【10G10Hawk】小组8月9日任务——Issue11

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11"All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems." 互改顺序：（后改前） 1-2-9 11-6 互改

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TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 661
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/8/9 22:27:52

As we are now in a age that developments come up with a pile of side effects everyday, human beings wonder that if there really exists a sollution can be used to reduce the harm brought by the fast development. And at this time that someone suggests a blobal university designed to engage student in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems could be established. While it would be a big event if in effect, I doubt that whether it could just be brought out as simple as it says and even if this idea comes true, the world's most persistent social problems could eventually be solved.

At the outset, I have to admit that a global university would definitely pick up a host of current affairs. Firsly, students come from all over the world could make their peace with their classmates who may have different believes, different level of finance and the like. Under this circumstance, they could figure out a multitude of problems which indeed bother our daily lives. For instance, the war between Barkestance and Irap, as we all know that blood spread out many years in those two lands and children in there are out of educated. What they do everyday is to pick up their guns and shot what their so called enermies. While all these tragedies are in the light of the different regions, the global university's students may come up with some kinds of sollutions according to the discussion among the students who hold different regions. In addition, cultures are shared in this university while a commen ground may easier to be reached.

However, if all nations help support the development of a global uniersity, there would come up with a question that from which country, some one become the president. Before a global university be built up, countries especially those developed countries would probably make a great argument about who would be the headmaster. We would know that actually, which country's professor become the president means that which country would hold the most effective right of speaking. Thus in this case, this global university may not so sure to be truly fair. We can't prevent one thing that some nation intends to get the chair of president in order to earn more profits that only contribute to it own. And it may take place that even some nation get the chair of president by treaten way or some other ways bad for the peace of our world which indeed cause a coutereaction.

What's more, how we select the students? What is the princeple for selecting students under a porblematic circumstance that the population, level of finance, IQ and EQ are totally different in such many nations? Can there really be a fairness in this globle university? For example, since it is a global university, how we to make a deal with the different numbers of the students come from different countries? If the population of some nation is far more than others', should it be allowed to let more students of this country go to the global university? And if this rule is passed, is there any possibility that this nation would have a higher effective right of speaking in discussing some problems existing in our world? With these serious of questions, how we could reach an agreement of all nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.

In sum, it is really a fantastic concept of building a global university. But since this construct is something global, we could never agree or disagree by simple consideration. The governments from countries all over the world should think twice before they make the decission such the things about how to decide who to attend the university. In this case could we find out the answer about whether we need to have a global university.

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As we are now in an age that developments come up with a pile of side effects, human beings wonder that if it really exists a solution can be used to reduce the harm brought by the fast development. And at this time that someone suggests a global university designed to engage student in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems could be established. While it would be a big event if in effect, I doubt that whether it could just be brought out as simple as it says and even if this idea comes true, the world's most persistent social problems could eventually be solved.

At the outset, I have to admit that a global university would definitely pick up a host of current affairs. Firstly, students come from all over the world could make their peace with their classmates who may have different believes, different financial circumstances and the like. Under this circumstance, they could figure out a multitude of problems which indeed bother our daily lives. For instance, as we all know that blood spread out the war between Pakistan and Israel, and many years past those two lands still living in conflicts and children there are out of educated. What they do in everyday is to pick up their guns and shot what their so called enemies. While all these tragedies are in the light of the different regions, the global university's students may come up with some kinds of solutions according to the discussion among the students who hold different regions. In addition, the depletion of atmospheric ozone, or green-house effect, or space exploration may all be solved out under a mix of cultures from all over the world. Cultures are shared in this university while a common ground and a consensus may easier to be reached.

However, if all nations help support the development of a global university, a question arises that from which country some person would become the president. Before a global university be built up, countries especially those developed countries would probably make a great argument about who would be the headmaster. We would know that actually, which country's professor become the president means that which country would hold the most effective right of speaking. Thus in this case, this global university may not so sure to be truly fair. We can't prevent one thing that some nation intends to get the chair of president in order to earn more profits that only contribute to it own. And it may take place that even some nation get the chair of president by threaten way or some other ways bad for the peace of our world which indeed cause a counteraction.

