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7.24Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits
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There is undeniable that advertisement is playing a more and more important role in our daily life with extensive influence from tiny things like beverage to large purchase like house and cars, even the food we eat everyday has been partially depended by the advertisement we see. There are both advantages and disadvantages of advertisements' effect. Various advertisements bring more choice to daily life and make the lifestyle more creative, however, it account for the unhealthy eating habits of modern people as well. Advertisements often use vivid pictures in recommending new products, sometimes they also invite some famous person to say good words to certain food which makes it more convinced and misleads the customer to believe the words said in the advertisement. For example, many young teenagers appreciate the vigorous models in the fast-food advertisement and tend to believe that "convenience" is more important than anything else. When they are enjoying hamburgers and photo chips, they find themselves have already become the models in the advertisement. In this sense, advertising do attribute to people's unhealthy eating habits.
However, personally, I do not agree that advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits for the following reasons. As the competition in modern society became severe and everyone's pressure became heavier, the faster life speed forced people to ignore if the food ingredients are nutritious, only wishing to save time for doing more work. As college student, my classmate and I have experienced a lot of night stay up to finish a project, grabbing fast noodles when we felt hungry. Although we know it's bad for our health we have no better choice.
Another reason lead to these unhealthy eating habits is the change of modern people's attitude towards their daily food. In the early China, people had few access to meat and the consumption of food were limited by the government. Nowadays, with the rapidly development of China's economic, people witness a rise on their life standard and be able to enjoy much more high protein food, which in turns cause a decrease of grain and cereal. Though high protein food is necessary for our body growth, especially for children, unbalance of ingestion can also cause sub-health or even illness.
In conclusion, advertisement is one of the causes of people's unhealthy eating habits but the life speed and pressure as well as the changing attitude also account for it.




写的第一篇。烂的我都不想看第二眼。问题很多。先谢谢替我改的人了。

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个人意见，多多指教

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[今日作业]
2010.7.29
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

Every youth experience a tough time after their graduation from universities of deciding which job to take and wondering how to start their long term career. Some people believe that taking a long-term career is such a crucial decision that should be made under profoundly consideration and should not be changed once it has been made. As far as I’m concerned, it’s better for young people to try several different jobs before they take a long-term career for the following reasons.

Given that the competition in employment market has became more and more severe recently, young people found it’s more and more difficulty to be recruited by their desired job position. Trying different jobs which were seemed to be unrelated to once major at the beginning rather than staying home, worrying future, is a wiser choice for those unlucky youth in the job market. At least, the salary will enables one to cover the daily expense. It’s also possible to keep searching one’s desired job and planning career path when doing different jobs concurrently.

By trying different jobs at first is helpful to those young people who have no idea about what they are really interested in and how to begin their long-term career. Actually, this unawareness is commonness among young people nowadays. Therefore, trying different jobs before offers them plenty of time and choices to identify which field is their interest really in. In addition, there is more opportunity to meet different people from all works of society who might give young people advices for their future career selection. From their personally experience, young people can gain a better understanding of different jobs and clarify their long-term career plan.

Nonetheless, after trying various jobs, young people had better to sick to one position and develop his/her own career instead of switching jobs frequently. Only a stable job position can ensure one’s sustainable development and a long-term career. In conclusion, I’m convinced that young people should try more at the beginning but be persistent when they finally know their career direction.

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matlab007UID: 2865031

7月31日交
(09.02.21 NA)
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country.

Though Internet has played an more and more important role in modern people’s daily life, newspapers and magazines are still the major medium for populace to be acknowledged of what’s happening, even about a foreign country. Personally, I agree with the statement that newspapers and magazines are the best ways to learn about a foreign country for its pervasive, convenient and understandable.

There are thousands types of newspapers and magazines published every day which cover a wide rang of nearly all the events happened around the world. If you are interested in political events about a certain country, you can get some ideas in the daily newspaper’s international policy part. If you are curious about the folk custom about a foreign country, there are plenty of tourism magazines offering both historical and cultural information comprehensively. If you are a geographic fan, the geography magazines like National Geography will provide you with detailed introduction about a foreign country’s landscape. Therefore, no matter what you interest is about a foreign country, there are always certain newspapers or magazine can satisfied you.

