economy, the important role of knowledge play in the field of business is the last thing we can ignore. in the world of business, money is a leading factor, the decision you make, the method you choose are all about the revenue and profit you will get or the expense you may lose. how can you just base on imagination without
any knowledge of business to make up your mind making choices. it will result in detrimental consequences, in addition to losing money, you will lose the confidence of the shareholders have in you, the trust from your employees and what's worse, it will be hard for anyone to have interest in cooperate with you any more.

In the final analysis, it's apparent that imagination is really profound factor of our success, as it can give us inspiration and bring about the world more original things, but in the final we can't achieve anything if we don't possess the fundamental knowledge about the specific fields which we are in. So it's essential for us to build a foundation of knowledge, while at the same time, use our imagination to the greatest extent to create more original things to make the world more rich and colorful.
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