What's more, how we select the students? What is the principle for selecting students under a problematic circumstance that the population, level of finance, IQ and EQ are totally different in such many nations? Can there really be a fairness in this global university? For example, since it is a global university, how we to make a deal with the different numbers of the students come from different countries? If the population of some nation is far more than other nations’, should it be allowed to let more students of this country go to the global university? And if this rule is passed, is there any possibility that this nation would have a higher effective right of speaking in discussing some problems existing in our world? With these serious of questions, how we could reach an agreement of all nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.

In sum, it is really a fantastic concept of building a global university. But since this construct is something global, we could never agree or disagree by simple consideration. The governments from countries all over the world should think twice before they make the decision such the things about how to decide who to attend the university. In this case could we find out the answer about whether we need to have a global university.

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TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 661
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010/8/9 22:27:52

As we are now in an age that developments come up with a pile of side effects, human beings wonder that if it really exists a solution can be used to reduce the harm brought by the fast development. And at this time that someone suggests a global university designed to engage student in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems could be established. While it would be a big event if in effect, I doubt that whether it could just be brought out as simple as it says and even if this idea comes true, the world's most persistent social problems could eventually be solved.

At the outset, it is fair to state that a global university would have the potential to solve a number of tough issues of global scale. Students from all over the world, surrounded by different beliefs, different financial circumstances of their classmates, would feel more free to tackle social or environmental problems with an objective approach. Through culture sharing and compromising, accord of opinions towards global issues such as ozone protection and space exploration may be reached more easily and with more efficiency.


Take the conflict between Pakistan and Israel for example. The decade’s long battle between the two countries left both with heavy losses, militarily and financially. Hatred and misunderstanding leads to a vicious circle, leaving the people of these two nations suffering every day. Under this circumstance, a global university, in which the next generation could sit down and learn more about each other’s culture and opinions, appears to be the only place a breakthrough would come about. The university could not only serve as the sanctuary of knowledge, but also as the seedbed of understanding and a more harmonious world.

However, if all nations help support the development of a global university, a question arises that from which country the president would come from. Before a global university be built up, countries especially those developed countries would probably make a great argument about who would be the headmaster. We would know that actually, which country's professor become the president means that which country would hold the most effective right of speaking. Thus in this case, this global university may not so sure to be truly fair. We can't prevent one thing that some nation intends to get the chair of president in order to earn more profits that only contribute to its own. And it may take place that even some nation get the chair of president by threaten way or some other ways bad for the peace of our world which indeed cause a counteraction.

What's more, how we select the students? What is the principle for selecting students under a problematic circumstance that the population, level of finance, IQ and EQ are totally different in such many nations? Can there really be a fairness in this global university? For example, since it is a global university, how can we decide how many students from each country can come to this university? If the population of some nation is far more larger than other nations’, should it be allowed to let more students of this country go to the global university? And if so, we could not ignore the possibility that nations with larger population would have higher power of discourse in the university, which would make the decisions made there less objective and trustworthy. With these serious of questions, how we could reach an agreement of all nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems.

In sum, it is really a fantastic concept of building a global university. But since this construct is something global, we could never agree or disagree by simple consideration. The governments from countries all over the world should think twice before they make the decision such the things about how to decide who to attend the university. In this case could we find out the answer about whether we need to have a global university.

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TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 539          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2010/8/9 21:49:52

There has long been an idea in society that all nations on earth help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. Although the purpose of the global university is meaningful, but there are plenty of difficulties to establish such.

Nowadays, social problems have played an important role in the world's stage. When realizing that the skies are no longer blue, animals in nature do not live in peace and safety any more and thousands of hundreds of children are still crying because of the famine, people begin to ask themselves who should pay for those? The answer is the whole human being. Seeing from this aspect, I consider that establishing a global university is sure to be an effective way to draw all elites' eye worldwide to solvingng the urgent social problems.

