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本帖最后由 雲靉玥 于 2010-9-1 17:54 编辑
10-8-31改完~
是不是有点跑题了?只写了music和art,还有其他学科的啊。
除此之外总体还不错,写的很具体,然后大概就跳出这么多错了,咱尽力了恩~加油!
It is a complicated issue that whether students should be required to study art and music besides their major courses or not. People with different background hold various opinions on it. Some claim that art and music courses are waste of time for students, while others refute that these course can bring tremendous benefits to students (放句尾比较好吧) which we(注意人称,应该是they) can't (cannot) obtain from main courses. In my point of view, I agree with the later one for several reasons.
First and foremost, I concede that art and music courses contribute to broadening our friend circles, which are of great significance to our work and life. As a Chinese proverb says, interest gathers friends. In my University, there are about one hundreds associations, including more than 50 clubs which are built up based on the same interest. These clubs provide opportunity to acknowledge fellows with(in) various majors from different provinces in our country(放在后面them那里) make friends with them and attend many interesting activities and games. To(删) take me as an example, I attend music club and meet(过去式) one of my best friends. Music provides us common topics, leads to easier communication, and thus, it strengthens our friendship. In a word, music makes my college more colorful. If I haven't had music classes before, I will lose much fun and pass the chances to meet many pretty persons.
What's more, music and art courses lead to a healthy lifestyle and help to develop a positive attitude towards difficulties. In modern society, people pay their attention mainly on earning money and leave less leisure time(删) for their families and themselves. As a result, the rates of some physical and mental diseases, such as obesity, hypertension and depression increase dramatically. Under this circumstance, music and art play an important role in improving our life quality. According to a report published by Chinese Science, people who always enjoy music, paintings or opera are less likely to get depression and insomnia. The art and music classes guide us how to judge evalue(?还是删掉吧…) perfect products and even how to compose them, tutoring us how to enjoy ourselves and keep in good mood.
From what has been discussed, we may(can) come to conclude(a conclusion) that music and art courses definitely beneficial to our work and life, because it broadens our friend circles and(,) leads to a healthy lifestyle and encourages a positive attitude to stress. For this reason, music and art classes should be promoted rather than avoided. |
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