Compared to Internet or television, newspaper and magazines are more convenient that you do not need any equipment to be brought with you for the information. Assuming that, you are already on your way to an foreign country, a tourism magazine will not only introduce you with general information concerning the country but also help you to kill the time, and it’s easy to buy and easy to take.
When you arrived at the foreign country, the best way to know what’s people’s life about and what’s their concerns about is buying a piece of local newspaper. And then, you will feel that you have already been a part of this country after reading it.

Moreover, the words used in newspaper and magazines are usually very simple and understandable. Thus, even you are not good at the foreign language when you reading a local newspaper, you can get some general ideas. Besides the news, there also contains some advertisements of hotels and restaurants that might be useful if you plan to have a trip to that country.

In conclusion, I agree with the statement that newspaper and magazines are the best way for people to learn a foreign country.

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) F1 q# K1 p; l# _) yThere are thousands types of newspapers and magazines published every day which cover a wide range of nearly all the events happened around the world. 1If you are interested in political events about a certain country, you can get some ideas in the daily newspaper’s international policy part. 2If you are curious about the folk custom about a foreign country, there are plenty of tourism magazines offering both historical and cultural information comprehensively. 3If you are a geographic fan, the geography magazines like National Geography will provide you with detailed introduction about a foreign country’s landscape. Therefore, no matter what you interest is about a foreign country, there are always certain newspapers or magazine can satisfied you.（这一段无懈可击了~~）
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Compared to Internet or television, newspaper and magazines are more convenient that you do not need any equipment to be brought with you for the information. Assuming that, you are already on your way to an foreign country, a tourism magazine will not only introduce you with general information concerning the country but also help you to kill the time, and it’s easy to buy and easy to take.
. R. l7 R, `( ?When you arrived at the foreign country, the best way to know what’s people’s life about and what’s their concerns about is buying a piece of local newspaper. And then, you will feel that you have already been a part of this country after reading it.
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Moreover, the words used in newspaper and magazines are usually very simple and understandable. Thus, even you are not good at the foreign language when you reading a local newspaper, you can get some general ideas. Besides the news, there also contains some advertisements of hotels and restaurants that might be useful if you plan to have a trip to that country. 这一句好像和主题没太大关系。
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In conclusion, I agree with the statement that newspaper and magazines are the best way for people to learn a foreign country.

看完你的文章，wow, 我真的没什么可以给你改的，我水平没你高。你的文章给我的感觉是，在这丰富而不冗长的400多字里，论证清晰，词语运用灵活，句式也很丰富。若要说不足，就是结尾还可改善一下，有点仓促。
复制过来居然还有颜色，太surprise了，有点小乱码，没关系的 matlab007 7.31作业.doc (29 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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高小鱼UID: 2714619

作者的文章读起来很顺畅，尤其是前面三段。修改了一些小错误，也个人认为可能可以改进的表述，仅供参考~


另外，请问作者是掐时写的吗？大概用了多少时间写和修改阿？我一般写完时间已经到了，很少有时间修改和润色...frustrated

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另外一个，作者的文章里面把internet和newspaper/magazine对立起来写，但我个人认为，internet应该是和paper对应起来的，现在很多的newspaper/magazine都有online和paper两种形式，这点不知道会不会影响评分...

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2010.7.29
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.

Every youth experience a tough time after their graduation (every 后面不要接youth, young man 或者 youngster 更好，还有 every 是一个单数概念，后面的动词和冠词要一致) from universities of deciding which job to take and wondering how to start their long term career (careers). Some people believe that taking a long-term career is such a crucial decision that should be made under profoundly（profound）consideration and should not be changed once it has been made（可以改为 remain stable once it made）. As far as I’m concerned, it’s better for young people to try several different jobs before they take a long-term career for the following reasons.
Given that the competition in (the) employment market has became (become) more and more severe recently, young people found (find) it’s more and more difficulty (more and more 换个说法,避免和前面重复，并且 difficulty 应改成difficult) to be recruited by their desired job position(s). Trying different jobs which were seemed to be unrelated to once major at the beginning rather than staying home, worrying future, is a wiser choice for those unlucky youth in the job market （这句话结构不好，改一下吧，有点罗嗦，最好rather than 前后对称，有美感）. At least, the salary will enables（时态不一致） one to cover the daily expense. It’s also possible (that also makes it possible) to keep searching one’s desired job and planning career path when doing different jobs concurrently（when 和 concurrently 连用不好）  