There are lots of advantages on a global university. Once there is a global university, excellent college desirable students will gather together, communicate with other culture and exchange their own opinion on the global issues. Under such situation, they can gain the best academic education with equal chance, and enjoy the atmosphere where everyone has the responsibility to save our earth. There will be no national and religion boundry, and what is more important is their purpose is only one---to make the best use of themselves to solve the enduring social problems. From the faculty's aspect, a leading effect, that new and creative solution to the problems will come into being, of mixing ideas and thoughts thoroughly will be the main working in the global university.

However, the development of a global university is a utopia in the present world. Firstly, it is impossible to ask every nation to agree this program. Lots of undeveloped countries are unable to feed their citizen, let alone to invent money on the establishment of such a university which seems of no use to them. Nevertheless, even if all nations come to a consensus, there must be some countries that share big stocks in the inventment. So there comes the question--which country to control the main management of the global university? Facing the chance of get educated, everyone deserve equally. Powerful countries once sit at the spurn, whether they will teach the students on the interest of their own countries and citizen, which is the last situation that we want to see. Thus, in the process of constructing of a global university, continuous conflicts and obstacles should be expected by all nations.

Actually, there have been a lot of university in the world acting like a global university, which addmit international students and being active in the program that helping the young harbingers to join in global issues, such as virtual United Nations. In my humble, as long as all nations do not refuse to send their best elite to the world stage and admit that the social problems are the most emergent issue nowadays, a lot of great universities could do the same work as a global university.

In summary, the global university is a good goal for the whole world to work. Do not worry this pattern, just hence international communication and do the best.

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It is meaningful for world nations to cooperate with each other in establishing an international university where teachers and students form all over the world work together for the good of all nations. As an old saying goes, there is no boundary in science.理论论据，超好，我记下哦！\(^o^)/~ Incontrovertibly, science concerning the pressing global problems should be one area of a global university focus in. Beside science, a global university bringing in mutual understanding keeps world peace and lends a hand to the people who are in need of help.

Science affect people's life from all over the world and those areas where highly concerned with urgent problems in the world should be one major of the global university. For example, cancer has threatened human as the third killer in a report from United State. Although American research institutes accumulate tens of thousands of excellent researchers, expertise disperse in developed countries, like German, Japan, and England. A global university which can employ talent scientists from different nationalities might be second to none the in world's universities. Moreover, these professors could be easy to discuss problems together.【这句话有点中式，教授是不会简单的，改成it could be easy for these professors...】 I concede that there several world wide conference hold every year which provides a stage for scientists to exchange their understanding of cutting-page research, but a global university which could develop as a basis of preeminent scientist may serve as a perfect communicating stage. 从全文来看，似乎这段的帮助不大，只说了科学和科学家，但是全球大学不单单只有科学家，主要还是在对学生的教育上，培养这些学生来解决社会问题

Now it is very difficult to solve some global problems because lack of restrictions of a international standards. The leading problem is the damage of ozone layer and the global warming. Concerned with some abnormal climate in recent years, people should set alarm about the environmental protection. However, the concepts of protecting the environment haven't promulgated wide yet. An effective way to solve these problems is to promote mutual understanding and cooperation among the youth world wide.
A global university can cultivate perspective leaders from the countries where the protection of environment overrides. Thus, the global university helps some countries to reach higher standard and result in potential influence to those countries.
说了全球大学的好处是把，但是真正分析好处的话才倒数三句，这段本来就不长，很难说服读者，全球大学对解决这些问题的帮助真的很大，加上前一段说科学家，没有将科学家和这些好处联系起来。


Therefore, one of the global university's mainly goal is to help those in need for help. The conflicts and wars are another critical problem that 【needs people educated aim to maintain the peace of the world.这句话没明白意思，以教育的目的？】 Sometimes American plays an role in maintain the peace of the world, but a group of specialists who consist of different nationalities to solve these problems would be disinterest and justice. The premise is that they have reached a principle without considering the profit of their own counties. They may become a speaker who travels around the world giving speeches to persuade people to do something or not to do something. It seems promising, but remains a hard way to do. The peace of the world is still a dream that far from reality.
一些建造的困难

We can start from one global university to two or more, because the designed future of a global university is promising. A global university concerned with global problems of environment and peace hold diversity in constitutions, result in creative ideas.

