Issue70，新手和老手，离考试还有4天！

shadow1987UID: 2605840

TOPIC: ISSUE70 - "In any profession-business, politics, education, government-those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."
WORDS: 420
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-8-6 12:41:31

In this era, scientific and technological changes leading to increasing social complexity, and it apparently seems not possible for those in power to keep pace with times forever. Hence, I totally agree with the speaker's first claim that in any profession, the leaders should step down after several years. However, I find the speaker's second conclusion that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership to some extent too extreme. In my view, whether an enterprise can attain success or not depends on subjective conditions of its outer environment and their leaders' capacity.

In the first place, with the social development in the field of politics, economy, science and technology, our lives have changed dramatically. The same thing happened in the professions including politics, education and government. For the sake of keeping pace with times, we cannot rely on one particular leader, and oppositely, the leader should be clear of this truth and step down voluntarily. For example, General George Washington, who is seen by American as the "father of our country", had been elected as the president of America for three times, however, he refused to continue to serve as president after two terms. He once remarked that (and I paraphrase): “I made numerous mistakes during my terms, and the country needs another president to correct my mistakes before they become too late to be corrected.” There is no man without defect, the new leader would not only correct the mistakes made by the former leader but also bring some new ideas and values.

However, we should be aware of the fact that revitalization through new leadership is not the warrant for a success. Success requires various conditions, and I divided these conditions into two respects, the subjective conditions and the objective conditions. Firstly, for any enterprise, the outer environment is significantly crucial and these conditions related to the destiny of the enterprise directly. For instance, in the preceding period of The American War of Independence, all sorts of domestic business in America are hindered by the British government. Under this special circumstance, the domestic enterprises could never succeed. As a result, to achieve opportunity for developing their own tea business, American people planed the Boston Tea Party which is taken as the beginning of The American War of Independence. Therefore, to have an advantageous environment is a necessary condition for a enterprise's prosperity.

On the other hand, a new leadership does not necessarily mean a good leadership, no matter in a company or in a school, the leader's capacity can be seen as the objective conditions for the whole enterprise's success. The speaker notices the fact that an enterprise could benefit from a proper leader, while fails to consider negative influence can a incompetent leader makes. Especially in some family firms, the manager prefer to choose his relatives as his successor, nonetheless, due to the limitation of choices, the successor’s capacity is under doubt. It is awfully possible that the incompetent successor would ruin the enterprise during his leadership.

To sum up, as far as I see it, those in power should step down after several years’ leadership, meanwhile, it is sagacious for them to pick a proper successor. However, all this remains cannot warrant an enterprise’s prosperity due to the unknown environment and situations they will face in the future. In short, it is unilateral to assert that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

sdfjackUID: 2809756

In this era, scientific and technological changes leading to increasing social complexity(这句话应该用lead to), and it apparently seems not possible for those in power to keep pace with times forever. Hence, I totally agree with the speaker's first claim that in any profession, the leaders should step down after several years. However, I find the speaker's second conclusion that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership to some extent too extreme. In my view, whether an enterprise can attain success or not depends on subjective conditions of its outer environment and their leaders' capacity.

In the first place, with the social development in the field of politics, economy, science and technology, our lives have changed dramatically. The same thing happened in the professions including politics, education and government. For the sake of keeping pace with times, we cannot rely on one particular leader, and oppositely, the leader should be clear of this truth and step down voluntarily. For example, General George Washington, who is seen by American as the "father of our country", had been elected as the president of America for three times, however, he refused to continue to serve as president after two terms. He once remarked that (and I paraphrase): “I made numerous mistakes during my terms, and the country needs another president to correct my mistakes before they become too late to be corrected.” There is no man without defect, the new leader would not only correct the mistakes made by the former leader but also bring some new ideas and values.

However, we should be aware of the fact that revitalization through new leadership is not the warrant for a success. Success requires various conditions, and I divided these conditions into two respects, the subjective conditions and the objective conditions. Firstly, for any enterprise, the outer environment is significantly crucial and these conditions related （relate）to the destiny of the enterprise directly. For instance, in the preceding period of The American War of Independence, all sorts of domestic business in America are hindered by the British government. Under this special circumstance, the domestic enterprises could never succeed. As a result, to achieve opportunity for developing their own tea business, American people planed the Boston Tea Party which is taken as the beginning of The American War of Independence. Therefore, to have an advantageous environment is a necessary condition for a enterprise's prosperity.

