peterson 范文，5~6 f分，却只有356字

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题目
“Financial gain should be the most importantfactor in choosing a career”



Financial gain is an important considerationwhen choosing a career. Without adequate income, it is difficult to maintainshelter, food, and transportation. In this essay, however, I will argue thatfinancial gain, while important, should not be the most important factor whendeciding how to spend your professional life.
People who choose occupations that areclosely aligned with their interests, talents, and beliefs will spend theirwork time engaged in more fulfilling activity. Since one is likely to spend atleast half of one’s waking weekday hours at work, fulfillment there is crucialto one’s happiness. Numerous studies have shown that the happier a person is atwork, the happier he or she is in other aspect of life.
If a person is fulfilled by the workitself, that sense of fulfillment is an experience that can easily be renewedeach day simply by going to work. But what of people focused solely onfinancial gain? When they suffer a financial decline, their source ofsatisfaction may not be so easily renewed. Throughout the 1990’s, many people accumulated unprecedentedwealth. They may not have enjoyed their work- they may even have short-changedtheir nonwork lives to accumulate money- but at least they had the satisfactionof seeing their portfolios grow. As their wealth increased, they may haveleveraged it to borrow money for a more expensive car or home. Then the bearmarket of 2000-2003 stuck. Much of their financial gain- the very thing thatmade their work worthwhile- evaporated and left behind no sense of fulfillmentor satisfaction.

During this same time period, the people who chose personally fulfillingwork still had access to it, while people who chose financial gain alone wereleft holding decimated balance statements and perhaps crushing debt. For thesepeople renewal of their sense of fulfillment would take much longer thandriving to work the next day.

Forthese reasons, financial gain should not be the most important factor inchoosing a career. It is an end-product of work rather than integral to the dailyexperience fulfillment and better positioned to renew that sense of fulfillmentin financially difficult times.



我想说的是，这篇文章并没有很多分论点，只有一个中心观点，但是却分析的很透彻。也就是peterson 说的 strong response 和weak response 的区别。
还有一个注意的地方
开头第一段，文章就把 支持fiancial gain 的优点写出了，而不是新东方 所说的在body1 写出优点（支持A），在body2，3写出缺点（支持B）。 个人觉得新东方这样的平衡论点会有前后矛盾的嫌疑。然而，这篇文章给了我们一点新启示。
（还有就是，其实xdf教的东西有的也是很usefull的，例如，so what，分析issue方法，就可以帮助我们把问题分析的更透彻）

文章出处是https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... ;tid=184207&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D41&page=1 谢谢imong(空之追星剑)