Issue 103 多谢指教

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题目：ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."
字数：563
用时：0:40:53
日期：2010-7-22

In recent years, the issue of the value of history is so much concerned to a point where a wide discussion has been aroused. Some people maintain that the study of history would be useless if it is not apparently related to our daily lives. In taking various factors into consideration, to large extent, however, I side on the opposite of this claim and reckon that it is unreasonable to decide a study having value or not through such a utilitarian point of view

First of all, I have to concede that a study of history surely has something useful in it for human beings when it is closely related to our daily lives, for we can learn from our ancestors’ success to gain some experience, and hinder from committing a similar fallacy from their mistakes as well. Nevertheless, the relation of history and today is a complicated subject while everyone may have his own opinion. It is impossible for us as well as the history scholars to get an exact definition of the subtle "relation", so if we put too much emphasis on whether a topic is closely to us enough or not, our poor history researchers may find it a mission impossible to choose an appropriate subject to work on.

To go further, as we are not able to give a proper definition to the word "relevant", some history affairs which look quite far from our everyday lives may maintain a more significant meaning inside. Let's suppose that some scholars want to know the material of a group of ancient peoples' houses. Some people may think that they are wasting time: no matter what kind of object consists of those old-looking houses, it can be undoubtedly that we contemporary human beings would never use such strange things to build our homes. However, if we look at this debate in another way, we may admire the wisdom of our ancestors: WOW, why can't I find out that houses are able to be made by such simple materials? What crazy creativity do these guys hold! As we are encouraged by these houses, we become much more hard working than ever before in order to demonstrate that we are cleverer than our ancestors.

At last, it is unwise for us to emphasize on which is "useful" for us. As the old saying says "interesting is the best teacher". We are not easy to be tired and bored when we are playing games or chatting with our best friends. The similarity of these "useless things" is "we are interested in them". It may be a sad story, nevertheless we have no choice but to admit that most works which looks as necessities are hated by most of us: go to school on time; full-time jobs; boring experiments... impossible to count in clearly. For we have been surrounded by such a large numbers of troubles, why can't we throw all the burdens away and enjoy even a small period of time without homework, examinations and papers? After short time relaxation, we are supposed to be full of energy to devote ourselves into new tough tasks.

To sum up, a research would be valuable if the researcher is really interested in it and is willing to put an avalanche of energy and time to work for it. Our goal is to find some happiness from our sweat, that's enough.

感觉我的句型和用词似乎低级了一些，有些搭配可能也不太合理，但是个人一看那些晦涩的范文和长句就头疼，大家都说背那些有效，我也硬着头皮尝试了几次，总感觉效果一般，背了也记不住，而且本人也不是那种毅力超群的人，每天吃饭上厕所都拿着资料的日子实在难以想象，难道就要用这样的低端文笔上考场了吗。。。

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1# nijiaqin
In recent years, the issue of the value of history is so much concerned to a point where a wide discussion has been aroused. Some people maintain that the study of history would be useless if it is not apparently related to our daily lives. In taking various factors into consideration, to large extent, however, I side on the opposite of this claim and reckon that it is unreasonable to decide a study having value or not through such a utilitarian point of view. （感觉套句用的较多，不清楚会不会影响最后的得分。你还要请教一下前辈版主们。）

First of all, I have to concede that a study of history surely has something useful in it for human beings when it is closely related to our daily lives, for we can learn from our ancestors’ success to gain some experience, and hinder from committing a similar fallacy from their mistakes as well. Nevertheless, the relation of history and today is a complicated subject while everyone may have his own opinion（感觉这句有点问题，不太通顺）. It is impossible for us as well as the history scholars to get an exact definition of the subtle "relation", so if we put too much emphasis on whether a topic is closely to us enough or not, （then）our poor history researchers may find it a mission impossible（is an impossible mission）
to choose an appropriate subject to work on.

To go further, as we are not able to give a proper definition to the word "relevant", some history affairs which look quite far from our everyday lives may maintain a more significant meaning inside. Let's suppose that some scholars want to know the material of a group of ancient peoples' houses. Some people may think that they are wasting time: no matter what kind of object consists of those old-looking houses, it can be undoubtedly that we contemporary human beings would never use such strange things to build our homes. However, if we look at this debate in another way, we may admire the wisdom of our ancestors: WOW, why can't I find out that houses are able to be made by such simple materials? What crazy creativity do these guys hold! As we are encouraged by these houses, we become much more hard working than ever before in order to demonstrate that we are cleverer than our ancestors.

At last, it is unwise for us to emphasize on which is "useful" for us. As the old saying says "interesting is the best teacher". We are not easy to be tired and bored when we are playing games or chatting with our best friends. The similarity of these "useless things" is "we are interested in them"(感觉这种表达方式有问题吧？).

It may be a sad story（这一句表达什么意思？）, nevertheless we have no choice but to admit that most works which looks as necessities are hated by most of us: go to school on time; full-time jobs; boring experiments... impossible to count in clearly. For we have been surrounded by such a large numbers of troubles, why can't we throw all the burdens away and enjoy even a small period of time without homework, examinations and papers? After short time relaxation, we are supposed to be full of energy to devote ourselves into new tough tasks.（这一段貌似跑题了，和主题联系不紧密。）

To sum up, a research would be valuable if the researcher is really interested in it and is willing to put an avalanche of energy （我只找到了“an avalanche of mail似雪片般飞来的邮件”） and time to work for it. Our goal is to find some happiness from our sweat, that's enough.
（感觉你的观点应放在第一段，我看到最后才知道什么是你的观点，不知改卷人会不会从头看到尾。而且各段论点不突出，要找的。）

呵呵，至少字数够了，只要不跑题，应该还不错吧？我现在45分钟马马虎虎500+字数呢， 还不到十天~~~

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2# wdx19861106

谢谢指点，最后一段我后来看了下自己的提纲，也是不大符合，希望考试时不要出现这样的毛病。
字数的话纯属运气，这是我的第3篇I，前2篇都不到450字的。。。而且写的时候还用到金山词霸等工具的，虽然次数不是很多。。。
关于那个an avalanche of的用法是我的XDF老师提供的，意思就是a large amount of吧，如果我没记错。。
还有就是套话的问题，因为我感觉后面自己的句子都比较低端，就希望能在开头里弄的看起来工整一点了，自己也没感觉是不是过头了。如果是真的太多了的话，以后还是要改改。。