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TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

In today's rapid society, there is a growing public concern over the issue of the destiny of society. The speaker in the title statement gives his opinion that the destiny of society depend on how children are socialized, and we do not know how to raise children who can help bring about a better society. At the first glance, the opinion seems to be somewhat appealing. However, the further reflection tells us that the speaker's opinion is not totally correct, as discussed below.

Admittedly, so important is socialization that we cannot afford to ignore it. I accepted that unless a child have a favorable socialization process, he will not grow up to be a tolerant citizen, as well as a eminent leader. For instance, school is the key place in the process of children’s socialization,. In school, children learn how to communicate, cooperate and respect, these characters will insure children have a sound mind and a healthy personality. When children grow up, these social skills will help them to keep a harmonious relationship between others, and it consequently supply a better society to us. In addition, there is an increasing tendency in our society that we tend to show more respect to the homosexuals, mental- and physical-challenged individuals, and different ethnic and racial groups, and there is also a stronger voice in our world that we need more cooperation cross different countries and religions. Thus, there is no doubt that on no account can we ignore the value of socialization to a child, and it is time our children need a in-depth socialization and use it to solve different problems in the future.

However, important as socialization is, the destiny of society is not totally hinge on how children are socialized. Although socialization is one of the key factors influence the destiny of society, there are many other factors can affect the destiny of society, including people’s religion, ideology and so on. Those who are totally socialized probably have no proper ideology. Hitler is an typically negative example. He have a perfect socialization, is skillful in communication, speech and instigation. But his vicious ideology lead our society fall into a disaster. So, when it comes to the destiny of society ,we should pay more attention to diverse factors.

Although the speaker's first opinion has some flaws, I insist that the speaker's second assertion, "we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society", is absolutely incorrect. Actually, from our behaviors, our children have known how to make a better society, and we no need to intentionally teach them. For example, in 2009, the U.N. Climate Change conference opened in Copenhagen, with more than 15,000 delegates and observers from nearly 200 countries attending what is being billed the last best chance for an agreement to combat global warming. It is no denying that the conference is the contemporary people's endeavor to make a better society. When our children know the conference by the mass media, they will be aware of the importance of climate problem. In the future, they will also combat to the global warming, just like today's us. Therefore, depending on our behaviors to make a better society, our children will inherit our essence and devote themselves to make a better society.

In sum, taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that how children are socialized today is a key factors determines the destiny of society, but not the whole. And we should firmly believe that our children will provide us with a better society.