谦，你的文章我已经改不出什么问题了，条例清晰，语言也很好~就是我感觉你的分析比较少，你比较擅长举例子和阐述，其实issue也需要argu那样的分析，得让读者信服你的观点，你这样去写会感觉有很多东西要分析给读者听

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It is meaningful for world nations to cooperate with each other in establishing an international university where teachers and students form all over the world work together for the good of all nations. As an old saying goes, there is no boundary in science. Incontrovertibly, science concerning the pressing global problems should be one area of a global university focus in. Beside science, a global university bringing in mutual understanding keeps world peace and lends a hand to the people who are in need of help.

Science affect people's life from all over the world and those areas where highly concerned with urgent problems in the world should be one major of the global university. For example, cancer has threatened human as the third killer in a report from United State. Although American research institutes accumulate tens of thousands of excellent researchers, expertise disperse in developed countries, like German, Japan, and England. A global university which can employ talent scientists from different nationalities might be second to none the in world's universities. Moreover, these professors could be easy to discuss problems together. I concede that there several world wide conference hold every year which provides a stage for scientists to exchange their understanding of cutting-page research, but a global university which could develop as a basis of preeminent scientist may serve as a perfect communicating stage.

Now it is very difficult to solve some global problems because lack of restrictions of a international standards. The leading problem is the damage of ozone layer and the global warming. Concerned with some abnormal climate in recent years, people should set alarm about the environmental protection. However, the concepts of protecting the environment haven't promulgated wide yet. An effective way to solve these problems is to promote mutual understanding and cooperation among the youth world wide.
A global university can cultivate perspective leaders from the countries where the protection of environment overrides. Thus, the global university helps some countries to reach higher standard and result in potential influence to those countries.


Therefore, one of the global university's mainly goal is to help those in need for help. The conflicts and wars are another critical problem that needs people educated aim to maintain the peace of the world. Sometimes American plays an role in maintain the peace of the world, but a group of specialists who consist of different nationalities to solve these problems would be disinterest and justice. The premise is that they have reached a principle without considering the profit of their own counties. They may become a speaker who travels around the world giving speeches to persuade people to do something or not to do something. It seems promising, but remains a hard way to do. The peace of the world is still a dream that far from reality.

We can start from one global university to two or more, because the designed future of a global university is promising. A global university concerned with global problems of environment and peace hold diversity in constitutions, result in creative ideas.

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It is meaningful for world nations to cooperate with each other in establishing an international university where teachers and students form all over the world work together for the good of all nations. As an old saying goes, there is no boundary in science. Incontrovertibly, science concerning the pressing global problems should be one area of a global university focus in. Beside science, a global university bringing in mutual understanding keeps world peace and lends a hand to the people who are in need of help.

Science affect people's life from all over the world and those areas where highly concerned with urgent problems in the world should be one major of the global university. For example, cancer has threatened human as the third killer in a report from United State. Although American research institutes accumulate tens of thousands of excellent researchers, expertise disperse in developed countries, like German, Japan, and England. A global university which can employ talent scientists from different nationalities might be second to none the in world's universities. Moreover, it could be easy for these professors to discuss problems together. I concede that there several world wide conference hold every year which provides a stage for scientists to exchange their understanding of cutting-page research, but a global university which could develop as a basis of preeminent scientist may serve as a perfect communicating stage.

