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feier521UID: 109747

64 "Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it."

As social animals, people always strive to attain success to get honor and public recognition, however, once they have made it, either they are at a loss by the rapture or they will continuously make efforts to arrive at a further gain, and usually, few people know how to best use it for themselves or for even a larger scope--the whole society.

It should be admitted that it is a human nature for people to attain success in all walks of life. Students compete with each other for a higher score and gain the appraisement out of their teachers and parents; Politicians make effective and appealing propaganda and policies to get the support of the populace; and tradesman or merchants tend to tout as many as customers to make maximum profits and thus dominate the market. As we can see, people always have a tendency to gain success, to get recognition by others in all forms of society, and they also know the methods to receive their personal success. All these individual successes add a small rung to the ladder, and we can clime to the summit of human success.

However, not so many people know the quintessence of success and know how to make full use of it. Those who abruptly achieve success will immerse the happiness and joy produced by success, and lose themselves, they become astray and lose their intention and motivation to go ahead; and those who are indifferent of their successes are always discontented of what they have possessed, and tend to gain a greater success unceasingly, therefore they deprive themselves of the chances to apply success physically, spiritually or materially, they are unable to relish the outcomes, not mention to bring social interests. So these two activities in face of success are far from preferable.

Certainly, people should bear a right and active attitude to their success. What they should do is to enjoy the joy afforded by success, what is more important is that they should put their outcomes of success into practice and eventually conduce to people and the entire society. Otherwise, it should be avoided that some people attempt to cheat other's success and gain the honor and recognition in the name of themselves, or even make a potential harm to society.

In the last analysis, success, though few people know its connotation, should be fully utilized to creators themselves, people and society to achieve its deserved contribution. Any activities of wasting its spiritual and practical uses or usurping other's successes for cheaters' vested interests should be prevented.

woolfUID: 136592

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I can perceive the floating weakness in writinf an english essay

feier521UID: 109747

woolf,我的错误 怎么没给我指出来啊？
你提到的那几点，我哪一样最缺乏啊？呵呵，我觉得都有缺陷！

feier521UID: 109747

今天，回头看看自己的文章，感觉实在是很差！
语言方面：意思重复！如It should be admitted that it is a human nature for people to attain success in all walks of life 和 As we can see, people have a tendency to gain success, to get recognition in all forms of society,有些句子好像是无缘无故添加的，如 they know the methods they should apply in their fields.
思维方面：思维就是深入不下去！就是分析不够透彻！比如，说什么什么的负面影响时，老是说危害了个人拉，危害了社会啊，make a potential harm to society 重复来重复去，总是抓不住精髓！说好处时，也是这几点。bring social interests.
结尾：又是简单的列举前文观点！

我都不知道怎么有勇气贴出来了？
沮丧....

alan_903UID: 110685

继续~~~很早以前我也是在这里批评出来的