高频issue 88

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题目：ISSUE88 - "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
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用时：00:45:00
日期：2010-8-5 下午 12:08:38

【i原文】Technologies, which was born with the first human, has witnessed the huge development of human customs and ethics.
The use of plow, marked the a^ revolution, which promote the atrcolgy^ and supply enough food, allowed our ancestors to move into warm and cozy houses from cold and wet caves.
Similarly, the widespread used automachines, marked the industrial revolution, which provide powerful impulse to almost every field, enabled the merchant
to develop business across the endless sea.
There is no doubt, as the thousands of years' hostory has told, that technologies has indispensible influence on our customs and ethics, but it do not the determant.
Steping into the the millinaire, the computers and telecommunication, has walking into every country, every city, even evry house and every room. The customs has been great changed: people make friends in ICQ or facebook, instead of face-to-face talk, people do business with the help of the computer instead of the help of experienced colleagues, people learn the news by surfing the Internet instead of reading newspapers. So does the ethics: more and more prehistory scandals, "gates", and so on, are spreading across the web which knit the whole world together.
That the fashions become
phenomena, has told us, the technologies , like a web ,combine everyone ,every thing together,all over the world at the the same time, propagate the good and bad virus along the every line of the invisible web. After all, even the web of zz^, even the flies has the option to choose to avoid it.
It is we, human, connected to the web, have the choice to get away from it and accept or reject the virus spreaded in the web. Even if technologies have more maigc power than even before, we still take the initial to face them.
Nowadays, more and more groups stand out against some elements of the technologies. Some group .Their pecular behaviors in common eyes, definitely shows our advantage to the technologies, sparking the independence of human. Whatever the technologies are, they are still the tools made by human to help ourselves. Just like other tools, we can easily pick them up when we need them, and put them in proper places, when we don't need.
However, things seem not so simple, as the complexity of human and our society. The globalization has turn our earth into earth villige. Individual choice is not completely independent, but revelant to the society,which most reflected the progress of technologies. In order to adapt to the generally accepted society, individual have to choose obey the current customs and ethics. On the contrary, the social customs and ethics also depend on the individual custom and ethic. When the old customs and ethics date out, they will be renewed by some individual refreshing customs and ethics.
In conclusion, the relationship between technologies and social customs and ethics are complex



【i修改】Technologies, which were born with the first human, has witnessed the huge development of human customs and ethics.
The use of plow, marked the agriculture revolution, which promote the agriculture and supply enough food, allowed our ancestors to move into warm and cozy houses from cold and wet caves.
Similarly, the widespread used auto machines, marked the industrial revolution, which provide powerful impulse to almost every field, enabled the merchant to develop business across the endless sea.
There is no doubt, as the thousands of years' history has told, that technologies has indispensible influence on our customs and ethics, but it do not the determent.
Stepping into the millennium, the computers and telecommunication, has walking into every country, every city, even every house and every room. The customs has been great changed: people make friends in ICQ or facebook, instead of face-to-face talk, people do business with the help of the computer instead of the help of experienced colleagues, people learn the news by surfing the Internet instead of reading newspapers. So does the ethics: more and more prehistory scandals, "gates", and so on, are spreading across the web which knit the whole world together.
That the fashions become phenomena, has told us, the technologies , like a web, combine everyone, everything together, all over the world at the same time, propagate the good and bad virus along the every line of the invisible web. After all, even the web of a spider, even the flies has the option to choose to avoid it.
It is we, human, connected to the web, have the choice to get away from it and accept or reject the virus spread in the web. Even if technologies have more magic power than even before, we still take the initial to face them.
Nowadays, more and more groups stand out against some elements of the technologies. Some group imitating Robinson, abandoning their modern life, seek their ideal in isolated island. Some group, in order recover strong body and health, giving up regular meals, follow to our ancestors’ food time .Their peculiar behaviors in common eyes, definitely shows our advantage to the technologies, sparking the independence of human. Whatever the technologies are, they are still the tools made by human to help ourselves. Just like other tools, we can easily pick them up when we need them, and put them in proper places, when we don't need.
However, things seem not so simple, as the complexity of human and our society. The globalization has turned our earth into earth village. Individual choice is not completely independent, but relevant to the society, which most reflected the progress of technologies. In order to adapt to the generally accepted society, individual have to choose obey the current customs and ethics. On the contrary, the social customs and ethics also depend on the individual custom and ethic. When the old customs and ethics date out, they will be renewed by some individual refreshing customs and ethics.
In conclusion, the relationship between technologies and social customs and ethics are so complex that we cannot summarize in a simple word, without a abstractive meaning, relevant.
（523）