Now it is very difficult to solve some global problems because lack of restrictions of an international standards. The leading problem is the damage of ozone layer and the global warming. Concerned with some abnormal climate in recent years, people should set alarm about the environmental protection. However, the concepts of protecting the environment haven't promulgated wide yet. An effective way to solve these problems is to promote mutual understanding and cooperation among the youth world wide. A global university can cultivate perspective leaders from the countries where the protection of environment overrides. Thus, the global university helps some countries to reach higher standard and result in potential influence to those countries.
说了全球大学的好处是把，但是真正分析好处的话才倒数三句，这段本来就不长，很难说服读者，全球大学对解决这些问题的帮助真的很大，加上前一段说科学家，没有将科学家和这些好处联系起来。

Therefore, one of the global university's mainly goal is to help those in need for help. The conflicts and wars are another critical problem that 【needs people educated aim to maintain the peace of the world.这句话没明白意思，以教育的目的？】 Sometimes American plays an role in maintain the peace of the world, but a group of specialists who consist of different nationalities to solve these problems would be disinterest and justice. The premise is that they have reached a principle without considering the profit of their own counties. They may become a speaker who travels around the world giving speeches to persuade people to do something or not to do something. It seems promising, but remains a hard way to do. The peace of the world is still a dream that far from reality.
一些建造的困难

We can start from one global university to two or more, because the designed future of a global university is promising. A global university concerned with global problems of environment and peace hold diversity in constitutions, result in creative ideas.

谦，你的文章我已经改不出什么问题了，条例清晰，语言也很好~就是我感觉你的分析比较少，你比较擅长举例子和阐述，其实issue也需要argu那样的分析，得让读者信服你的观点，你这样去写会感觉有很多东西要分析给读者听

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现在确实有些问题是需要各个国家合作才能解决（war and peace，pollution and economic crisis）
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但是全球性的大学，由于各个国家所面对的最大问题不同，发展程度不同，能做的贡献不同，所以很难统一意见
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即使同一了，也由于这些问题是来自politic decision 和各国自己的利益而很难考学生解决。
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而且，现在的Internet和phone line可以很轻松的把各国的高层和科研人员联系在一起。联合大学最大的优势也在消失

As the development of the technologies, the nations in the earth are connected with each other more closely than ever before. And【delete】 this connection result in some big problems, which cannot be solved by only one or two countries. 有点puzzle me，你在讲是technology cause connection, and connection can cause problem,it is not easy to understand here, Thus some people claim that all nations should help support the development of a global university. Even sounds plausible觉得用在这里不准确额，翻译一下是“即使听起来，貌似可信的”不如把该词换为完全肯定的好, this plan should be scrutinize more carefully from whether this global university can focus on these problems, whether the global can tackle with these problems, and is it【whether it is】 necessary to build such a global university.

It is obviously true that without the cooperation of all nations, the problems, like war and peace, pollution and economic crisis, are impossible to be solved. For instance, as we know, many countries only focus on the pollutions happened on their lands and neglect all the other pollutions caused by them. If every nation does so, who should have the responsibility for the pollution in Arctic and Antarctic? The answer is all the nations should take into account建议修改，很vague. The Global Warming influences the whole earth instead of one or two countries. And it is impossible to solve the Global Warming by only a few countries, if other countries keep releasing carbon dioxide. In this aspect, the global university may help, as it can provide a platform for all the countries to communicate with each other by providing more time for the teachers and students to understand other countries' cultures and situation.

However, the different situations and technological, economic and political power between developed countries and developing countries will definitely lead to conflicts and obstacle the function of global university话说这里似乎是病句，因为obstacle只能做名词. For example, the people from Africa will not interested in any other problems except the starvation and poor medical system in their country can be changed first这句有两个谓语，且不太明白你在说什么, while student and teachers form Europe, America or other developed country focus their attention to other pollution or economic crisis. Such big gap between these two people will prevent them communicating with each other and the purpose of the global university will not be guaranteed, as human nature make us only want to talk with people who have the same purpose as us. What’s more? How should this global university be supported? The developing countries do not have the ability to give too much money to support this university and thus the developed countries must spend more money than the developing countries. If so, how can we ensure this university will not be guided by the developed countries and serve for these nations?

