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Which is more important in professions and academic fields, imagination or knowledge? Different people have different answer. It cannot deny that both of them are important. But 没有明显的转折关系in my opinion, it depends on different fields.
There is no doubt that, for the artist, imagination is more important than knowledge. As art comes from the inside of human mind, and is made by creation, so no imagination, no art. The later generations must have own ideas about what the creation should be. No one can be a great artist only through learning how to draw, how to sing or how to write opus. Richard Wagner was famous for his revolution of opera. He broke the form of opera, give up the separate songs, and make voice be a kind of instruments play with the band. It is hard to think how he could make it done without his imagination. 这个例子中,你没有很好地说明为什么他如果没有想象力就不能做到这些,你应该进一步说明他是如何依靠想象力取得这样的成就的。It is clear that without imagination, art will no longer exist. What is more, imagination makes the garden of art colorful. For such reasons, imagination is more important than knowledge in realm of art.
Imagination is also necessary for scientist, as well as knowledge. For scientist, imagination pushes creations. Scientists should have their own imagination about what the world would be. Under the guild ? of the imagination, they can make creations to realize their image. Any study must have a total imagination which gives the scientists a clear goal for what should be born in the end. While, knowledge is equally important in science, for any creation must base on the science rule. It is knowledge that gives scientists an apt foundation to realize their imagination, and any imagination should base on the knowledge. Both imagination and knowledge are important in the field of science.
没有例证,单纯的说理受限于语言的约束,很难具有强大的说服力。
However, the importance of imagination may be less in some fields of study, for example, history. One cannot know what was happened unless they have enough evidence to show that. Knowledge, is most important when study history. From papers, drawings and traces, we can learn what the world was. Imaginations cannot give us the truth.
说明知识在历史的领域中起到更重要的地位,可以再延伸一下,充实一下本段的内容,也能够使得你整篇文章的字数达到理想。
To sum up, we can't define whether imagination or knowledge is more important without think it over onto kinds of fields of professions and academic respectively. After realize that, we should treat them discriminately when study different objects, and keep balance between the imagination and knowledge. Only through that, we can make breakthrough in the fields.
全文的逻辑比较清晰,出发的角度也比较有新意。但是行文的流畅度不够,语法上还存在一些问题。同时在证明自己观点上缺乏说服力,这跟例证的匮乏是直接联系的。通过适当的修改和充实,将成为一篇很好的文章。 |
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