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首先感觉很多句子都..读起来很奇怪.
比如Similarly, the widespread used auto machines, marked the industrial revolution, which provide powerful impulse to almost every field, enabled the merchant to develop business across the endless sea.是不是最后一个逗号前有个also啊，the same time之类的连接的会好一点？
There is no doubt, as the thousands of years' history has told, that technologies has indispensible influence on our customs and ethics, but it do not the determent.
是不是最后一个分句有点奇怪..
Stepping into the millennium, the computers and telecommunication, has walking into every country, every city, even every house and every room.
那个stepping...是想表示when stepping into ...的意思吗？
That the fashions become phenomena, has told us, the technologies , like a web, combine everyone, everything together, all over the world at the same time,
连接词啊连接词..还有phenomena不是这个意思= =
还有很多句都感觉很囧

总体感觉，用了太多some了感觉没说服力啊～～
还有整个论证体系个人觉得很奇怪，很多都是陈述的方面，而不是论证的方面……感觉都在摆事实，没在讲道理……

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非常感谢。。下面是我的回复 3# Glastium

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【提纲！！原文】Technologies, which were born with the first human, has witnessed the huge development of human customs and ethics.
The use of plow, marked the agriculture revolution, which promote the agriculture and supply enough food, allowed our ancestors to move into warm and cozy houses from cold and wet caves.
Similarly, the widespread used auto machines, marked the industrial revolution, which provide powerful impulse to almost every field, enabled the merchant to develop business across the endless sea.（前两段是背景，讲述历史上农业革命与工业革命，对人类习俗的影响）
There is no doubt, as the thousands of years' history has told, that technologies has indispensible influence on our customs and ethics, but it is not the determinant.（TS，有保留的反对）
Stepping into the millennium, the computers and telecommunication, has walking into every country, every city, even every house and every room. The customs has been great changed: people make friends in ICQ or facebook, instead of face-to-face talk, people do business with the help of the computer instead of the help of experienced colleagues, people learn the news by surfing the Internet instead of reading newspapers. So does the ethics: more and more prehistory scandals, "gates", and so on, are spreading across the web which knit the whole world together.
That the fashions become phenomena, has told us, the technologies , like a web, combine everyone, everything together, all over the world at the same time, propagate the good and bad virus along the every line of the invisible web. After all, even the web of a spider, even the flies has the option to choose to avoid it.
It is we, human, connected to the web, have the choice to get away from it and accept or reject the virus spread in the web. Even if technologies have more magic power than even before, we still take the initiative to face them.（虽然信息革命给习俗和道德带来巨大冲击，但是人们还是有选择的主动）
Nowadays, more and more groups stand out against some elements of the technologies. Some group imitating Robinson, abandoning their modern life, seek their ideal in isolated island. Some group, in order recover strong body and health, giving up regular meals, follow to our ancestors’ food time .Their peculiar behaviors in common eyes, definitely shows our advantage to the technologies, sparking the independence of human. Whatever the technologies are, they are still the tools made by human to help ourselves. Just like other tools, we can easily pick them up when we need them, and put them in proper places, when we don't need.（具体说明，上一段人的主动性的体现）
However, things seem not so simple, as the complexity of human and our society. The globalization has turned our earth into earth village. Individual choice is not completely independent, but relevant to the society, which most reflected the progress of technologies. In order to adapt to the generally accepted society, individual have to choose obey the current customs and ethics. On the contrary, the social customs and ethics also depend on the individual custom and ethic. When the old customs and ethics die out, they will be renewed by some individual refreshing customs and ethics.（全球化的复杂背景下，人的主动性和科技的冲击对社会习俗和道德的复杂关系）
In conclusion, the relationship between technologies and social customs and ethics are so complex that we cannot summarize in a simple word, without a abstractive meaning, relevant.
（523）

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首先感觉很多句子都..读起来很奇怪.
比如Similarly, the widespread used auto machines, marked the industrial revolution, which provide powerful impulse to almost every field, enabled the merchant to develop business across the endless sea.是不是最后一个逗号前有个also啊，the same time之类的连接的会好一点？（工业革命和农业革命 不在一个时代，有千年的时间距离）
There is no doubt, as the thousands of years' history has told, that technologies has indispensible influence on our customs and ethics, but it do not the determent.
是不是最后一个分句有点奇怪..（it is not the determinant）
Stepping into the millennium, the computers and telecommunication, has walking into every country, every city, even every house and every room.
那个stepping...是想表示when stepping into ...的意思吗？（分词可以表示 时间的并列）
That the fashions become phenomena, has told us, the technologies , like a web, combine everyone, everything together, all over the world at the same time,
连接词啊连接词..还有phenomena不是这个意思= =
还有很多句都感觉很囧
总体感觉，用了太多some了感觉没说服力啊～～（举的determine的反例，如果，全世界的习俗都和科技没关系，就可以直接全反对了）
还有整个论证体系个人觉得很奇怪，很多都是陈述的方面，而不是论证的方面……感觉都在摆事实，没在讲道理……（语言上，我也觉得不地道。我承认，我喜欢用长句，大家看长句都不顺眼。。我也是。）


总之，谢谢
To err is human, to forgive is divine
3# Glastium