Even if the fairness of the global university is convincing【ensured】 and all the staff and students can focus on the same problem, they can no little to solve these problems.在说什么？ These persistent social problems always link with the conflicts caused by the values systems of different countries. As these countries will all put their profits to the first place, it is nearly impossible to fit all the countries. And the students in the global university are not those people in power so they cannot change these phenomena even if they find a way to fit every student’s opinion. Like the war in Iraq, if the president of America and other countries refuse to withdrawal, the students have no means to force them to do so. Then the plan make by them become useless.

Furthermore, with the development of technologies, the whole world is knitted in a web supported by the Internet and phone lines. Those people who can make the final decision and those experts who have studies these problems for several years now can easily communicate with others by these new technologies. So the platform that may be provided by the global university is becoming less important and may finally fade out as time goes by.

To sum up, the global university may help to solve the world's most persistent social problems, but the practicability of the global university cannot be proved. And we may solve these problems from technical means, which is more efficient and effective, instead of building a global university.

屡次见到你用and开头一个句子，这样不如不用

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TOPIC: ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
WORDS: 670
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-8-9 16:43:14

As the development of the technologies, the nations in the earth are connected with each other more closely than ever before. And this connection result in some big problems, which cannot be solved by only one or two countries. Thus some people claim that all nations should help support the development of a global university. Even sounds plausible, this plan should be scrutinize more carefully from whether this global university can focus on these problems, whether the global can tackle with these problems, and is it necessary to build such a global university.

It is obviously true that without the cooperation of all nations, the problems, like war and peace, pollution and economic crisis, are impossible to be solved. For instance, as we know, many countries only focus on the pollutions happened on their lands and neglect all the other pollutions caused by them. If every nation does so, who should have the responsibility for the pollution in Arctic and Antarctic? The answer is all the nations should take into account. The Global Warming influences the whole earth instead of one or two countries. And it is impossible to solve the Global Warming by only a few countries, if other countries keep releasing carbon dioxide. In this aspect, the global university may help, as it can provide a platform for all the countries to communicate with each other by providing more time for the teachers and students to understand other countries' cultures and situation.

However, the different situations and technological, economic and political power between developed countries and developing countries will definitely lead to conflicts and obstacle the function of global university. For example, the people from Africa will not interested in any other problems except the starvation and poor medical system in their country can be changed first, while student and teachers form Europe, America or other developed country focus their attention to other pollution or economic crisis. Such big gap between these two people will prevent them communicating with each other and the purpose of the global university will not be guaranteed, as human nature make us only want to talk with people who have the same purpose as us. What’s more? How should this global university be supported? The developing countries do not have the ability to give too much money to support this university and thus the developed countries must spend more money than the developing countries. If so, how can we ensure this university will not be guided by the developed countries and serve for these nations?

Even if the fairness of the global university is convincing and all the staff and students focus on the same problem, they can no little to solve these problems. These persistent social problems always link with the conflicts caused by the values systems of different countries. As these countries will all put their profits to the first place, it is nearly impossible to fit all the countries. And the students in the global university are not those people in power so they cannot change these phenomena even if they find a way to fit every student’s opinion. Like the war in Iraq, if the president of America and other countries refuse to withdrawal, the students have no means to force them to do so. Then the plan make by them become useless.

Furthermore, with the development of technologies, the whole world is knitted in a web supported by the Internet and phone lines. Those people who can make the final decision and those experts who have studies these problems for several years now can easily communicate with others by these new technologies. So the platform that may be provided by the global university is becoming less important and may finally fade out as time goes by.

To sum up, the global university may help to solve the world's most persistent social problems, but the practicability of the global university cannot be proved.
And we may solve these problems from technical means, which is more efficient and effective, instead of building a global university.