By trying different jobs at first is helpful to those young people who have no idea about what they are really interested in and how to begin their long-term career(careers). Actually, this unawareness (idealess) is commonness (common) among young people nowadays. Therefore, trying different jobs before offers them plenty of time and choices to identify which field is their interest really in (they are really interested in). In addition, there is more opportunity (应该用复数) to meet different people from all works of society who might give young people advices for their future career selection（复数）. From their personally（personal） experience, young people can gain a better understanding of different jobs and clarify their long-term career plan (复数).

Nonetheless, after trying various jobs, young people had better to sick to (两个to都删了) one position and develop his/her own career instead of switching jobs frequently. Only a stable job position can ensure one’s sustainable development and a long-term career. In conclusion, I’m convinced that young people should try more (diverse jobs) at the beginning but be persistent when they finally know their career direction.（persist the final choice among a thousand）

hove1111UID: 2571450

我个人觉得有点细节的作文会更好~~
时态，单复留心点~~

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1:文章很流畅，向你学习

matlab007UID: 2865031

作者的文章读起来很顺畅，尤其是前面三段。修改了一些小错误，也个人认为可能可以改进的表述，仅供参考~


另外，请问作者是掐时写的吗？大概用了多少时间写和修改阿？我一般写完时间已经到了，很少有时间修改和 ...
高小鱼 发表于 2010-8-1 19:47

说来惭愧阿。我没有很扣着时间写。约莫要半个小时多一些呢还。所以其实心里很毛阿，最近要开始抠时间了。这样自由散漫的写会出事的。小鱼的作文也很好。看得出来读了不少东西。要和小鱼互相学习。

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文中有些词和句式自己觉得不够妥当。还请组员不留情面。任何修改意见都但说无妨。

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原谅我白痴找不到怎么黏贴文件上来，只好整个复制了 囧

Free time and salary are the two major factors people concern when they choose a job（jobs). I personally deem that it’s arbitrary to say a job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time. The statement fails to take a person’s age and living standard into account, as well as both his/ her physical and mental condition. Therefore, which type is more favorable or better than the other mostly depends on one’s self need and the surroundings. 开头段很清晰，用词也还不错，赞一个

To those young adults as me, vigorous and dynamic, a job with a high salary but less vacation is more suitable since we have plenty of time and energy, pursuing our career goals. With a high salary, young adults can not only cover their daily expense but also can save money for future planning like house purchase or marriage. Besides personally consideration, the saved money （the money saved会好点）will alleviate the family burden, improve the living standard or even can be used to show one’s filial piety. （原来孝心是这么说的，嗯，长见识了）

To those who already enjoy a decent life or pay more emphasize on relax and freedom than money and material, a job with more vacation time but a low salary will be the better choice. If one does not need to worry bread and butter, without any family burden on their shoulder, being free from debts or loan, having less desire on luxury, a low salary job will probably make both ends meet. （这句长得有点混淆了，尤其是having less desire on luxury这里，建议改成两句会好点）More vacation time enables one to have more chance for trip, family gathering and exercise. To those who regard mental enjoyment and health more important than money in their lives, this type of work can perfectly satisfy their need.

Moreover, macro economical environment and the change of people’s attitude towards life can also influence the choice between these two types of working condition. People might prefer high salary under economical depression whereas favor more vacation time when they believe it is better for their health. Both of them have its advantages and disadvantages; the better one is what fit one’s self-requirement perfectly. （结尾段感觉有点仓促了）（LZ是学经济学的吗？哈哈 看到macro好亲切~）

整体来说，感觉LZ跳出了框架去写，很灵活；句式的多样性方面做得也很不错，看得出功底不错，唯一的缺憾就是感觉结尾少了点什么。

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虚心接受任何意见。