On the other hand, a new leadership does not necessarily mean a good leadership, no matter in a company or in a school, the leader's capacity can be seen as the objective conditions for the whole enterprise's success.(两句主句应该用个连词吧) The speaker notices the fact that an enterprise could benefit from a proper leader, while fails to consider negative influence can a incompetent leader makes. Especially in some family firms, the manager prefer（s） to choose his relatives as his successor, nonetheless, due to the limitation of choices, the successor’s capacity is under doubt. It is awfully possible that the incompetent successor would ruin the enterprise during his leadership.

To sum up, as far as I see it, those in power should step down after several years’ leadership, meanwhile, it is sagacious for them to pick a proper successor. However, all this remains cannot warrant an enterprise’s prosperity due to the unknown environment and situations they will face in the future. In short, it is unilateral to assert that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. 结构上，承认新领导的作用——客观环境的重要——新领导不一定能成功，个人觉得最好能够后面两部分对换一下，结构会更加清晰。一个问题是，长句子往往会出现缺乏连词的错误，有时结构也不太清晰。其他方面都不错。
加油~

shadow1987UID: 2605840

2# sdfjack

感谢你的修改，我把一些思考记录如下：

In this era, scientific and technological changes leading to increasing social complexity(这句话应该用lead to)1：my fault，依稀记得ETS官方范文第一篇第一段写了个类似的句子，我没学对, and it apparently seems not possible for those in power to keep pace with times forever. Hence, I totally agree with the speaker's first claim that in any profession, the leaders should step down after several years. However, I find the speaker's second conclusion that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership to some extent too extreme. In my view, whether an enterprise can attain success or not depends on subjective conditions of its outer environment and their leaders' capacity. In the first place, with the social development in the field of politics, economy, science and technology, our lives have changed dramatically. The same thing happened in the professions including politics, education and government. For the sake of keeping pace with times, we cannot rely on one particular leader, and oppositely, the leader should be clear of this truth and step down voluntarily. For example, General George Washington, who is seen by American as the "father of our country", had been elected as the president of America for three times, however, he refused to continue to serve as president after two terms. He once remarked that (and I paraphrase): “I made numerous mistakes during my terms, and the country needs another president to correct my mistakes before they become too late to be corrected.” There is no man without defect, the new leader would not only correct the mistakes made by the former leader but also bring some new ideas and values. However, we should be aware of the fact that revitalization through new leadership is not the warrant for a success. Success requires various conditions, and I divided these conditions into two respects, the subjective conditions and the objective conditions. Firstly, for any enterprise, the outer environment is significantly crucial and these conditions related （relate）2：my fault to the destiny of the enterprise directly. For instance, in the preceding period of The American War of Independence, all sorts of domestic business in America are hindered by the British government. Under this special circumstance, the domestic enterprises could never succeed. As a result, to achieve opportunity for developing their own tea business, American people planed the Boston Tea Party which is taken as the beginning of The American War of Independence. Therefore, to have an advantageous environment is a necessary condition for a enterprise's prosperity. On the other hand, a new leadership does not necessarily mean a good leadership, no matter in a company or in a school, the leader's capacity can be seen as the objective conditions for the whole enterprise's success.(两句主句应该用个连词吧) 3：是说No matter前加个and吗？回头看看我觉得应该断句了，完全是两个句子嘛，No matter后面独立成句。The speaker notices the fact that an enterprise could benefit from a proper leader, while fails to consider negative influence can a incompetent leader makes. Especially in some family firms, the manager prefer（s） to choose his relatives as his successor, nonetheless, due to the limitation of choices, the successor’s capacity is under doubt. It is awfully possible that the incompetent successor would ruin the enterprise during his leadership. To sum up, as far as I see it, those in power should step down after several years’ leadership, meanwhile, it is sagacious for them to pick a proper successor. However, all this remains cannot warrant an enterprise’s prosperity due to the unknown environment and situations they will face in the future. In short, it is unilateral to assert that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. 结构上，承认新领导的作用——客观环境的重要——新领导不一定能成功，个人觉得最好能够后面两部分对换一下，结构会更加清晰。一个问题是，长句子往往会出现缺乏连词的错误，有时结构也不太清晰。其他方面都不错。 加油~ 好建议！把讲领导的正反内容放在一起，然后第三个body说客观环境，这样结构更紧凑，清晰！