1．
现在确实有些问题是需要各个国家合作才能解决（war and peace，pollution and economic crisis）
2．
但是全球性的大学，由于各个国家所面对的最大问题不同，发展程度不同，能做的贡献不同，所以很难统一意见
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即使同一了，也由于这些问题是来自politic decision 和各国自己的利益而很难考学生解决。
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而且，现在的Internet和phone line可以很轻松的把各国的高层和科研人员联系在一起。联合大学最大的优势也在消失

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There has long been an idea in society that all nations on earth should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. Although the purpose of the global university is meaningful, there are plenty of difficulties to establish such.【有困难，那应不应该建立呢？这是个should型号的issue，最好给出自己的观点】

Nowadays, social problems have played an important role in the world's stage. When realizing that the skies are no longer blue, animals in nature do not live in peace and safety anymore and thousands of hundreds of children are still crying because of the famine, people begin to ask themselves who should pay for those? The answer is the whole human being. Seeing from this aspect, I consider that establishing a global university is sure to be an effective way【为什么GU是个effective way？】 to draw all elites' eye worldwide to solving the urgent social problems. 【好段落】

There are lots of advantages on a global university. Once there is a global university, excellent college desirable students will gather together, communicate with other culture and exchange their own opinion on the global issues. Under such situation, they can gain the best academic education with equal chance【没看出来前面说的现象能够导致他们得到最好的教育和平等记得机会。】, and enjoy the atmosphere where everyone has the responsibility to save our earth. There will be no national and religion boundary【why？】, and what is more important is their purpose is only one---to make the best use of them to solve the enduring social problems. From the faculty's aspect, a leading effect, that new and creative solution to the problems will come into being, of mixing ideas and thoughts thoroughly will be the main working in the global university.【不错~】

However, the development of a global university is a utopia in the present world. Firstly, it is impossible to ask every nation to agree this program. Lots of undeveloped countries are unable to feed their citizen, let alone to invent money on the establishment of such a university which seems of no use to them. Nevertheless, even if all nations come to a consensus, there must be some countries that share big stocks in the investment. So there comes the question--which country to control the main management of the global university? Facing the chance of get educated, everyone deserve equally. Powerful countries once sit at the spurn, whether they will teach the students on the interest of their own countries and citizen, which is the last situation that we want to see.【没明白。。。 sit at the spurn, whether xxx, which xxx是什么意思？】
Thus, in the process of constructing of a global university, continuous conflicts and obstacles should be expected by all nations. 【段末只说有持续的问题会出现，没有说这是个utopia是不可能实现的。】

Actually, there have been a lot of university in the world acting like a global university, which admit international students and being active in the program that helping the young harbingers to join in global issues, such as virtual United Nations. In my humble, as long as all nations do not refuse to send their best elite to the world stage and admit that the social problems are the most emergent issue nowadays, a lot of great universities could do the same work as a global university.【没有例子。那些大学？他们怎么像Global University？又怎么解决了社会问题？】

In summary, the global university is a good goal for the whole world to work. Do not worry this pattern, just hence international communication and do the best.【太简单了吧。没有总结，也没有升华。。。】

