1。determined,过时英语,应用resolve
2. as is well known/known to all,多余的话
3。nowadays,more and more 常降低句子的质量要少用
4。everyone 这样的词或词组常常使句子结构松散,应尽量避免使用。可以改用one
5。as for me 和i think 同意,不要同时用
6。different people have different views虽然很多人用但是不是很好,可以先提出论题然后说on which opinions are diverse.
目前就发现这些,请大家指正