sharonyeUID: 2862009

With the globlization of economy, so many other problems, such as poverty, starvation, education, recial conflicts etc. are becoming increasingly hot topic among people around the world, which inplys they are also globlizing. Thus, something must be done to stop this tendency and solve these social problems. So I totally agree we should establish a certain institution to enroll some people specializing in the problems and countries all over the world are all responsible for this process. However, whether the institution is a globle university, or whether the plan is practical is still open to doubt.
As we all know, university is a place for students to learn some knowledge to prepare for their future. Also, in this way, they can be taught some persistent social problems. But will these problems be accepted? Although university students have already grown up, mostly in their age, should their minds be mature enough, too, to understand so complex the society. It is not to deny most students in university, almost aged from 18 to 22 (or 27 if he/she continue his/her PHD), are aggressive, which make them cannot view a problem in an objective perspective. When faced with some social problems, they are more likely to deal with them without a further thought, and then make mistakes. For example, if a student encountered a religious defiance, it must
not be easy easy for him to calm down, pretending nothing had happened, he may show his different opinion in a nit friendly way even in class, worsely, he may fight and leave the school. But if he/her cannot control his/her emotion like this, how can he/her deal with complex problems, more complex than this kind of thing? Universities have duty to help students to be mature, but should by a relatively moderate way. Otherwise, students are likely to lose their direction, even go to the opposite.
What’s more, we need to take into account whether university students have the ability to deal with those persistent social problems. After all, they are too young to have the ture experience, the only way can they get some information is through internet or simply books. Again, as a result, their thoughts are not comprehensive or profound, although they are active enough to come up with new ideas, to meet the need of reality.
So as far as I am concerned, it is more practical to build a institution, gathering experts around the world to do research of social problems. As for univesity students, colleges can offer some relative courses for them to known more about these kind of things if they want and have the desire to specialize in this field.
Additionaly, while we all want to find solutions to these persistent social problems, we can not lose sight of a fact that social problem in different zones are also different. For example, the conflicts between Pakistan and Isreal are attributed to religion; the contradiction North Korea is facing is because of nuclear weapons; or some countries are tortured by poverty, famine, and maybe HIVA. Without deep understanding of such problems, no efficient solutions can be made. Consequently, I suggest building variety institutions for different kinds of problems, such as religion, racial conflicts, poor etc., to attract different experts to try their best to make contributions to our social preblems.
In sum, as the society is becoming more and more developed, at the same time, we should pay more attention to the increasing social problems, only in this way can way create a brighter and happier future.

sharonyeUID: 2862009

2I cannot full agree with the issue. Engaging the students together to solving problem is a good method. But because of different of culture and value, the students maybe cannot agree with the same opinion(这句话放在这里显得很突兀，感觉下文要论真这个问题，其实有没有提到，既不是主题句，作为例子有限的单一.)

The entire problem should be separate into two parts.
One part is the problems which need all the nations get together to solve （去it）, Such as the human genome project and global warming. Human genome project is a large scientific research project. The goal of the project is to find out the sequence of chemical base pairs which include all the information about the human genetic. This project is an important step for human to research themselves which has involved the United States, the United Kingdom, Japan, France, Germany, China, India, Canada and New Zealand. Global warming is another example. Because of the carbon dioxide of emissions, it has increased the impact of greenhouse gases. The greenhouse gases have an ability of keep the earth warm. As a result, the ice in the North Pole and South pole will be melted and sea level will be rise. How to reduce the greenhouse gases is a global problem. The only way to solve these problems is all nations work together. The students should discuss the measure of these problems.
（这里的衔接不太自然哦，最好些另一方面怎样怎样）Every nation has different state of the economy, so they concern to varied problems. The particular part of problems should not be discussed in the global university. For example, Most Third World nations（查词典是third world countries，嘿嘿） pay more attention to the problem about food and clothing problem while developed country probably focus on technology. In china, Yuan Longping is an agricultural scientist who has developed super hybrid rice. His special rice by using his research makes the production of rice increasing from 400kg per mu to 600kg per mu and the technology has been used in many countries. A lot of Third World nations send their experts to learn the technology to china.
As a matter of fact, it is difficult to get all nations' students together. The demand of university is too high, the language and how to set the curriculum are problems. There will be an argument about the funding. Not every nation has spare money （学习）to support the university. If all the funding supported by developed countries, perhaps the focus of the problems is about high technology instead of the basic problem of living.
In a word, we cannot deny the world social problems should be discussed by all nations. But founding a university is not the only way. We also can communication through the internet and international conference or visiting scholar which has been using today?. From the mode of operation we have now, the communication between nations is effective.
（文章的思路不错，可我感觉段与段之间的衔接有点不自然，注意一下语法吧）